
3/25/2018 c2
1stephaneeee
First of all, I love that she's so tall. YES TALL WOMEN. Also, Embry in the beginning was too good. "I mean really, what kind of an escape route..." hahaha. I laughed out loud. I love the description of her home, I can just imagine it in the dreary rain and her standing there, staring woefully at her house and her hair blowing in the breeze. Ugh. Can't wait for more.

First of all, I love that she's so tall. YES TALL WOMEN. Also, Embry in the beginning was too good. "I mean really, what kind of an escape route..." hahaha. I laughed out loud. I love the description of her home, I can just imagine it in the dreary rain and her standing there, staring woefully at her house and her hair blowing in the breeze. Ugh. Can't wait for more.
3/25/2018 c1 stephaneeee
YOU ARE A GENIUS AND THIS CHAPTER IS INCREDIBLE. The yearning, the fierce independence but the call of home overpowering, the beautiful bungalow that carries so many memories. You, my dear, are so very talented.
YOU ARE A GENIUS AND THIS CHAPTER IS INCREDIBLE. The yearning, the fierce independence but the call of home overpowering, the beautiful bungalow that carries so many memories. You, my dear, are so very talented.
3/24/2018 c1 GreenerGrass
Okay. okay. okay. Obviously I'm you're first review, and I'd like to start by saying I'm really like the setup of your story so far! I'm happy that you incorporated the phrase 'folks like us', because it acknowledges the dynamics of class and race in conjunction with being Native in our society. A lot of fanfic writers who write about the wolf pack often fail to acknowledge the wealth disparity the would be prevalent when comparing the town of Forks to the La Push Reservation, so I'm so happy that you touched on this. To me this shows maturity in a writer (these are just my random thoughts, so don't take me seriously). But yeah, overall your story seems like it's going to be interesting. I'm glad that the characters are older, and that Alana has already established herself as a professional (a lot of wolf pack OC stories usually make the girl forgo college and she ends up tying herself down at a young age to a equally young boy). That being said, I look forward to reading what you write next!
Okay. okay. okay. Obviously I'm you're first review, and I'd like to start by saying I'm really like the setup of your story so far! I'm happy that you incorporated the phrase 'folks like us', because it acknowledges the dynamics of class and race in conjunction with being Native in our society. A lot of fanfic writers who write about the wolf pack often fail to acknowledge the wealth disparity the would be prevalent when comparing the town of Forks to the La Push Reservation, so I'm so happy that you touched on this. To me this shows maturity in a writer (these are just my random thoughts, so don't take me seriously). But yeah, overall your story seems like it's going to be interesting. I'm glad that the characters are older, and that Alana has already established herself as a professional (a lot of wolf pack OC stories usually make the girl forgo college and she ends up tying herself down at a young age to a equally young boy). That being said, I look forward to reading what you write next!