for The Mind Arts5/16 c1 Natalie4q6
I stumbled upon Storio (storioai dot com) yesterday — really interesting. You can build interactive novels with decision points and art scenes. Check it out if you ever feel stuck writing.
I stumbled upon Storio (storioai dot com) yesterday — really interesting. You can build interactive novels with decision points and art scenes. Check it out if you ever feel stuck writing.
4/23 c3 chriswillis0923
for a smart wizard who can read minds and feelings hes fucking retarded. a grif would be foolish enough to charge ahead into someone else's business but not a Raven. curious sure but smart enough to understand to leave it alone due to a painful death
for a smart wizard who can read minds and feelings hes fucking retarded. a grif would be foolish enough to charge ahead into someone else's business but not a Raven. curious sure but smart enough to understand to leave it alone due to a painful death
4/13 c11 TheLucidGod
...is..is gellert going to be sending our harry a letter
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...most facinating...
...is..is gellert going to be sending our harry a letter
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...most facinating...
2/15 c1 billsazguard
Hello!
I hope you’re doing well! I just read your amazing stories, The Mind Arts, and I really loved them. Your storytelling is impressive, and I think making a comic from your work could help it reach even more people.
I’m a digital artist, and I have experience turning stories into beautiful comics. I would love to work with you on this project! I can adapt each chapter into comic format while keeping your characters and story just as you wrote them.
Since your stories have such great worlds, we can create special art styles for each one, making them unique but still looking good together.
I have some open slots for commissions and would be excited to discuss this more with you. You can check out my portfolio to see my previous work. I always aim to provide high-quality art at fair prices.
If you’re interested, let’s talk on Discord! My username is yushishigawa
and you can also find me on Twitter: blogmepaula
I look forward to hearing from you!
Hello!
I hope you’re doing well! I just read your amazing stories, The Mind Arts, and I really loved them. Your storytelling is impressive, and I think making a comic from your work could help it reach even more people.
I’m a digital artist, and I have experience turning stories into beautiful comics. I would love to work with you on this project! I can adapt each chapter into comic format while keeping your characters and story just as you wrote them.
Since your stories have such great worlds, we can create special art styles for each one, making them unique but still looking good together.
I have some open slots for commissions and would be excited to discuss this more with you. You can check out my portfolio to see my previous work. I always aim to provide high-quality art at fair prices.
If you’re interested, let’s talk on Discord! My username is yushishigawa
and you can also find me on Twitter: blogmepaula
I look forward to hearing from you!
2/7 c18 csadfSf
You are basing this whole plot of serveral chapters on someone dumb enough to memory charm themselves... like honest such a stupid thread that ruins the whole story for last 20k words and like the rest too... massive author fiat to drive plot
You are basing this whole plot of serveral chapters on someone dumb enough to memory charm themselves... like honest such a stupid thread that ruins the whole story for last 20k words and like the rest too... massive author fiat to drive plot
1/27 c9 Slither21
Phew at least you dudnt swap sirius and the rat
Pyrometric shit is ass. Such a bad plot point.
Phew at least you dudnt swap sirius and the rat
Pyrometric shit is ass. Such a bad plot point.
1/27 c8 Slither21
Damn this is a shit reading experience, guess im gonna need to skim over tge next few chapters.
Also i hate how youre swapping sirius and the rat from what it seems
Damn this is a shit reading experience, guess im gonna need to skim over tge next few chapters.
Also i hate how youre swapping sirius and the rat from what it seems
1/27 c5 Slither21
Vanish hermiones arm bones and see if she would want to use it as an excuse lol. I know youre not doing any purposeful bashing so its extra hilarious when i find myself hating characters (hermione and ron so far lol)
Vanish hermiones arm bones and see if she would want to use it as an excuse lol. I know youre not doing any purposeful bashing so its extra hilarious when i find myself hating characters (hermione and ron so far lol)
1/8 c43 LOLxl
I love where i think youre going with this, but i always did like stories about transcending humanity.
I love where i think youre going with this, but i always did like stories about transcending humanity.
12/19/2024 c10 HwaseungOz
“She took their friendship with them as she walked out” is a fantastic line. But I doubt you need anyone to tell you that, you had to have known it was good when you wrote it. I’m enjoying a lot of the small details in this story, and I particularly get a kick out of your version of Trevor. As an amusing side note, I’ve been using my phone to read some chapters aloud so I can multitask. The scene transitions are therefore hilariously overdone, because it reads out the entire “pq pq pq …”
“She took their friendship with them as she walked out” is a fantastic line. But I doubt you need anyone to tell you that, you had to have known it was good when you wrote it. I’m enjoying a lot of the small details in this story, and I particularly get a kick out of your version of Trevor. As an amusing side note, I’ve been using my phone to read some chapters aloud so I can multitask. The scene transitions are therefore hilariously overdone, because it reads out the entire “pq pq pq …”
12/18/2024 c43 
8M-Leman
I want to keep my thoughts brief, especially since I am liable to yap for several paragraphs if I don't keep myself in check.
I found myself coming back to this fic for the third time, and when I was reading the first several chapters, I was asking myself why I never followed or favourited this work. I could vaguely remember reading it before, and I enjoyed rereading it.
Then I got to 4th Year, and my enjoyment dipped a little. The story then somehow both felt rushed and meandering, but I still enjoyed it, for the most part.
Then Voldemort appeared, practically out of the blue, and we found ourselves back in the first scene of the first chapter. And while I felt his resurrection was jarring, I was excited to see where this fic went.
Upon reading the chapters following Voldemort's resurrection, I remembered why I dropped the story twice before.
If I had to give one critique, above all else, it would be that this story has lost its focus. Regardless of how many plot points were being juggled, the first three Years remained largely coherent. The fic lost some of its coherency in 4th Year, and threw it out completely afterwards.
There doesn't seem to be an end goal in mind, both for Harry and the fic itself. Beyond the erroneous goal of 'Kill Voldemort', the plot has lost almost all sense of progression. Several scenes of Harry training with his followers, or talking with Dumbledore, or having a prolonged mental breakdown all blend together, and it's become increasingly difficult to follow.
And maybe this is the point? Harry is in a bad place right now, and I actually really like that about this story. But I think the execution of it is causing potentially hard-hitting moments to miss the mark.
No-one stands up to Harry - not Hermione, not Dumbledore, not even Voldemort. There's no real sense of conflict, outside of vague prophecies and omens. I can barely recall any real fights since Paris, and I'm not even certain if we're in 5th Year or 6th Year. Nothing stands out to me anymore.
The one exception to this, as of now, is Harry and Daphne's relationship. I actually think the way you write them is really fascinating (though some scenes make me think this fic warrants an M rating rather than T). It's heartwarming to read, but you can also tell that they're both doomed because of each other.
I only wish that the other relationships remained as interesting. Harry and Dumbledore used to have a really cool, and UNIQUE, mentor/mentee relationship. While I get that they differ in pretty key ways, their relationship in recent chapters feel shallow in comparison to the first half of the story.
This extends to Harry's relationship with his friends. I can hardly remember anything of importance from Neville, Tracey, or even Hermione (who was set up to be a potential rival) from 4th Year beyond. I get that not every character needs to be a main character - I do - but I enjoyed their dynamic before.
I don't want to come off as someone who gets off on writing hateful reviews. Trust me, I've received them too, and don't like them anymore than you do. Hopefully, I was able to share my critiques in a respectful and legible way.
I'm not the author of this fic. You are. There may be things I missed in this story, or took the wrong meaning from. Still, I wanted to write this because the first half of this fic is up there with my favourites.
I wish you well, and I hope you enjoy writing this story, even if it's no longer for me.
Cheers.
8M-LemanI want to keep my thoughts brief, especially since I am liable to yap for several paragraphs if I don't keep myself in check.
I found myself coming back to this fic for the third time, and when I was reading the first several chapters, I was asking myself why I never followed or favourited this work. I could vaguely remember reading it before, and I enjoyed rereading it.
Then I got to 4th Year, and my enjoyment dipped a little. The story then somehow both felt rushed and meandering, but I still enjoyed it, for the most part.
Then Voldemort appeared, practically out of the blue, and we found ourselves back in the first scene of the first chapter. And while I felt his resurrection was jarring, I was excited to see where this fic went.
Upon reading the chapters following Voldemort's resurrection, I remembered why I dropped the story twice before.
If I had to give one critique, above all else, it would be that this story has lost its focus. Regardless of how many plot points were being juggled, the first three Years remained largely coherent. The fic lost some of its coherency in 4th Year, and threw it out completely afterwards.
There doesn't seem to be an end goal in mind, both for Harry and the fic itself. Beyond the erroneous goal of 'Kill Voldemort', the plot has lost almost all sense of progression. Several scenes of Harry training with his followers, or talking with Dumbledore, or having a prolonged mental breakdown all blend together, and it's become increasingly difficult to follow.
And maybe this is the point? Harry is in a bad place right now, and I actually really like that about this story. But I think the execution of it is causing potentially hard-hitting moments to miss the mark.
No-one stands up to Harry - not Hermione, not Dumbledore, not even Voldemort. There's no real sense of conflict, outside of vague prophecies and omens. I can barely recall any real fights since Paris, and I'm not even certain if we're in 5th Year or 6th Year. Nothing stands out to me anymore.
The one exception to this, as of now, is Harry and Daphne's relationship. I actually think the way you write them is really fascinating (though some scenes make me think this fic warrants an M rating rather than T). It's heartwarming to read, but you can also tell that they're both doomed because of each other.
I only wish that the other relationships remained as interesting. Harry and Dumbledore used to have a really cool, and UNIQUE, mentor/mentee relationship. While I get that they differ in pretty key ways, their relationship in recent chapters feel shallow in comparison to the first half of the story.
This extends to Harry's relationship with his friends. I can hardly remember anything of importance from Neville, Tracey, or even Hermione (who was set up to be a potential rival) from 4th Year beyond. I get that not every character needs to be a main character - I do - but I enjoyed their dynamic before.
I don't want to come off as someone who gets off on writing hateful reviews. Trust me, I've received them too, and don't like them anymore than you do. Hopefully, I was able to share my critiques in a respectful and legible way.
I'm not the author of this fic. You are. There may be things I missed in this story, or took the wrong meaning from. Still, I wanted to write this because the first half of this fic is up there with my favourites.
I wish you well, and I hope you enjoy writing this story, even if it's no longer for me.
Cheers.