for How did it come to this?4/10/2021 c14 82Lilou
Love it Dom! Really enjoyed this chapter. Defo like to see what his parents are up to with there search for him
Love it Dom! Really enjoyed this chapter. Defo like to see what his parents are up to with there search for him
11/5/2020 c11 voidme457
You can definitely write a fantastic story! I'm so looking forward to the next chapter.
You can definitely write a fantastic story! I'm so looking forward to the next chapter.
12/26/2019 c10 
4AnsemD
Oh man, I desperately want to read the next chapter...Good thing I know where I can find a little preview. Awesome work, I really enjoy every moment of this serious. Please keep up this great work and finish it, your reader deserve this!
4AnsemDOh man, I desperately want to read the next chapter...Good thing I know where I can find a little preview. Awesome work, I really enjoy every moment of this serious. Please keep up this great work and finish it, your reader deserve this!
12/26/2019 c9 AnsemD
I love the turn of the events it is taking. We have meet the biker and the police, now we just need to learn who's who in this rural town. I'm definitely eager to find out how this whole story will continue. You surely did a great job with this chapter, that's for sure.
I love the turn of the events it is taking. We have meet the biker and the police, now we just need to learn who's who in this rural town. I'm definitely eager to find out how this whole story will continue. You surely did a great job with this chapter, that's for sure.
12/22/2019 c8 AnsemD
Nice, very nice. I love to follow Charles on his way to wherever it may take him, also we know that it is not looking too good for him where he is in the present. But that's his story and you go all the way with it. This is no half-assed attempt and that's what I like, the idea of a writer and how he proceeds his goal by delivering a story to the audiance. By the way, it's a very fitting title as well.
Please keep up the good work.
Nice, very nice. I love to follow Charles on his way to wherever it may take him, also we know that it is not looking too good for him where he is in the present. But that's his story and you go all the way with it. This is no half-assed attempt and that's what I like, the idea of a writer and how he proceeds his goal by delivering a story to the audiance. By the way, it's a very fitting title as well.
Please keep up the good work.
12/21/2019 c7 AnsemD
A fantastic chapter! I loved every part of it without exception and as much as I would love to see Lydia and Charles together, my guess is that you have different plans for the two of them. No matter how it will turn iut, I would love to read the end of this story.
I noticed some minor mistakes but nothing crucial. If you need a beta reader or editor, just ask. I would gladly help you out. Keep up the great work! No, really. Please keep it up, I really want to hear the end of this story.
A fantastic chapter! I loved every part of it without exception and as much as I would love to see Lydia and Charles together, my guess is that you have different plans for the two of them. No matter how it will turn iut, I would love to read the end of this story.
I noticed some minor mistakes but nothing crucial. If you need a beta reader or editor, just ask. I would gladly help you out. Keep up the great work! No, really. Please keep it up, I really want to hear the end of this story.
12/20/2019 c6 AnsemD
Very nice chapter! I especially like the chemistry between Lydia, Charles, and Kathy. On the other hand, I'm also curious how far the search on Zootopia side will progress or if they will find Charles in the end. So many questions but just so few chapters left. Well, let's see what happens next.
Very nice chapter! I especially like the chemistry between Lydia, Charles, and Kathy. On the other hand, I'm also curious how far the search on Zootopia side will progress or if they will find Charles in the end. So many questions but just so few chapters left. Well, let's see what happens next.
12/20/2019 c5 AnsemD
Puuh...that's difficult...because I really, really, really liked the chapter. I loved the training, the fight, the first recording, the repair session of the two brothers and even the little hustle at the end...and believe me, I did my best to stretch my suspension of disbelief as far as I could but even that wasn't enough. I would understand Charles's behavior if he had done something so terrible, maybe by accident, that would have hurt or even killed someone. Something that would have been so devastating for Charly that he couldn't face his parents and siblings anymore. But that wasn't the case and I waited for something like this since I read the title of the chapter, I waited for something terrible to happen. I feared it would happen during the fight(Charles killed his opponent and he can't face Nick after he promised not to raise his paw again - yes I know, Nick made the promise in another context with Charles but it would have worked for me) or during their ride to the recording session or during the hustle(where they come in contact with real thugs, who claim that they hustle on their turf. Tiberius is injured and Charles can't do anything to help him).
All in all, I will definitely continue this story but as I told you, I would be honest with you if something bugs me.
Puuh...that's difficult...because I really, really, really liked the chapter. I loved the training, the fight, the first recording, the repair session of the two brothers and even the little hustle at the end...and believe me, I did my best to stretch my suspension of disbelief as far as I could but even that wasn't enough. I would understand Charles's behavior if he had done something so terrible, maybe by accident, that would have hurt or even killed someone. Something that would have been so devastating for Charly that he couldn't face his parents and siblings anymore. But that wasn't the case and I waited for something like this since I read the title of the chapter, I waited for something terrible to happen. I feared it would happen during the fight(Charles killed his opponent and he can't face Nick after he promised not to raise his paw again - yes I know, Nick made the promise in another context with Charles but it would have worked for me) or during their ride to the recording session or during the hustle(where they come in contact with real thugs, who claim that they hustle on their turf. Tiberius is injured and Charles can't do anything to help him).
All in all, I will definitely continue this story but as I told you, I would be honest with you if something bugs me.