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9/16/2022 c1 Ouistiti003
amazing fic, thank you so much for sharing with us wour works :)
1/11/2019 c1 Guest
Love...!
11/3/2018 c1 15Rey Bee
It was a looooong oneshot:) I mostly liked it. Especially how you described Sasuke: he feels guilty and uneasy and cares about others. I don't like when authors describe him as arrogant and cold after the war, because it creates an impression that he doesn't understand how much he has been forgiven for by his friends and by the whole world.
What I personally would do differently here is Sakura's character. Such a Sakura, still loving Sasuke even despite not knowing him (because it's been at least three years since they have seen each other) just annoys me, as does a sobbing and crying Sakura. Well, crying girls annoys me in general in fanfiction;) But I strongly support an idea of Sakura going through a change of character, becoming strong (because she is strong, she just forgets about it sometimes) so thank you that your Sasuke noticed those changes:)
3/9/2018 c1 4MLLu
Holy guacamole. Let’s just start with that. Your take of Sasuke trying to redeem himself and Sakura still wanting him after these years was really fantastic! There were many moments that I enjoyed. For instance them cooking together in the beginning. You included tomatoes, Sasuke’s favorite fruit. Nice touch! I always love when authors write about their traits. So Kudos for that. I like the Kakashi/Sasuke moment. There are not that many of them not that I know of so to see them talk again in a serious matter, I enjoyed that a lot. Your writing and narration are good. Simple but good. I particularly like that you changed point of views, starting with Sasuke and then Sakura. Personally I like Sasuke’s part the best! And your dialogs flowed really well:D
Your characteristics of Sasuke and Sakura were good too. Their action and speech were believable.
Over all I’m glad I saved this one-shot for last. I have now read all the stories that have been part of ‘Show me your Love’ Challenge and I really enjoyed reading your story. It was absolutely a pleasure!

THANK YOU FOR SHARING!
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~MLLu #SupportFanfictionReview
2/27/2018 c1 37Tuvstarr's lost heart
Oh, this was wonderful. I really like that you didn't make them immediately get together, even went as far as letting them have 'the talk' and go separate ways, and only then he realised what he truly needed.

Overall, well done! I liked it a lot!

I am so sorry that I didn't read it and reviewed earlier, but better late than never?

Keep it up!
2/25/2018 c1 36iBloo
this review is very late, and I’m really upset with myself for not getting to this story fast enough because this was just so sweet. I felt so calm reading the entire story, and it was great that you did not rush the development at all. The slow pace helped me see things better through Sasuke and Sakura’s perspective. The slow but steady realization Sasuke had that he was in love with Sakura was like talking a pleasant walk in the park. It’s also nice to see how Sakura’s steadfast love never wavered. I also appreciate how you emphasized despite her insecurities that she was falling behind compared to her friends, she never once thought of leaving Sasuke behind. It just seems so much like Sakura to be that way. But giiiirl come on. 22 is still young. Calm down. Hahaha!

Even if English isn’t your first language, you were still able to deliver this story beautifully. Thank you so much for taking the time to share this with all of us!
2/19/2018 c1 16Kaze and Kiba
For English not being your first language you are doing a good job :) To help even more, I would suggest you read your writing out loud, like you are telling the story. This will help you edit your own work, which is not easy to do. (I have a very hard time editing, so I hope that tip will help you:)

I like how you show Sasuke's emotions for his family and his homecoming. And I liked how Sakura felt like a safe place for him even when he was dreaming and he became a proud papa.
2/19/2018 c1 25Sakura's Unicorn
You really did a great job outlining Sasuke's reasons for not fitting in back in Konoha. The most jarring moment, I thought, was when Shikamaru tells him he needs to have children to keep the Sharingan in Konoha's arsenal. It was shocking, but true, and because I felt it, I was able to empathize with Sasuke's feelings. Great job there. You resolved Sasuke's emotions very well by making him return to the village for love's sake, not obligation or resolution, but love. Also, very fitting for the challenge!

Thanks for sharing!
2/19/2018 c1 11spilihp17
Great story. easy read, good pace, great interactions and plot development. Great job :)
2/18/2018 c1 26mississippimudpiecraves
Sorry to say I'm not a fan of SasuSaku. But you made it very easy for me to read through and complete this story because you laid it out very well. It felt very realistic because you brought us through every step of their journey towards healing and moving from the past and with each other. Thanks for this wonderful story.
2/18/2018 c1 76een nihc
I can see that your writing has improved a lot since I last read your fic. It was a really touching piece and I love the ending where Sasuke told Sarada it's good to be home. I appreciate that you take your time to write the story and develop Sasuke and Sakura's relationship instead of rushing it. Well done, my dear. I'm so proud of you.
2/18/2018 c1 1fricasee
Interesting that Sasuke is so singular minded in venturing the world outside of Konoha for so long, even with Sarada coming into the picture. I like that you presented that in a way that sympathises with him - he's still very complex, but a bit misunderstood too. Thanks for writing!
2/17/2018 c1 20Poodie
The english thing is fine :3 Your story actually inspired me to write a little Sasuke and Itachi one-shot (of two I already have planned. All angst because I can't help myself XD)

I enjoyed the concept and plot of this. I don't read a lot of SasuSaku centered stories -mostly because ShikaTema and NejiTen are my snazz!- but I did quite enjoy this! :D I also adored the length XD I love long one-shots! (one-shots specifically)

Good job jah!

~Poodie
2/16/2018 c1 23wingedmercury
THE FEEEEELS! My favorite line: "Indeed, Sakura Haruno was trying to teach Sasuke Uchiha, former S rank criminal, how to cook." You slay me. This was sweet and adorable. You also got Sasuke's characterization down really well. Thanks for an awesome read!
2/16/2018 c1 17Pixie07
This story is so sweet, you portrayed their personalities so good.
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