for A Godfather's Promise1/30 c29 BorisCresnov
Amazing story! Love what you have written so far! Love the Harem and the BDSM parts of the story! Are you sticking with just the 4 girls or are you going to add a few more. Personally I think Hermione and maybe the twins would be good. Would love to see and ready the completed story sometime soon.
Amazing story! Love what you have written so far! Love the Harem and the BDSM parts of the story! Are you sticking with just the 4 girls or are you going to add a few more. Personally I think Hermione and maybe the twins would be good. Would love to see and ready the completed story sometime soon.
1/20 c8 Apple424
This is very wholesome and im loving it I didn’t expect it wirh the whole bdsm thing but this is great.
This is very wholesome and im loving it I didn’t expect it wirh the whole bdsm thing but this is great.
12/25/2024 c29 
1bleachorange
Well, it seems like the resolution at least has arrived. Overall, a good coverage of many kinks in this realm of sexuality so far. I may have been harsh at points in my reviews, but it came from a place of passion, so I hope it didnt bother the author too greatly beyond the point I was communicating. The story overall is very good.
For those in the reviews who feel harry has agreed to share daphne around, I disagree. It might happen (Im not writing the story, after all) but this was daphne explaining a long list of repressed fantasies. The funny thing about fantasies, particularly sexual fantasies, is that the person may not want to actually indulge in all of them, but is excited by the IDEA of them, to fulfill an emotional need. I suspect that if daphne actually followed through with getting shared around publically she would shortly thereafter greatly regret it, possibly even going into suicidal thoughts if she was publicly humiliated and it affected her reputation (not to mention how Lord Greengrass would take Harrys treatment of his daughter). Yes, she is fighting against lifelong expectations but this is still only an aspect of her identity as the author has made sure Harry has shown. What good would it do to indulge in her repressed side, only to destroy the rest of the person she is? She is already being passed around and allowed to enjoy her humiliation fetish among the rest of harrys women and harry himself. This is very likely enough for her already, though she may wish to test boundaries in small ways later. Another aspect of this is what the others in the relationship want. You see this already with susan unable to give daphne this in the past, and harry making sure she remembers the good things about herself here as well. I would be very surprised if harry, who is written as a possessive dominant, would share one of his girls with other men. It is something that happens in real life relationships sometimes, but I dont think the dragon here would share his hoard of lovely ladies.
So I got sidetracked with a little bit of a rebuttal to a previous review on what was written versus what they took away from it. I do hope to see what happens with the group over the next few weeks, and then especially upon their return to grimmauld place and the conflict that is the weasleys thats just waiting to happen. Obviously, hermione has some things to talk about, and I am interested to see if tonks falls into trusted friend who knows or if she is secretly being prepped for future kink unveiling (as she has been written several years closer to harry in age, and he is her best friend so she will need resolution one way or another).
1bleachorangeWell, it seems like the resolution at least has arrived. Overall, a good coverage of many kinks in this realm of sexuality so far. I may have been harsh at points in my reviews, but it came from a place of passion, so I hope it didnt bother the author too greatly beyond the point I was communicating. The story overall is very good.
For those in the reviews who feel harry has agreed to share daphne around, I disagree. It might happen (Im not writing the story, after all) but this was daphne explaining a long list of repressed fantasies. The funny thing about fantasies, particularly sexual fantasies, is that the person may not want to actually indulge in all of them, but is excited by the IDEA of them, to fulfill an emotional need. I suspect that if daphne actually followed through with getting shared around publically she would shortly thereafter greatly regret it, possibly even going into suicidal thoughts if she was publicly humiliated and it affected her reputation (not to mention how Lord Greengrass would take Harrys treatment of his daughter). Yes, she is fighting against lifelong expectations but this is still only an aspect of her identity as the author has made sure Harry has shown. What good would it do to indulge in her repressed side, only to destroy the rest of the person she is? She is already being passed around and allowed to enjoy her humiliation fetish among the rest of harrys women and harry himself. This is very likely enough for her already, though she may wish to test boundaries in small ways later. Another aspect of this is what the others in the relationship want. You see this already with susan unable to give daphne this in the past, and harry making sure she remembers the good things about herself here as well. I would be very surprised if harry, who is written as a possessive dominant, would share one of his girls with other men. It is something that happens in real life relationships sometimes, but I dont think the dragon here would share his hoard of lovely ladies.
So I got sidetracked with a little bit of a rebuttal to a previous review on what was written versus what they took away from it. I do hope to see what happens with the group over the next few weeks, and then especially upon their return to grimmauld place and the conflict that is the weasleys thats just waiting to happen. Obviously, hermione has some things to talk about, and I am interested to see if tonks falls into trusted friend who knows or if she is secretly being prepped for future kink unveiling (as she has been written several years closer to harry in age, and he is her best friend so she will need resolution one way or another).
12/24/2024 c27 bleachorange
While I understand the position of building bridges, Harry is being an absolute pussy when it comes to daphne. You have written him into a spot where he is AGAIN going out of character to serve some weird plot point you want to make, likely for whatever kink youve cooked up for daphne. I sure as shit agreed with fleur last chapter when daphne showed up and started ordering harrys other wives around like servants. I would not have stood for that shit. There is a difference between being thick skinned for yourself and being a doormat that doesnt protect your family in their own home.
While I understand the position of building bridges, Harry is being an absolute pussy when it comes to daphne. You have written him into a spot where he is AGAIN going out of character to serve some weird plot point you want to make, likely for whatever kink youve cooked up for daphne. I sure as shit agreed with fleur last chapter when daphne showed up and started ordering harrys other wives around like servants. I would not have stood for that shit. There is a difference between being thick skinned for yourself and being a doormat that doesnt protect your family in their own home.
12/24/2024 c25 bleachorange
Its definitely better when your original plot doesnt touch into societal implications as strongly. The prose is excellent, as always. I do think some of the description of the skittishness of both sides after susan showed up could be improved. It initially felt like you described her as a ghost that they couldnt find, which was really weird for someone who just got there and knew the place less well. I realize now that wasnt the intent, but it was my initial impression.
Its definitely better when your original plot doesnt touch into societal implications as strongly. The prose is excellent, as always. I do think some of the description of the skittishness of both sides after susan showed up could be improved. It initially felt like you described her as a ghost that they couldnt find, which was really weird for someone who just got there and knew the place less well. I realize now that wasnt the intent, but it was my initial impression.
12/24/2024 c23 bleachorange
If wizarding society is as bad as you have represented, it would have collapsed in favor of voldemort long ago. I'm just happy the nonsense appears to be over for now. I dont really expect smut with plot to have the best plot around, due to how it often serves the needs of the smut, but its gotten distracting with how caricaturized its been since the end of year 4.
If wizarding society is as bad as you have represented, it would have collapsed in favor of voldemort long ago. I'm just happy the nonsense appears to be over for now. I dont really expect smut with plot to have the best plot around, due to how it often serves the needs of the smut, but its gotten distracting with how caricaturized its been since the end of year 4.
12/24/2024 c22 bleachorange
Really? Weak, without followers, and laying low Voldemort orders a hit on Harry in Diagon Alley minutes after he shows? Please try and be consistent. I recognize a lot of your original plot is to facilitate the pairings and kinks, but try and be better with it. You could have easily written a scenario where harry is married to daphne without this nonsense.
Really? Weak, without followers, and laying low Voldemort orders a hit on Harry in Diagon Alley minutes after he shows? Please try and be consistent. I recognize a lot of your original plot is to facilitate the pairings and kinks, but try and be better with it. You could have easily written a scenario where harry is married to daphne without this nonsense.
12/24/2024 c20 bleachorange
According to the last A/N, you went against Harrys character because you were lazy? "Why mess with it if it works"? It doesnt work, at all, because of the changes you made! If you are going to evolve characters in different directions to rowling, you either need to give them space to be themselves and dorect the plot that way OR dont put them in situations that cause them to need to break character to facilitate the plot. I wont harp on that example any longer, but it really pissed me off.
According to the last A/N, you went against Harrys character because you were lazy? "Why mess with it if it works"? It doesnt work, at all, because of the changes you made! If you are going to evolve characters in different directions to rowling, you either need to give them space to be themselves and dorect the plot that way OR dont put them in situations that cause them to need to break character to facilitate the plot. I wont harp on that example any longer, but it really pissed me off.
12/24/2024 c19 bleachorange
Yet again I am amazed and but somehow unsurprised that another fanfic author does another tease with the 3rd triwizard event only to have it happen the same way in the end. Its gotten frankly ridiculous at this point. I think our of the dozens and dozens and dozens of HP fanfics I have read, one, a single one, that had the triwizard tournament and stopped Harry from being abducted by a portkey.
In this one, Harry literally just said fuck the tournament and that he is protecting fleur. Then 10 seconds later he gives up on her and goes and runs to the cup? What a fucking plot railroad. Dont complain, you wrote it yourself author. You could have done it differently. Its supremely out of character and in service of a plot point - its not like the 2nd task he literally stayed behind for acquaintances he hardly knew. He wont stay and make sure his woman is safe after a death eater attacked her? Just fuck off with that nonsense.
Ah, and OF COURSE there are dozens of of attackers who combine some type of grabbing spell to keep him from reaching the cup to escape. Seriously, can you be any more cliche with a beat for beat rendition of the original?
I am throwing major shade right here not because the writing is bad, but because I disagree with the direction AND the character you wrote went against character to facilitate that direction. It almost doesnt matter how voldemort resurrects, everyone just seems to get stuck on the triwizard and I hate it.
Yet again I am amazed and but somehow unsurprised that another fanfic author does another tease with the 3rd triwizard event only to have it happen the same way in the end. Its gotten frankly ridiculous at this point. I think our of the dozens and dozens and dozens of HP fanfics I have read, one, a single one, that had the triwizard tournament and stopped Harry from being abducted by a portkey.
In this one, Harry literally just said fuck the tournament and that he is protecting fleur. Then 10 seconds later he gives up on her and goes and runs to the cup? What a fucking plot railroad. Dont complain, you wrote it yourself author. You could have done it differently. Its supremely out of character and in service of a plot point - its not like the 2nd task he literally stayed behind for acquaintances he hardly knew. He wont stay and make sure his woman is safe after a death eater attacked her? Just fuck off with that nonsense.
Ah, and OF COURSE there are dozens of of attackers who combine some type of grabbing spell to keep him from reaching the cup to escape. Seriously, can you be any more cliche with a beat for beat rendition of the original?
I am throwing major shade right here not because the writing is bad, but because I disagree with the direction AND the character you wrote went against character to facilitate that direction. It almost doesnt matter how voldemort resurrects, everyone just seems to get stuck on the triwizard and I hate it.
12/24/2024 c8 bleachorange
OMG, Im dying! Can you imagine Luna publishing an article in the quibbler about the bitch flu? And how people will treat daphne afterwards? Im rolling!
OMG, Im dying! Can you imagine Luna publishing an article in the quibbler about the bitch flu? And how people will treat daphne afterwards? Im rolling!
12/8/2024 c29 2Malgrath
Hmm, as much as I enjoyed this, and i did very much enjoy this considering it's my first proper 'porn-with-plot' fic i've read. I wish Harry would take up a bit more of his family's military history, but I also know that's a personal gripe since I'm very military pilled.
Also loving the music suggestions. Metallica, Iron Maiden, and Black Sabbath, the holy trinity of metal. Love me some classics.
2MalgrathHmm, as much as I enjoyed this, and i did very much enjoy this considering it's my first proper 'porn-with-plot' fic i've read. I wish Harry would take up a bit more of his family's military history, but I also know that's a personal gripe since I'm very military pilled.
Also loving the music suggestions. Metallica, Iron Maiden, and Black Sabbath, the holy trinity of metal. Love me some classics.
12/5/2024 c9 Malgrath
I wonder if Sirius will get Harry a mundane weapon as a surprise backup weapon, maybe snooping around Potter Manor has him find Richard's Webley Mark VI. No death eater is going to expect a wizard to whip out a revolver to put a fist sized hole in someone. Plus it would add to Harry's 'large and in charge' British officer role with a certain rebellious Frenchie.
I wonder if Sirius will get Harry a mundane weapon as a surprise backup weapon, maybe snooping around Potter Manor has him find Richard's Webley Mark VI. No death eater is going to expect a wizard to whip out a revolver to put a fist sized hole in someone. Plus it would add to Harry's 'large and in charge' British officer role with a certain rebellious Frenchie.
12/4/2024 c3 Malgrath
I wonder is the Horcrux Scar is influencing Harry in anyway. I know that this harry is VERY not like is book counterpart but his Potter-Dragon view seems a bit too far to be him completely
I wonder is the Horcrux Scar is influencing Harry in anyway. I know that this harry is VERY not like is book counterpart but his Potter-Dragon view seems a bit too far to be him completely