for A Marriage of Convenience5/3 c106 Ashboi2611
I somewhat regret having reread this story now as in 2 weeks i have a 16 hour flight that could have absolutely flown by with the aid of this I blame the update to the story that first made me aware of your account. Always looking for more Haphne but in dire times the classics will do
I somewhat regret having reread this story now as in 2 weeks i have a 16 hour flight that could have absolutely flown by with the aid of this I blame the update to the story that first made me aware of your account. Always looking for more Haphne but in dire times the classics will do
4/10 c106 oldpotato
The story got exponentially more interesting with Ginny's murder and the trial. The chapters depicting the trial are a far cry from the first 70 chapters, much more engaging and less contrived drama.
I still stand by my opinion that it took too long to get to that point, and that shortening the first 70 chapters down to 25-35 chapters instead feels much more engaging, but at least the story ended much better than it started.
The story got exponentially more interesting with Ginny's murder and the trial. The chapters depicting the trial are a far cry from the first 70 chapters, much more engaging and less contrived drama.
I still stand by my opinion that it took too long to get to that point, and that shortening the first 70 chapters down to 25-35 chapters instead feels much more engaging, but at least the story ended much better than it started.
4/9 c68 oldpotato
Never mind, you just made them show their bellies and roll over once again because they fear the opinions of sheep or they wanted even more money on top of the substantial wealth they already had.
Every single conflict in this story has been one-sided. There is no struggle, there is no give and take. You just have two doormat MCs reactively responding to everything that happens to their lives. "I'm going to call a War Council", yet literally nothing happened. No initiative to improve safety after experiencing multiple life threatening attempts, literally nothing was done when their family members are killed, of course there are no leads when Aurors try to investigate.
In 68 chapters, you've had Daphne stand up for herself one time through words just to immediately prove herself wrong one chapter later. And let's not even talk about Harry; everyone wants to screw with his life, including Cyrus, but aside from a few temper tantrums that achieve literally nothing except for making Cyrus having to switch a few chairs in his office, Harry is perfectly content just being a doormat that says "step on me". Cyrus, Pince, Ginny, Skeeter, he can't stand up to any of them through actions.
The conflict in this story is so unbelievably contrived, especially relationship-wise. The premise was actually interesting too. What a letdown of a story.
Never mind, you just made them show their bellies and roll over once again because they fear the opinions of sheep or they wanted even more money on top of the substantial wealth they already had.
Every single conflict in this story has been one-sided. There is no struggle, there is no give and take. You just have two doormat MCs reactively responding to everything that happens to their lives. "I'm going to call a War Council", yet literally nothing happened. No initiative to improve safety after experiencing multiple life threatening attempts, literally nothing was done when their family members are killed, of course there are no leads when Aurors try to investigate.
In 68 chapters, you've had Daphne stand up for herself one time through words just to immediately prove herself wrong one chapter later. And let's not even talk about Harry; everyone wants to screw with his life, including Cyrus, but aside from a few temper tantrums that achieve literally nothing except for making Cyrus having to switch a few chairs in his office, Harry is perfectly content just being a doormat that says "step on me". Cyrus, Pince, Ginny, Skeeter, he can't stand up to any of them through actions.
The conflict in this story is so unbelievably contrived, especially relationship-wise. The premise was actually interesting too. What a letdown of a story.
4/9 c66 oldpotato
After 66 chapters, there finally exists one example of where your two MC's stand up for themselves, albeit with words.
After 66 chapters, there finally exists one example of where your two MC's stand up for themselves, albeit with words.
9/23/2024 c1 
2Church Nexus 28
I like the idea but Harry not fighting back when forced to marry somebody. Yeah I really don’t like it. Good story overall but Harry would’ve just somebody else’s wishes. He would not allow his own problems to be someone else’s problems am I?
2Church Nexus 28I like the idea but Harry not fighting back when forced to marry somebody. Yeah I really don’t like it. Good story overall but Harry would’ve just somebody else’s wishes. He would not allow his own problems to be someone else’s problems am I?
8/21/2024 c67 Capros
I've enjoyed this story on more than one occasion but I've always taken exception to excessive use of the term 'whore.' I know why you use it but I believe you could have selected a different word without losing the effect. Still, I enjoy your work.
I've enjoyed this story on more than one occasion but I've always taken exception to excessive use of the term 'whore.' I know why you use it but I believe you could have selected a different word without losing the effect. Still, I enjoy your work.
7/13/2024 c106 Nimbus2023
This was a very interesting story that kept my attention from the beginning to the end. The mystery was done very well and the final confrontation with Alexander was quite satisfying.
My main criticism is that the number of chapters was quite excessive, two or three chapters could have been compressed into one doing away with a lot of the constant cliffhangers. To that point, the cliffhangers would have driven me insane if I had been reading this while the story was still a WIP.
All in all a wonderful story, thank you for sharing this.
This was a very interesting story that kept my attention from the beginning to the end. The mystery was done very well and the final confrontation with Alexander was quite satisfying.
My main criticism is that the number of chapters was quite excessive, two or three chapters could have been compressed into one doing away with a lot of the constant cliffhangers. To that point, the cliffhangers would have driven me insane if I had been reading this while the story was still a WIP.
All in all a wonderful story, thank you for sharing this.
7/12/2024 c95 Nimbus2023
Hypothetically, if someone is under polyjuice does their DNA mimic that of the person they're impersonating? What about their fingerprints? Since the polyjuice transformation turns a person into an exact copy of someone else it only makes sense that their fingerprints would as well, meaning that modern forensics could be fooled by a simple dose of polyjuice potion.
Hypothetically, if someone is under polyjuice does their DNA mimic that of the person they're impersonating? What about their fingerprints? Since the polyjuice transformation turns a person into an exact copy of someone else it only makes sense that their fingerprints would as well, meaning that modern forensics could be fooled by a simple dose of polyjuice potion.
7/12/2024 c94 Nimbus2023
Lucius' wand was destroyed during the night of the seven Harrys, it exploded in Voldemort's hand when Harry's wand connected with it.
Lucius' wand was destroyed during the night of the seven Harrys, it exploded in Voldemort's hand when Harry's wand connected with it.
7/12/2024 c80 Nimbus2023
If a house elf cannot give evidence in the defence of its master it stands to reason that anything it says cannot be used for prosecution either.
If a house elf cannot give evidence in the defence of its master it stands to reason that anything it says cannot be used for prosecution either.
7/12/2024 c78 Nimbus2023
There is a simple way for Harry to find out who murdered Ginny. The resurrection stone should still be in the forest where he left it so all he has to do is call her back and ask her... just saying.
There is a simple way for Harry to find out who murdered Ginny. The resurrection stone should still be in the forest where he left it so all he has to do is call her back and ask her... just saying.