for In his Pocket10/12 c1 Etroxic
Found this gem, and you did harry right my guy, he stood up for himself!
Also glad snape is sane enough to realize his hate for harry isn't necessary since there alike or so. Glad to find this
Found this gem, and you did harry right my guy, he stood up for himself!
Also glad snape is sane enough to realize his hate for harry isn't necessary since there alike or so. Glad to find this
10/4 c4 Nightcrawler X
Harry abandoning Theo because of imaginary "racism" is an incredibly dumb move. I refuse to continue to read this garbage story.
Harry abandoning Theo because of imaginary "racism" is an incredibly dumb move. I refuse to continue to read this garbage story.
10/4 c3 Nightcrawler X
Your Harry is a boring arrogant cunt. Making him fight so called "bigotry" in Slytherin is one of the most idiotic tropes in fanfiction. You are writing an adventure story, not a pamphlet about imaginary politics.
Your Harry is a boring arrogant cunt. Making him fight so called "bigotry" in Slytherin is one of the most idiotic tropes in fanfiction. You are writing an adventure story, not a pamphlet about imaginary politics.
10/4 c2 Nightcrawler X
Why would Harry introduce himself to the Big Drunk Oaf all of a sudden? Outside of "plot reasons".
I am glad, though, that you didn't make him befriend the weasel.
Why would Harry introduce himself to the Big Drunk Oaf all of a sudden? Outside of "plot reasons".
I am glad, though, that you didn't make him befriend the weasel.
10/4 c1 Nightcrawler X
Granger is extremely annoying.
Also, why would "smarter", "independent" Harry go back to abusive Dursleys instead of renting a room at a hotel?
Granger is extremely annoying.
Also, why would "smarter", "independent" Harry go back to abusive Dursleys instead of renting a room at a hotel?
7/16 c18 dhamilton
i hope you decide to continue this story, while I'm not the biggest fan of weasleys and really dont like dumbledore I'll admit you did very well on changing then into what they should have been like in cannon compared to how they came across in it
i hope you decide to continue this story, while I'm not the biggest fan of weasleys and really dont like dumbledore I'll admit you did very well on changing then into what they should have been like in cannon compared to how they came across in it
5/19 c12 sthrobbins
Lorenzo Avogadro is the Italian physicist who came up with the Law and the Number that bear his name. Related?
Lorenzo Avogadro is the Italian physicist who came up with the Law and the Number that bear his name. Related?
5/10 c15 
1AuthorxAuthor
i don't like how unimpressive harry is, or how much more impressive everyone them
1AuthorxAuthori don't like how unimpressive harry is, or how much more impressive everyone them
5/9 c18 2HP-DG-AP-PN-RG-NR
This is a really great story so far. I'm hoping to see more of it at some point.
2HP-DG-AP-PN-RG-NRThis is a really great story so far. I'm hoping to see more of it at some point.
5/8 c1 1AuthorxAuthor
honestly, this is one of the most satisfying first chapters I've read in a long time, probably comparable to the first time I've read a gamer fic
1AuthorxAuthorhonestly, this is one of the most satisfying first chapters I've read in a long time, probably comparable to the first time I've read a gamer fic