
5/26 c18 Guest
Hope you continue for a while or add a few more chapters to this and end it.
Hope you continue for a while or add a few more chapters to this and end it.
3/31 c1 banshee157
would still love to see an update in this story. Temari, Tenten and Sakura deserve 2nd apperances
would still love to see an update in this story. Temari, Tenten and Sakura deserve 2nd apperances
2/17 c5 guest
Damn that's hot not gonna lie.
Damn that's hot not gonna lie.
2/17 c1 guest
"He was the strongest ninja in the village, with the possible exception of Sasuke"... huh? what exception? Naruto IS the strongest ninja in the village. PERIOD.
"He was the strongest ninja in the village, with the possible exception of Sasuke"... huh? what exception? Naruto IS the strongest ninja in the village. PERIOD.
4/23/2022 c18 Guest
While the grammar is still a bit fucked, it was good. While some if not most... Or all my previous reviews may have seemed insulting or that I hate the story I meant it in good faith, I'm a tough-love kind of person, and I honestly love the story and the idea even if things could be better or certain plot points seemed like an outta place turn.
While the grammar is still a bit fucked, it was good. While some if not most... Or all my previous reviews may have seemed insulting or that I hate the story I meant it in good faith, I'm a tough-love kind of person, and I honestly love the story and the idea even if things could be better or certain plot points seemed like an outta place turn.
4/21/2022 c14 Guest
How do you keep fucking up clothing? Why does a dress have buttons? Why do you keep adding buttons? Are you really that stupid? Seriously, I like the story but you keep fucking up. Please... Proofread your stuff. Actually, ever hear of Grammarly, it's free and will help your writing, please use it.
How do you keep fucking up clothing? Why does a dress have buttons? Why do you keep adding buttons? Are you really that stupid? Seriously, I like the story but you keep fucking up. Please... Proofread your stuff. Actually, ever hear of Grammarly, it's free and will help your writing, please use it.
4/21/2022 c12 Guest
You messed up again, albeit small this time, with the clothes. While the grammar and structuring could still use work, this chapter was pretty dang good.
You messed up again, albeit small this time, with the clothes. While the grammar and structuring could still use work, this chapter was pretty dang good.
4/21/2022 c11 Guest
My only complaint, besides the grammar, is you saying "ups" instead of "oops". Who the fuck "ups".
My only complaint, besides the grammar, is you saying "ups" instead of "oops". Who the fuck "ups".
4/20/2022 c10 Guest
Once again you fucked up with the clothes.
Once again you fucked up with the clothes.
4/20/2022 c5 Guest
Her illusion is already of her in her twenties (possibly 25) so the tidbit, in the beginning, was fucking stupid and your description of Naruto taking her clothes off shows how stupid you are. Her shirt and pants wouldn't have buttons you fucking moron. I love the idea and plot of the story but goddammit if your writing skills and smooth brain antics aren't messing it up.
Her illusion is already of her in her twenties (possibly 25) so the tidbit, in the beginning, was fucking stupid and your description of Naruto taking her clothes off shows how stupid you are. Her shirt and pants wouldn't have buttons you fucking moron. I love the idea and plot of the story but goddammit if your writing skills and smooth brain antics aren't messing it up.
4/20/2022 c2 Guest
The grammar is shit. Honestly, it could be far better.
The grammar is shit. Honestly, it could be far better.
3/11/2022 c18 Guest
Will you ever upload the next chapters for this, if there are any?
Will you ever upload the next chapters for this, if there are any?