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1/31 c13 OnePunchPlayer
rest assured, Mari. [ nodded to her ]

they are friends...here.

now you two versions of Humankind here need to be united more from now on, despite being of two different realities's versions (and one of you Humanity's...are not literally dormant reclaimers like the UNSC SOF folks' biological status here, at least.

...I...think? [ nervously chuckled a bit while hoping that there weren't any other ancient ecumene forerunner influence being also put onto Itami's version of Humanity here somewhere in the Past ] ).

even if that version is not GA Humanity themselves here (in this crossover. Unfortunately). [ sadly still Sighed at the status of better Destinyverses crossovers out there ]
1/31 c13 OnePunchPlayer
Eugh. Damn this site's Cowardice. [ eye Rolling at their Pathetically, Predictable Incompetence these Days still ]

rest assured, Mari. [ nodded to her ]

they are friends...here.

now you two versions of Humankind here need to be united more from now on, despite being of two different realities's versions (and one of you Humanity's...are not literally dormant reclaimers like the UNSC SOF folks' biological status here, at least.

...I...think? [ nervously chuckled a bit while hoping that there weren't any other ancient ecumene forerunner influence being also put onto Itami's version of Humanity here somewhere in the Past ] ).

even if that version is not GA Humanity themselves here (in this crossover. Unfortunately). [ sadly still Sighed at the status of better Destinyverses crossovers out there ]
1/14 c1 crewmastercz
It would be interesting when the arterial version of the story was if the UNSC met the JSDF and the Argent d'nur Empire of the House. Especially the reaction to the night sentinels and the Doom Slayer meeting Master Chief.
12/30/2022 c31 naotw
You seem to forget that the empire is lacking several major social and industrial progressions that would make interaction smooth, and that the unsc and earth have gone through said progressions. Starting off negotiations by parking a flying battleship near their seat of governance will instill as much hysteria, hate and resentment as it does fear. Military demonstrations wouldn't be used as often as done. Economic proposals would be made to improve the empire's civilian infrastructure and agriculture while tying its development to earth, enough to make it more than worthwhile. Like using the SoF's factories to make civilian prefabs and improve mining techniques, and educating scholars, etc. As is usually preferred today.

Thoughts on overthrowing and putting Sol on trial largely make a bad situation worse. Earth doesn't have the military strength to fully subsume and occupy the empire unless it united, worse for the unsc. One would question how jets were even able to enter the gate, let alone whole armies and supporting logistics units.

Also, empire members and associates seem to be repeatedly suffering from information overload, even months after seeing Japan and the JSDF, that's sod breaking. No one has even considered the bad aspects of modern society that were obviously hidden from the delegates, or the time differences between the different factions. Too much Empire bashing over actual talks.
Good enough chapter, plot slowing.
12/29/2022 c25 naotw
Japan wouldn't protest or resist UN involvement that openly. Too many political cons given its mandate, not just pressure.

Again,too relatable.
12/29/2022 c24 naotw
Too relatable. UEG civilians had no established ftl comm till postwar. Information travel and importance/tiering would be a priority. Add this to industrial automation and historical and societal considerations and attitudes of each colony(e.g. Reach was made up of mostly Hungarian descendants), and well ME and star wars would be relics at best in that time.

Basic sports in our medieval times are cultural, hobbies, or associated with festivities today. Pass times are largely forgotten. There are major societal differences between UEG humanity and modern earth.
12/29/2022 c22 naotw
"some 'convincing'..." She's smart enough to know opposing them'd be mostly useless. Why did she go to Alnus here? Itami wasn't captured and she was on recon, not diplomacy.

"impressive body...otherwise be lethal.." unnoticeable against punches and kicks.

Empire's slavery isn't as OCP as portrayed. UNSC and earth had them in their histories. They'd attempt to appeal to leaders and rulers, by offering industrial alternatives, not effectively destroy the empire's economy and social structure on overstretched jurisdiction grounds, as in the rescue here, where a covert op could have got their people back.
12/29/2022 c21 naotw
"morons on the web..." it's a significant and valid concern/point. 500 years ago we had no missiles. Conventional weapons are more limited compared to EM weapons. UNSC has access to the supporting material science knowledge needed. Groundside logistical concerns also streamline with them. UNSC made the technological breakthroughs needed to make them feasible.
Could have gone for the rough 200 years of peace(domus), that came just after partial recovery from an economy-crashing solar war. Followed by near sudden violence from, and slow response to, the insurrection, then the sudden covenant attacks.

What's with the repeated bashing of 21st century technologies; tanks, helicopters, calibers, armor and gun refinements, etc? It's getting old. Everyone in and out-story knows the UNSC's more advanced, why keep showing it, even out of demonstrations?

"laugh off large quantities.." aim for joints or faces or detonations, usually common.

"dual-wield.." reason for it's mainly the caseless bullets, not the gun alone.

"recoil..impossible.." smart enough to remember recoil demonstration previously, and different technologies.

"weapons produced and..." more likely suddenness of the covenant reveal. UNSC had a lot of old ground builds pre-war. Navy was main focus.

Williams's acting too unprofessional; near childish/civilian reactions and exclamations. He'd expect their specific capabilities to be above his government's already.

good chapter. Great logic on weapons. Hope bashing tones down.
12/29/2022 c20 naotw
star wars; big laugh from that.

creature tracking; SoF has MQ-96 drones that're more suitable, with sat. support. Manned craft too wasteful overall for indefinite tracking.

good chapter, no grammar errors.
12/29/2022 c19 naotw
"twice the size.." twice the LENGTH. Square cube law. A LOT of authors seem to confuse length as volume.

"..It cannot.." a bold faced lie.

You're falling into a protagonist trope. Cutter is a UNSC captain that fans know of more than most. That doesn't mean he's a diplomat, or a perfect gentleman, or the smartest of all 3 worlds, or can't make mistakes. The SoF has no diplomats, any good politician can outplay him. GATE didn't portray any politician as good(at their job).

Cutter has no valid reason to initiate any form of tech program with Earth;
Doesn't know if it's the same Earth.
Most exchanges will do more harm than good at the moment, before they're actually commonplace, in decades to centuries.
The covenant is a given at best and would make no difference if present. Earth would still be mostly screwed.
Human interest conflicts; different political and national factions that would take a decade to unify at best, even with the covenant reveal. A lot to go over, stand by and compromise on.

Noticeable grammar and plot(tenses, spelling, genders, sentence structure) errors on all chapters past chapter 3.

Good concept.
12/25/2022 c1 naotw
Good pace, great flow.
Some spelling errors.
12/17/2022 c31 Ghostly
Can we get a look at what is currently happening on GATE Earth, because I like to think that every national & private space agencies/programs are suddenly being overwhelmed with increased funding to restart the space race, and bring humanity into the stars.
11/30/2022 c31 Josh kiesow
I can’t wait for the next chapters to come out
10/6/2022 c1 Guest
Please update your story getting better
7/26/2022 c31 For'Sleep 3rd
plz...Since Cleary Empire see they cannot fight something like that, plz make them smarter.

UNSC also must realize when investigated Falmart, The reason Empire started a War because a stagnation caused by Falmart God's Cut alternative path to advance.

Make it also some UN realize the problem in Falmart that God's of Falmart is the source of it. unlike Earth which It has permission to advance further.

So I be happy if UNSC/UN found the way to cut link of Falmart Gods
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