
8/20/2010 c1
40Kaiser Washington
Dumb ending. The angst was building up well until you killed it all with the last line. Impromptu fluff much? I would also add that your author's notes killed some potentially poignant/well written lines. Way to ruin a story.

Dumb ending. The angst was building up well until you killed it all with the last line. Impromptu fluff much? I would also add that your author's notes killed some potentially poignant/well written lines. Way to ruin a story.
3/23/2003 c1
16sky75rk
umm...
...I THOUGHT YOU LIKED SENKOSH?
question..: did sen leave kosh or kosh left sen?
girl, you're breaking my heart...

umm...
...I THOUGHT YOU LIKED SENKOSH?
question..: did sen leave kosh or kosh left sen?
girl, you're breaking my heart...
3/22/2003 c1 leviathan
Not bad... I dont' normally read FujiSen, don't know what came over me today... ah well, nice one! Gambatte ne, write more!
-Levi-
(Leviathan)
Not bad... I dont' normally read FujiSen, don't know what came over me today... ah well, nice one! Gambatte ne, write more!
-Levi-
(Leviathan)