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7/10/2021 c1 1MyladyNancy
loved it
11/4/2019 c1 c.karen09
I haven't read any Twilight FanFiction for a while, but this makes me want to jump right back into it. Thanks for writing and sharing!
8/15/2019 c1 5KJ Groening
Very interesting concept.
6/7/2019 c1 Blueboot55
This is a very good story. Love the dialogue.
5/29/2019 c1 twi nana
ok, just came here from a twifandom news rec, and loved this, yes, I just followed and faved you too. looking forward to the rest of this story...and will start reading the other when you hit complete, loved the way you worked the mate bond, AND THE BLOODLUST IN THIS ONE!
4/24/2019 c1 Debbie Hicks
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1/6/2019 c1 24ZadArchie
So dreadfully sorry for the lateness of this review. I’ve been horrible about keeping up with WA challenge pieces.

Certainly a lot of characters to keep up with, but I think you handled the all-dialogue element well enough that I was able to keep track of who was who. I’ve heard of these kinds of stories with the idea of genuine “soul mates,” but I’ve never read one before. This was an interesting first foray into the theme, so thank you for introducing me to it.

12/16/2018 c2 Godschildtweety
Really good
10/25/2018 c1 Guest
I think you need more than just dialogue for a more rounded strory.
10/2/2018 c1 48Dreamer1701
This is so sweet!
7/12/2018 c1
Yes! What should have happened!
6/22/2018 c1 Jenn
I love this plot! I hope you do circle back it would be great!
5/14/2018 c1 Blistful2006
I really hope you expand this after Repetitive Dreams. Also interesting and the whole having to touch for her pain to go away and his blood lust wonder how it would work once they let go and everything else down the line. Hmm interesting indeed.
5/8/2018 c1 3Sam 'Dimples' Swarek
I think u could add one more chapter to this?
4/28/2018 c1 148rebecca-in-blue
Hi, here from the all/no dialogue challenge. This is one of the few entries where I'm not fandom-blind, but even knowing the characters, I found it hard to get invested in the plot. There's a lot of dialogue, but also a lot of characters, and their lines are all fairly short, which makes it difficult for their emotions to come through. I don't think their voices are especially distinct, either, and the cast size draws more attention to this. I would suggest editing out one or two of the Cullens, which would also help to keep your focus tighter on Edward and Bella; as is, the focus feels kinda all over the place, and some scenes go on too long. For example, Alice introducing Bella to Emmett; the descriptions of his appearance and where he's standing slow down the plot, rather than contribute to it.

There are also a lot of punctuation errors throughout; I could overlook some comma splices, since that's how dialogue sounds sometimes, but there are also a lot of missing commas, apostrophes for plurals, incorrect dialogue tags, etc. The "Do. Not. Get." and ALL-CAPS shouting are pretty messy-looking, too.
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