for Marco's New Path7/6/2019 c3 Lurking-in-shadows
Hi. It’s been almost a year since your last update so I don’t expect you to pick this story back up. I just want to say I really enjoyed reading it. I don’t really know what to write. But authors thrive with reviews and comments. Keep writing, even if it’s not this story, cause you’re a great author.
Hi. It’s been almost a year since your last update so I don’t expect you to pick this story back up. I just want to say I really enjoyed reading it. I don’t really know what to write. But authors thrive with reviews and comments. Keep writing, even if it’s not this story, cause you’re a great author.
8/22/2018 c3 warhaven22
Depending on how you want to proceed with the story I feel you should change a couple details of Marco and how royalty/lordship are handed out like for example Marco is a black belt another idea Marco is given a chance to get his own pair of scissors and to meet hekapoo earlier Marco accidentally completets a ancient challenge set forth by a forgotten Kingdom that was built upon the blood moon theme witch is to get bring down saint Olga's school and the mark of lordship is a soul bound weapon like sword version of thors hammer
Depending on how you want to proceed with the story I feel you should change a couple details of Marco and how royalty/lordship are handed out like for example Marco is a black belt another idea Marco is given a chance to get his own pair of scissors and to meet hekapoo earlier Marco accidentally completets a ancient challenge set forth by a forgotten Kingdom that was built upon the blood moon theme witch is to get bring down saint Olga's school and the mark of lordship is a soul bound weapon like sword version of thors hammer
8/22/2018 c3 
30Or-lan-do626
You may have add in to much 30 year old Marco he a bit too grounded .I almost thought he steal Janna's hat or panties for taking his seeing as it a M story that can just happen later.
30Or-lan-do626You may have add in to much 30 year old Marco he a bit too grounded .I almost thought he steal Janna's hat or panties for taking his seeing as it a M story that can just happen later.
8/21/2018 c3 5Gamelover41592
this was good glad to see marco with some character development and so far so good with Tom but I do wonder how they will react meeting his sister *shakes in terror*
5Gamelover41592this was good glad to see marco with some character development and so far so good with Tom but I do wonder how they will react meeting his sister *shakes in terror*
5/12/2018 c1 6jadeangel099
dude, I'm in love with this and can't wait to read more! please keep it up, because I honestly want to read a whole bunch of this.
6jadeangel099dude, I'm in love with this and can't wait to read more! please keep it up, because I honestly want to read a whole bunch of this.
4/13/2018 c2 6OmegaDelta
So Tammy now has an interest in marco. This will be interesting. keep up the good work.
6OmegaDeltaSo Tammy now has an interest in marco. This will be interesting. keep up the good work.
4/13/2018 c1 3The Eternal Winter
I like what youve written so far. Characters are good and your writing is solid.
I liked the interactions between characters, Marco being so meticulous and sneaky, and just the general premise of the story. I would say you dont even need to credit me since this really is your own take on things.
My only advice would be dont be afraid to really get creative and go off the beaten path. Youve made a good divergence from canon and my suggestion is to keep riding that wave. Also I would suggest slightly longer chapters, but thats just me. I like long chapters in general.
Keep up the good work.
3The Eternal WinterI like what youve written so far. Characters are good and your writing is solid.
I liked the interactions between characters, Marco being so meticulous and sneaky, and just the general premise of the story. I would say you dont even need to credit me since this really is your own take on things.
My only advice would be dont be afraid to really get creative and go off the beaten path. Youve made a good divergence from canon and my suggestion is to keep riding that wave. Also I would suggest slightly longer chapters, but thats just me. I like long chapters in general.
Keep up the good work.
4/10/2018 c1 Dark spirits
I read you story it’s great so far are you going to be fallowing the story or going a different way. Since the blood moon ball is a big deal in the show.
I read you story it’s great so far are you going to be fallowing the story or going a different way. Since the blood moon ball is a big deal in the show.