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2/18/2018 c2 Orangerules
This is to short to tell a cohesive or decent story. Stories this short have no characterization and jump all over the place expecting the reader to try fill in the very large gaps. You need to significantly lengthening the chapters, literally make them 20 times longer. Also the human going into Zootopia has been overdone and the majority of the characters tend to a self insert Mary Sue or Gary Stu. Any original character you make needs to have flaws and fit into the world.
2/16/2018 c2 2Chlaco
Man I have gotta make these chapters longer
1/14/2018 c1 8smexyking107
Can't Wait to see how these soldiers will survive once their in Zootopia!
Just a suggestion
1. You should develop a personality for each character that you intend to bring to Zootopia
I can't wait to see how they cope and where the story will go (:
1/14/2018 c1 awsome story
This is amazing hope to see more
1/14/2018 c1 2LukhasMD
Well, you caught my interest my dude.
Cant wait for the next chapter.
although there is no Zootopia elements yet.
But besides we can't judge a book from the first Chapter.
1/13/2018 c1 49Wildebunny the Eternal
This isn't about Zootopia yet, and human inserts yet again. It also contains badly formatted dialogue.

Off to a fantastic start for a bad fanfic.

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