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3/20/2019 c1 1k+Val-Creative
oooooooo that twist though!
8/20/2018 c1 138WargishBoromirFan
I think you've got some interesting ideas, but the sentence fragments are really killing my ability to get through a full story of yours. This one is the only fic I've managed to get through. You may want to try to find a beta reader to help you with the grammar (as a quick check, look for at least one subject and verb per sentence and make sure you're not hanging adverbial phrases off of thin air;) and keeping the plot moving along logically, or at least as logically as fairy tales go, because sometimes the story elements seem to come out of nowhere. And yeah, ambiguous endings with blue and orange morality are neat, but sometimes it's like "and where did this thing come from, again?" Good luck.
5/19/2018 c1 154Serpico1986
Such a good story, congratulations!
5/9/2018 c1 TTJSRABB977
I like your profile picture. :D

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