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3/16/2019 c1 2RaymondTylerkarwacki
Not bad very interesting
1/13/2018 c1 243Travis the Arthur fan
So far so good
1/12/2018 c1 15MLPStevenUniverseLPS
This is a really interesting concept! Awesome story...

Although I can see you improving a bit IF you want...

Here are some critiques:

More Info needed - Try explaining why Buster was walking and to where and what he had on his mind. Do that for each character.

Out Of Character - Buster acted differently then he would on the show asking Molly to beat up someone. Why?

More Description - Describe all the characters and actions. You could detail facial expressions... And like I said before tell us more about her feelings as Buster told her what happened.

Meaning - Give the story a meaning... For example Molly has changed and become a good person. No longer a bully... She could confront the older bullies and detail to them what they had done and how it affected her as well as how she had learned and .

Up to you. I hope you write more.

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