for SPICE1/2/2019 c1 SpaceBunn
I really enjoy this story. Hope you update soon.
I really enjoy this story. Hope you update soon.
9/3/2018 c2 
5BAlyse
Love your story. The characters are interesting and really vivid. I love the interaction between them all. Rose is adorable and her older brother is such an ass.
5BAlyseLove your story. The characters are interesting and really vivid. I love the interaction between them all. Rose is adorable and her older brother is such an ass.
6/26/2018 c1 2Echelon9
Being new to the MonMusu fanfiction community, and I kinda just stumbled across your story here. It looked interesting. Gotta say that the quality of your writing and storytelling is impressive. Great visuals and descriptions. Nice smooth dialogue and transitions. And the characters all seem to be fleshed out pretty well too. Good first chapter.
A few typos here and there, but nothing that interrupted the flow of the story. The only thing that irked me was having to read paragraphs filled with sentences of dialogue on top of sentences of description. Try to separate those from each other. I find it makes the story easier to read.
Good luck with chapter 3.
2Echelon9Being new to the MonMusu fanfiction community, and I kinda just stumbled across your story here. It looked interesting. Gotta say that the quality of your writing and storytelling is impressive. Great visuals and descriptions. Nice smooth dialogue and transitions. And the characters all seem to be fleshed out pretty well too. Good first chapter.
A few typos here and there, but nothing that interrupted the flow of the story. The only thing that irked me was having to read paragraphs filled with sentences of dialogue on top of sentences of description. Try to separate those from each other. I find it makes the story easier to read.
Good luck with chapter 3.
6/17/2018 c2 JJbird
Very fun read and I like your use of less monster types. Looking forward to more.
Very fun read and I like your use of less monster types. Looking forward to more.
5/31/2018 c2 5BlueBlender
Following AxZi, maybe I'm coming into this story too seriously. The extraspecies you bring are convincingly alien enough that they really feel like real people from other cultures. You also highlight how incredibly frustrating it would be to actually host such people. Rose not only taking care of her younger brother, but two older men that are very out of touch with human standards, all the while dealing with Ross. F**k Ross.
If it was me, I'd have snapped at this point. But I guess dealing with Bay has given Rose some level of tolerance for f**k-ups. I hope soon that the extraspecies contributes something to the family instead of loitering and causing trouble.
5BlueBlenderFollowing AxZi, maybe I'm coming into this story too seriously. The extraspecies you bring are convincingly alien enough that they really feel like real people from other cultures. You also highlight how incredibly frustrating it would be to actually host such people. Rose not only taking care of her younger brother, but two older men that are very out of touch with human standards, all the while dealing with Ross. F**k Ross.
If it was me, I'd have snapped at this point. But I guess dealing with Bay has given Rose some level of tolerance for f**k-ups. I hope soon that the extraspecies contributes something to the family instead of loitering and causing trouble.
5/26/2018 c2 6AxZi
It eally is like Rosemarie's living with a bunch of (man)children, honestly. It isn't even that there's a cultural gap, though there is, but they don't even listen to her when logic says she'd have reasons for all those rules! Man, these Extraspecies are dicks.
Really hope she'll be able to get a more helpful extra species next time, but I'm not holding my breathe.
(Kudos for Rosemarie and not exploding earlier though, this is a girl after my own heart)
Thank you for writing!
6AxZiIt eally is like Rosemarie's living with a bunch of (man)children, honestly. It isn't even that there's a cultural gap, though there is, but they don't even listen to her when logic says she'd have reasons for all those rules! Man, these Extraspecies are dicks.
Really hope she'll be able to get a more helpful extra species next time, but I'm not holding my breathe.
(Kudos for Rosemarie and not exploding earlier though, this is a girl after my own heart)
Thank you for writing!
3/1/2018 c1 6AxZi
This is very interesting. The obvious inhumanity of Matia, but the way he still tries and fit in. Also the predator quip. I'm looking forwards to seeing more. :)
6AxZiThis is very interesting. The obvious inhumanity of Matia, but the way he still tries and fit in. Also the predator quip. I'm looking forwards to seeing more. :)
2/24/2018 c1 Guest
I think I found my new favorite story and i have been reading read the freaking contract
I think I found my new favorite story and i have been reading read the freaking contract