for Unexpected Allies7/26/2020 c5 Guest
The first time I read sniffling: NAZGUL!
The first time I read sniffling: NAZGUL!
5/13/2020 c5 angrykitten114
I absolutely love the story so far! I really hope it gets updated at some point.
I absolutely love the story so far! I really hope it gets updated at some point.
4/3/2020 c5 Seananagan
Ravenclaw isn't "the cunning" and he shares a bed with her so if she got lice so would he...
I still enjoy the idea behind this story and the fact that you chose to share it. I look forward to more, thank you
Ravenclaw isn't "the cunning" and he shares a bed with her so if she got lice so would he...
I still enjoy the idea behind this story and the fact that you chose to share it. I look forward to more, thank you
10/7/2019 c5 Guest
this was amazing. maybe better than rick riordan himself. please release some more
this was amazing. maybe better than rick riordan himself. please release some more
10/7/2019 c4 percy
more
more
7/31/2019 c3 HaywireEagle
While the idea is nice enough, and different from other fics for sure. Most having the seven or some combination sent as students or bodyguards. Having them as faculty is different to be sure. However, since they are Ground-keepers they wouldn't be wearing Professor's Robes. They'd be wearing sturdy clothing meant for labor and getting dirty.
The fic thus far however has been rather wooden at times and sometimes coming off as empty and or repetitious.
If they were teaching, they'd best be entered as Assistant Teachers like Minerva was to Dumbledore before he took up the job of Headmaster. More plausible than making teenagers senior staff members.
Though, there is always Coach to take that roll. He can deal with those magical cupcakes.
While the idea is nice enough, and different from other fics for sure. Most having the seven or some combination sent as students or bodyguards. Having them as faculty is different to be sure. However, since they are Ground-keepers they wouldn't be wearing Professor's Robes. They'd be wearing sturdy clothing meant for labor and getting dirty.
The fic thus far however has been rather wooden at times and sometimes coming off as empty and or repetitious.
If they were teaching, they'd best be entered as Assistant Teachers like Minerva was to Dumbledore before he took up the job of Headmaster. More plausible than making teenagers senior staff members.
Though, there is always Coach to take that roll. He can deal with those magical cupcakes.
7/30/2019 c1 HaywireEagle
The whole 'together or nightmares of Tartarus' thing is a tired trope that should be done away with that often reeks of lazy writing and pity point gathering. It had best not become a plot point, because it has gotten too much air time and focus to the point it kills a great deal of interest I have for a story.
Making Hecate the source of wizards is also kind of eye-roll worthy for several reasons. Chief among them is that there are pantheons older than Greece with their own wizards, witches, and sorcerers. Spanning the globe. Then there are the muggleborns. Plus, you make it sound like Hecate gave mankind magic, which doesn't quite make sense for the most part. Unless you're talking about the wanded brand of magic, but whatever.
The whole 'together or nightmares of Tartarus' thing is a tired trope that should be done away with that often reeks of lazy writing and pity point gathering. It had best not become a plot point, because it has gotten too much air time and focus to the point it kills a great deal of interest I have for a story.
Making Hecate the source of wizards is also kind of eye-roll worthy for several reasons. Chief among them is that there are pantheons older than Greece with their own wizards, witches, and sorcerers. Spanning the globe. Then there are the muggleborns. Plus, you make it sound like Hecate gave mankind magic, which doesn't quite make sense for the most part. Unless you're talking about the wanded brand of magic, but whatever.
7/26/2019 c5 Guest
Very good, I hope you will continue it!
Very good, I hope you will continue it!
7/26/2019 c1 Guest
Amazing, can't wait for more!
Amazing, can't wait for more!
7/23/2019 c5 Tess
Good story have you ever thought of pairing Harry with Percy? hope you update
Good story have you ever thought of pairing Harry with Percy? hope you update
7/23/2019 c5 Perryissocool
What is an American salute? I'm American and I don't know what an American salute is...
What is an American salute? I'm American and I don't know what an American salute is...
3/14/2019 c1 HeroesofHogwarts
Alright so, first of all its MUGGLEBORN, mudflood is very offensive.
Second, IT WAS GREAT!
But I think there was alittle too much romance...
Alright so, first of all its MUGGLEBORN, mudflood is very offensive.
Second, IT WAS GREAT!
But I think there was alittle too much romance...
9/14/2018 c4 GinnyChase2005
Why didn't percy get the phoenix when he visited the shop the first time. i e, when annabeth bought her owl
Why didn't percy get the phoenix when he visited the shop the first time. i e, when annabeth bought her owl
8/27/2018 c4 
17EmeraldGuardian7
Just found this story and I'm quite liking it. If I had any suggestions though it would be to work on making sure you are showing not telling with your writing. For example there were a few times where you made statements similar to "We talked for a bit on our way to our rooms. I found out that they were from a new magic school in America called Olympia which only accepted 20 students a year." The way this could be made better is you actually showed that conversation. Write out the dialogue and what Harry is seeing, thinking, and feeling in that moment instead of just writing one of two sentences that describe the fact a conversation occurred. There are times you can just explain things like you did instead of showing the whole scene but it's better to lean towards the side of writing them out. It will make your story a lot better. Trust me, I know this because this was a very big problem for me when I first started writing and it took time and practice to improve. I believe you can do it though. Anyway, I am liking this a lot. Keep up the good work and I can't wait for more!
17EmeraldGuardian7Just found this story and I'm quite liking it. If I had any suggestions though it would be to work on making sure you are showing not telling with your writing. For example there were a few times where you made statements similar to "We talked for a bit on our way to our rooms. I found out that they were from a new magic school in America called Olympia which only accepted 20 students a year." The way this could be made better is you actually showed that conversation. Write out the dialogue and what Harry is seeing, thinking, and feeling in that moment instead of just writing one of two sentences that describe the fact a conversation occurred. There are times you can just explain things like you did instead of showing the whole scene but it's better to lean towards the side of writing them out. It will make your story a lot better. Trust me, I know this because this was a very big problem for me when I first started writing and it took time and practice to improve. I believe you can do it though. Anyway, I am liking this a lot. Keep up the good work and I can't wait for more!