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2/5/2018 c1 PAWPATROLRULE
Enjoying the taste of your own medicine? It's your own goddam fault.
2/2/2018 c1 Critics Divided
ATTENTION ALL DECENT PEOPLE: The crusade has begun, we're going to get rid of this toxic influence at all costs! Bombard every story with reviews! Abuse reports for every chapter! Create as many accounts as possible and clog this fraud's inbox with PMs. We will drive this cancer off whatever it takes, so get to it!

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1/14/2018 c1 Guest
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(What?)
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1/10/2018 c1 Just Some Guy
In all my time on here never have I seen someone so hated that there is a story about how terrible they are I mean that takes skill but he brings up good points you are a snitch but your also a cunt
1/6/2018 c2 ViolAtions
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12/24/2017 c2 More niggers
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12/24/2017 c2 Nigger
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12/24/2017 c2 Damnregulations
No more champagne
And the fireworks are through
Here we are, me and you
Feeling lost and feeling blue
It's the end of the party
And the morning seems so grey
So unlike yesterday
Now's the time for us to say...

Happy new year
Happy new year
May we all have a vision now and then
Of a world where every neighbour is a friend
Happy new year
Happy new year
May we all have our hopes, our will to try
If we don't we might as well lay down and die
You and I

Sometimes I see
How the brave new world arrives
And I see how it thrives
In the ashes of our lives
Oh yes, man is a fool
And he thinks he'll be okay
Dragging on, feet of clay
Never knowing he's astray
Keeps on going anyway...

Happy new year
Happy new year
May we all have a vision now and then
Of a world where every neighbour is a friend
Happy new year
Happy new year
May we all have our hopes, our will to try
If we don't we might as well lay down and die
You and I

Seems to me now
That the dreams we had before
Are all dead, nothing more
Than confetti on the floor
It's the end of a decade
In another ten years time
Who can say what we'll find
What lies waiting down the line
In the end of eighty-nine...

Happy new year
Happy new year
May we all have a vision now and then
Of a world where every neighbour is a friend
Happy new year
Happy new year
May we all have our hopes, our will to try
If we don't we might as well lay down and die
You and I
12/13/2017 c1 133rebecca-in-blue
Hi there, here from Review Tag, and despite being familiar with Zootopia, I found this story pretty hard to follow. The opening paragraphs about Skye felt very bland. "Skye lived in a badly maintained house" is a kinda boring first line, and it has nothing to do with what follows. I get the impression that maybe you meant to establish the scene, but then forgot about it. The descriptions of Skye working on the missing mammal case are very telly and add up to a whole lot of descriptions right at the beginning. We don't actually see a scene until Jack shows up.

I had a hard time getting a handle on the focus or plot of this story; it opens with long descriptions of Skye as if she's going to be the main character, but then she's very abruptly killed off. (The scene of her death felt pretty odd to read. From "her consciousness gave out," I'm guessing that Jack choked her to death, but I wonder why you wouldn't describe that happening.) Then we're rushed into Jack and Judy's wedding, and I really can't make sense of that, either. "Judy loved Nick Wilde," "she didn't seem to care" about Jack, so what is she doing marrying him? "her extremely long pause" implies that she clearly doesn't want to. Is the story supposed to be about Jack and Judy, or the missing mammals case? There are a lot of threads left dangling in this chapter - corruption in Zootopia, Nick missing, all 150 of Judy's siblings missing? - and I think the story needs more cohesion. I really can't even tell if it's meant to be AU or not.

There are several SPaG errors throughout this story, mainly comma splices, especially near the beginning, and a few incorrect dialogue tags. "Wedding?{"} {s}he said. When I reached Bogo's "You may now kiss the bridge," I assumed it was another typo, not a misspeak on his part. (I'm not sure if it makes sense to confuse bridge and bride?)
12/13/2017 c2 kys
Well, this was disappointing
12/13/2017 c2 2BloodiestKnight
Let's start off with a bit of criticism, to be honest to you as a writer and as a reader.
- The whole story of "too shy to admit but ended up romancing and maybe... maybe ends up in further" has been done to death. Literally. Search any famous anime shipping and you're bound to find at least five of these.
- Erm, so is the whole storyhook about one missing bunny? And then they forget it all out of a sudden? Is this just a bump or a hook? You left it descriptive like a hook, but ended up subtle as a bump.
- Again, mating-troubles are done to death, search any famous anime shipping but set the storyfilter as T (or M if you're brave).
- Couldn't help but notice the description. No Jack Savage in this story as I see. And I would like to see him.
- "How to set up your own dystopian government"? Is that a strategy guide or a politics book? Strategy guides are usually like this: "Age of Empires - GameSpot Strategy Guide".
- Sorry to say this, but again, the nerd being shunned to find love (even if minor arc) is also done to death. Search the romantic comedy genre of movies (or maybe even fanfics) and you'll find at least one.
- I've watched Zootopia once and I find extremely hard to believe Nick is so open-minded here. He is not bad at the end of the movie, but he's still quite ambiguous.
- So the plot is about day-to-day situations? I honestly thought I was seeing romantic comedy but it's now some schooling stuff.
- What...? They just got invited to a Titanic of sorts out of nowhere? I mean, ik it's Gazelle, who they saved, but they don't file any documents or anything? Never went to cruises, but I assume that's how it works.
LAST CRITICISM NOTES: You really need to get a grip on your story, otherwise it will become a flurry mess of multiple arcs you can't handle. As soon as you start developing the characters, roll with, at maximum, three arcs. My recommendation.

Now, for the things that I liked:
- I love how you made Nick protective and a cool guy instead of predative and jerk. Yes, I said I'd find hard to believe he was open-minded because I thought he'd hesitate a little. But this time, you flanked me.
- I also love how they recall story from the movies. See, lots of people just get absorbed into their own world that their characters do nonsense things. Not here, though, and this is very good.
- Again, loving how you remember Judy being so affective. I'd just suggest you just make some lines detailing each of the things she did for the siblings and skip up ahead to the meat of the story, else it'll be a lot of open-ended hooks.
- I like how Gazelle prizes them, and not just leaves it "meh" like the movie, which I thought it was a big plothole, for me at least. I mean, still thought they had to do some legal stuff, but meh, I'll roll with it.
- Spelling is perfect. No errors, at least that I saw. A big 10/10.
LAST PRO NOTES: Learn with your errors and make the pros bigger using this review as a base. This story has a huge potential and I believe you can do it and make this good.
12/12/2017 c2 Hey Hey Hey
What a bucket of shit
12/12/2017 c2 Violations
I said that I'm a ride for my motherfucking niggas,
Most likely I'm a die with my finger on the trigger
I've been grinding outside, all day with my niggas
And I ain't going in, unless I'm with my nigga
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My nigga, my nigga (My nigga, my nigga)
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This rap shit crack, then I involve my niggas
You looking for some lean, let me call my nigga
He sell it for the high, I need all my niggas
Some nigga smoke, smoke, some nigga drink, drink
Got niggas on the block with the glock they don't think
That's a nigga back up, they in the bucket lapped up
I got that act right if you niggas wanna act up
He talking like a snitch, no that ain't my nigga
He tripping off a bitch, no, that ain't my nigga
Take a nigga case, shit, that's my nigga
Know him since I was 8, yeah, that's my nigga
Fucked my first bitch passed her to my nigga
Hit my first lick pass with my nigga
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Most likely I'm a die with my finger on the trigger
I've been grinding outside, all day with my niggas
And I ain't going in, unless I'm with my nigga
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We used to hit up wall and buy everything we see
Me and my down ass nigga getting twisted
Nigga get to tripping knock the gravy, out your biscuit
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So when I see you out I'm like hey, my nigga
Tried to act right, buy the case my niggas
Drink the act right and get straight with my niggas
Me and my nigga riding dirty, tryna chase them figures
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I said that I'm a ride for my motherfucking niggas,
Most likely I'm a die with my finger on the trigger
I've been grinding outside, all day with my niggas
And I ain't going in, unless I'm with my nigga
My nigga, my nigga
My nigga, my nigga (YG, my nigga)
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And I'm still hittin' licks, my nigga, my nigga
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I fuck a nigga bitch with my nigga, my nigga
If a nigga talking shit then he ain't my nigga
My nigga, my nigga
YG my nigga and I ain't going in they
Tryna leave my nigga, shawty see me and wanna leave with a nigga
But it wasn't enough room 'cause I came with my niggas
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And I'm all about my business like a suit and tie, nigga
I'll ride for my niggas believe that

I said that I'm a ride for my motherfucking niggas,
Most likely I'm a die with my finger on the trigger
I been grinding outside, all day with my niggas
And I ain't going in, unless I'm with my nigga
My nigga, my nigga
My nigga, my nigga (My motherfucking niggas)
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12/11/2017 c1 Guest
Excuse me, could you notify the Copyright Infringement group of this infringement case. www ... fanfiction .. s / 12756178 / 2 / Hetalia - Souls - Revealed

The author uses copyrighted song lyrics throughout. I warned them about it, even pointed out that the copyright holders could get notified, yet the review seems to have gotten deleted, and the author updated with a new chapter with more song lyrics.
12/10/2017 c1 1Adam McCann
Incredibly confused as to the plot. Nick was dead, there was no flashback warning if this even is a flashback, and I thought Jack married Judy. Sequence of events don't make sense. Incredibly dull, no emotion whatsoever, and most of all, this has no correlation to the TITLE AND SUMMARY OF THE STORY.

Stop criticizing others works if yours follows the same errors. That's hypocrisy.
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