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11/11/2021 c2 i am an assholee
that was the grossest explicit scene in the world. have some class and write it better you pathetic weirdo ...
9/14/2019 c1 66DMChumble
Okay so like, Verdona is The mother of Both Carl and Frank. Not just Frank. She is BOTH Ben and Gwen's Grandmother, and previously was Married to Max. Probably still is.
5/3/2019 c1 donovandelaney26101
Ben don't have a sorcerer form. Ben would have scanned Gwen. Ben would have five Anodite forms. Ben can change his gender. Only three of his Anodite forms are trans female. One of those Anodite forms is green.
6/14/2018 c3 2one winged nightmare
Very sweet and endearing. Something one learns as a father is that no matter what happens you love and cherish your children. Especially because they all too quickly grow up.
2/15/2018 c3 29bearhow
Wow that was a happy ending. So in the end it was Gwen’s choice that saved Kenny.
Long haired girl and Ben?
Ew, just . . . Ew.
2/13/2018 c3 36Car45
Awesome chapter. You did an amazing job showing how deeply Ben cares for both of them. And of course no matter what happens Gwen will always be by his side.
Bravo my friend.
2/12/2018 c3 Meazm
This is beautiful! Kind of hope there are epilogue where Kenny is become older.
2/12/2018 c3 20jettmanas
Strong opening, with Eliot calling out Ben on his morals (including lying) and actions, while also warning him of possible prison. Good transition to the Circus Freak partnership, and the intense scene w/them dealing w/Vilgax worshipers. Solid conflict at home w/Ben holed up in the lab & being out messing w/his relationship w/Gwen.

One small fix-
I promise.(")

Surprising scene with Frightwig at home. And a positive change in Ben's routine to spend time w/the family. Nice mention of visitors, as well as the end of the Vilgax worshipers, thanks to SECT. And the virus dying out works great. Enjoyed the story. Thanks for wrapping it up!
2/12/2018 c3 11Loki God of Evil
Wow, that was an extreme chapter with highs and lows and highs again. Quite nervous being told that he couldn't do any more vigilantism because if he did, he'd risk being put away behind bars possibly.
So then, he accepts what SECT say and is then coerced by another, I liked that part.

Just goes to show that even within an agency as large and well known as SECT there are still factions within that will have their own secret agendas.

Glad Ben was able to get some empathy from Alan Allbright too, least that guy knows what Ben's baby is going through.
And Gwen blaming herself, I had a feeling she would come to regret her decision, sooner rather than later.

Honestly, I thought that with her mind tricks, that Frieda would end up getting Ben to sleep with her...maybe you could do an alternate ending where he sleeps with her and then kills her in the morning lol.

All in all, nice ending to a good AU and different timeline to your main story.
2/12/2018 c3 jasongd
Soob Soob great story Soob and great ending Soob congrats

BWEN Forever
2/12/2018 c3 AzureTemplar3535
I like the ending.
2/12/2018 c3 15Aurora Nightstar
I greatly enjoyed this chapter. I loved Eliot’s humor in the beginning. Yes, Ben went pretty dark in this, which is understandable where that comes from given the circumstances. But I am glad he was able to overcome it for Gwen. I am glad he didn’t have a fling with Figwig. It was sweet that it didn’t have to cure the virus to have a happy ending. I like the mana bubbles playing and that friends and family could look past outward appearances and love Kenny anyway. Very good job.
2/12/2018 c1 Guest
Frieda reminded me of frieza for some reasons. Also, I was really hoping for a hardcore explicit scene between Ben and frightwig, but I think you did well by not doing it, since it's the last chapter.

Looking forward for ch5 of watch boy and witch girls.

Also, have you heard of kuro the artist's 5 YEARS LATER comic ? XP
2/12/2018 c3 Guest
This ch3 and the fact that this timeline will cameo in the prime timeline of your fanfic just... made my day.
2/12/2018 c3 7csg-III
Frieda reminded me of frieza for some reasons. Also, I was really hoping for a hardcore explicit scene between Ben and frightwig, but I think you did well by not doing it, since it's the last chapter.

Looking forward for ch5 of watch boy and witch girls.

Also, have you heard of kuro the artist's 5 YEARS LATER comic ? XP

Author's reply:

* Thanks for the review!
* Frieda is the name Frightwig uses in the Reboot episode "All Wet" (Yes, I like the Reboot XD)
* Oh, I wouldn't have Ben cheating on Gwen, especially not here where they are married and have a kid. But I could do BenxFrightwig in a different context/timeline.
* Yes, now that this is finished, I'll fully focus on WB&WG.
* Yes, I've read some of it. It's a very nicely done fan-comic (if I could draw like Kuro, I'd turn my main series into a fan-comic too XD). My only complaint is that it follows UAF/OV continuity where Gwen is with Kevin XD
* Why don't you create an account and send me a PM?
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