for Misadventures of a broken Sword4/29/2020 c1 
5Soda-fiedPsycho
Mittelt... not having openings to exploit?
That's unusual, considering 90% of Fallen Angels, and none of the Fallen Angels except those who sided with Kokabiel and Kokabiel himself, are good warriors.
5Soda-fiedPsychoMittelt... not having openings to exploit?
That's unusual, considering 90% of Fallen Angels, and none of the Fallen Angels except those who sided with Kokabiel and Kokabiel himself, are good warriors.
2/16/2020 c1 Heyo
I know this is based on stupid harem almost porn, but is it really necessary to describe the bust size of teenage females. Maybe if you're writing a squicky pervert who you want to drop kick it's acceptable as in text description, but otherwise it's just gratuitous and kind of demeaning.
Like if it's Shirou having a "wow she's got a rack" moment then fine whatever, I'm a guy I can confirm those thoughts happen. But the description itself mentioning it implies that a characters chest size is integral to their introduction. It would be like every male character introduced having a line about the size of their bulge. Not really necessary unless you're writing porn.
Anyway other than that I'm enjoying it.
I know this is based on stupid harem almost porn, but is it really necessary to describe the bust size of teenage females. Maybe if you're writing a squicky pervert who you want to drop kick it's acceptable as in text description, but otherwise it's just gratuitous and kind of demeaning.
Like if it's Shirou having a "wow she's got a rack" moment then fine whatever, I'm a guy I can confirm those thoughts happen. But the description itself mentioning it implies that a characters chest size is integral to their introduction. It would be like every male character introduced having a line about the size of their bulge. Not really necessary unless you're writing porn.
Anyway other than that I'm enjoying it.
1/7/2020 c2 yuuji1
(Any mistake, it's because of the shit translator). I have read many fanfics of all kinds. I am surprised how well you have done it. Good job, and I hope you don't abandon history, as many do. Greetings, I will support you.
(Any mistake, it's because of the shit translator). I have read many fanfics of all kinds. I am surprised how well you have done it. Good job, and I hope you don't abandon history, as many do. Greetings, I will support you.
12/21/2019 c7 Shade
Nice chapter. Nothing wrong with what you have decided. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Nice chapter. Nothing wrong with what you have decided. Looking forward to the next chapter.
11/30/2019 c6 Jose19
Grayfia by the way is not a thousand years of yet, and by all standards the woman isn’t a adult.
The 1000th year is the coming of adulthood for a Devil they usually do a ceremony for a Devil for reaching it.
Grayfia by the way is not a thousand years of yet, and by all standards the woman isn’t a adult.
The 1000th year is the coming of adulthood for a Devil they usually do a ceremony for a Devil for reaching it.
10/9/2019 c7 Guest
I actually think Shirou is in a pretty fair place strength-wise. He’s not a powerhouse unto himself. Most of his strength is derived from Unlimited Blade Works and the weapons within (and the fake skills he gets from them).
However, it does seem as though you’ve put Fate (and it’s characters) below those of DxD in terms of power. Which is a bit silly, considering Heroic Spirits were often more than capable of going toe-to-toe with power Phantasmal and Divine beings. Take Azazel, for example. At least from Shirou’s point of view, he’s far beyond any Servant. And yet Gilgamesh would probably demolish him (though it’s a bad matchup, Enkidu and all).
Otherwise I’m thoroughly enjoying this story. It’s very well written, though it sometimes feels a bit sparse on the details side of things.
I actually think Shirou is in a pretty fair place strength-wise. He’s not a powerhouse unto himself. Most of his strength is derived from Unlimited Blade Works and the weapons within (and the fake skills he gets from them).
However, it does seem as though you’ve put Fate (and it’s characters) below those of DxD in terms of power. Which is a bit silly, considering Heroic Spirits were often more than capable of going toe-to-toe with power Phantasmal and Divine beings. Take Azazel, for example. At least from Shirou’s point of view, he’s far beyond any Servant. And yet Gilgamesh would probably demolish him (though it’s a bad matchup, Enkidu and all).
Otherwise I’m thoroughly enjoying this story. It’s very well written, though it sometimes feels a bit sparse on the details side of things.
10/5/2019 c7 GAchaRage
Damn it! Shirou was being nerfed too much. Please make him stronger, those trash from dxd shouldnt capable to come close to his power.
Damn it! Shirou was being nerfed too much. Please make him stronger, those trash from dxd shouldnt capable to come close to his power.
9/18/2019 c7 2theMoon
I like what you are doing here. The story is well written and very much enjoyable, i want more. So Im definitely favoring and following this. Hope you update soon since you are getting popular.
I like what you are doing here. The story is well written and very much enjoyable, i want more. So Im definitely favoring and following this. Hope you update soon since you are getting popular.
9/18/2019 c3 1Huntsman331
Firstly, the Chains Of Heaven should've been in Shirou's arsenal, as Gilgamesh used it during his fight with Berserker, that was a high stake situation where Shirou could've been easy killed by a stray sword, so he must have turned on trace. I'm not sure if Gilgamesh used it in the fight with Shirou, but if he did, there's even less reason for it to not be in UBW. Secondly, you do realise OG!Shirou has only ever missed a single shot using traditional japanese bow, do you, and that was him actively trying to miss? He was never taught anything about bow prior to that, so I find it puzzling that he'd have trouble shooting a European longbow. Seriously, they're not even all that different.
1Huntsman331Firstly, the Chains Of Heaven should've been in Shirou's arsenal, as Gilgamesh used it during his fight with Berserker, that was a high stake situation where Shirou could've been easy killed by a stray sword, so he must have turned on trace. I'm not sure if Gilgamesh used it in the fight with Shirou, but if he did, there's even less reason for it to not be in UBW. Secondly, you do realise OG!Shirou has only ever missed a single shot using traditional japanese bow, do you, and that was him actively trying to miss? He was never taught anything about bow prior to that, so I find it puzzling that he'd have trouble shooting a European longbow. Seriously, they're not even all that different.
9/18/2019 c2 Huntsman331
Isn't Miltelt a two winged fallen? Why would anyone be surprised Shirou beat her? She's like the lowliest of scurbs in the DxD universe, Raynare is stronger than her and she was beaten by early!Issei.
Isn't Miltelt a two winged fallen? Why would anyone be surprised Shirou beat her? She's like the lowliest of scurbs in the DxD universe, Raynare is stronger than her and she was beaten by early!Issei.
9/18/2019 c1 Huntsman331
When you say beyond servant, I'm unsure whether you meant Mana only, or that he's physically stronger than servants. I could understand Mana, since servants rely heavily on their Masters for Mana ti substance themselves, not to mention the degradetion they suffer at the hand of Gaia, but if it's their actual battle power, I have several points I feel like I'm obliged to make.
When you say beyond servant, I'm unsure whether you meant Mana only, or that he's physically stronger than servants. I could understand Mana, since servants rely heavily on their Masters for Mana ti substance themselves, not to mention the degradetion they suffer at the hand of Gaia, but if it's their actual battle power, I have several points I feel like I'm obliged to make.