for Intensity7/26/2021 c65 Guest
It's so hard to see Harry like this. I feel sad but at the same time I feel utterly furious at Voldemort for doing this to a child. You bring out all the feels in the chapter so well.
I guess Harry losing his hand must have significance in the future plot but I really, really wish he could get his hand back.
The chat with Moony and him meeting his friends was priceless, especially that moment between him and Ginny.
Thank you for updating. Eagerly waiting for the next chapter !
It's so hard to see Harry like this. I feel sad but at the same time I feel utterly furious at Voldemort for doing this to a child. You bring out all the feels in the chapter so well.
I guess Harry losing his hand must have significance in the future plot but I really, really wish he could get his hand back.
The chat with Moony and him meeting his friends was priceless, especially that moment between him and Ginny.
Thank you for updating. Eagerly waiting for the next chapter !
7/26/2021 c65 Julifu
Another excellent chapter, this fanfic series has really made me rethink the way i felt about canon, you prove time and again that you can show people to be competent and rational without affecting the entretaiment value of the story, even fudge finally accepted that dumbledore was being honest with him (granted, that was after the most powerful wizard in the world, a famous mass murderer-turned innocent man-turned well regarded auror, and the brand new triwizard champion just gave him a verbal beatdown) and that was with the pink devil herself whispering horsesh*t in his ear the whole time.
Im very much looking foward to what Cedric does next, he seems to be more than willing to help any way he can, and after what he just went trough, i would guess he feels like he has to find a way to help Harry, looking foward to that conversation between them, and a possible new member to the order of the phoenix.
The dark mark "subplot" is going to be interesting as well, altough i feel that it wont manage to shake harry all that much, he already knows, deep down and maybe subconciously, that no matter what voldemort offered him, it was wrong and he shouldnt give it a second tought.
Remus has a heart of gold, and harry really couldnt ask for a better uncle or godmother.
the 5 person group formerly known as the golden trio continue to be some of your best writing, with each having their own ways of reacting to harry and his new condition, and their own ways of showing their support
interesting plot point, with harry not being able to regrow or repair his hand, altough i pressume you have already tought of a way to compensate, maybe an enchated muggle prostetic? either way, maybe a talk between harry and mad eye is due on this matter.
overall, an excellent read, and i can only hope that the next chapter wont be too long in the making.
Another excellent chapter, this fanfic series has really made me rethink the way i felt about canon, you prove time and again that you can show people to be competent and rational without affecting the entretaiment value of the story, even fudge finally accepted that dumbledore was being honest with him (granted, that was after the most powerful wizard in the world, a famous mass murderer-turned innocent man-turned well regarded auror, and the brand new triwizard champion just gave him a verbal beatdown) and that was with the pink devil herself whispering horsesh*t in his ear the whole time.
Im very much looking foward to what Cedric does next, he seems to be more than willing to help any way he can, and after what he just went trough, i would guess he feels like he has to find a way to help Harry, looking foward to that conversation between them, and a possible new member to the order of the phoenix.
The dark mark "subplot" is going to be interesting as well, altough i feel that it wont manage to shake harry all that much, he already knows, deep down and maybe subconciously, that no matter what voldemort offered him, it was wrong and he shouldnt give it a second tought.
Remus has a heart of gold, and harry really couldnt ask for a better uncle or godmother.
the 5 person group formerly known as the golden trio continue to be some of your best writing, with each having their own ways of reacting to harry and his new condition, and their own ways of showing their support
interesting plot point, with harry not being able to regrow or repair his hand, altough i pressume you have already tought of a way to compensate, maybe an enchated muggle prostetic? either way, maybe a talk between harry and mad eye is due on this matter.
overall, an excellent read, and i can only hope that the next chapter wont be too long in the making.
7/26/2021 c65 
36Mutt N. Feathers
Oh the pain for poor Harry. Learning to live as a differently able person can be hard, but I've done it for 30 years now. I'm sure there's a way to magically work with a Muggle prosthetic. Great chapter. MNF
36Mutt N. FeathersOh the pain for poor Harry. Learning to live as a differently able person can be hard, but I've done it for 30 years now. I'm sure there's a way to magically work with a Muggle prosthetic. Great chapter. MNF
7/26/2021 c65 36LMSharp
So. Fudge will stand on Cedric's integrity. There's a switch. I HOPE Cedric becomes an important character. It'll be fascinating to watch him, whatever he does, whether he turns on Harry as another Dark Lord aspirant or his reputation goes to ruins for supporting Harry regardless of where the Ministry goes with the evidence.
Does Dumbledore know what Harry tried to do with James's wand? (Nice nod to the Elder wand again there.) If so, will he break pattern and share with someone, or just keep it a secret?
Having Remus have the first conversation with Harry about his hand was a masterstroke. Remus knows about living disabled, and Harry will take his comfort much better than he'd ever take Snape's, even if one of Harry's best friends is Snape's godson and best reason for fighting. I also very much enjoyed every scene afterward. Harry's self-pity, bitterness, and apprehension turning into hope and affection for his friends during his talk with Remus (LOVED the "imagined" passage). Hermione being the first to discover what had happened, and her immediate acceptance and willingness to keep the secret giving Harry the courage to tell all the others at once. Draco's immediate ragging on Harry when he had the audacity to ASK whether they'd want to visit him again in the hospital. And the Ginny moment. She gets it like no one else can, and the callback to being "alive" not "good" or even "okay" was perfect. As a sidenote, I love how you've used your deeper look at Ginny's trauma in Year Two to really put her on equal footing with Harry from the get-go, to give them a foundation to talk to one another when no one else can understand and appreciate each other's strengths much earlier than in canon. This is how it SHOULD have been (especially in the movies!).
Thanks for writing. This would work as the final chapter. Is it? Or do you have one or two more before this fic is over?
36LMSharpSo. Fudge will stand on Cedric's integrity. There's a switch. I HOPE Cedric becomes an important character. It'll be fascinating to watch him, whatever he does, whether he turns on Harry as another Dark Lord aspirant or his reputation goes to ruins for supporting Harry regardless of where the Ministry goes with the evidence.
Does Dumbledore know what Harry tried to do with James's wand? (Nice nod to the Elder wand again there.) If so, will he break pattern and share with someone, or just keep it a secret?
Having Remus have the first conversation with Harry about his hand was a masterstroke. Remus knows about living disabled, and Harry will take his comfort much better than he'd ever take Snape's, even if one of Harry's best friends is Snape's godson and best reason for fighting. I also very much enjoyed every scene afterward. Harry's self-pity, bitterness, and apprehension turning into hope and affection for his friends during his talk with Remus (LOVED the "imagined" passage). Hermione being the first to discover what had happened, and her immediate acceptance and willingness to keep the secret giving Harry the courage to tell all the others at once. Draco's immediate ragging on Harry when he had the audacity to ASK whether they'd want to visit him again in the hospital. And the Ginny moment. She gets it like no one else can, and the callback to being "alive" not "good" or even "okay" was perfect. As a sidenote, I love how you've used your deeper look at Ginny's trauma in Year Two to really put her on equal footing with Harry from the get-go, to give them a foundation to talk to one another when no one else can understand and appreciate each other's strengths much earlier than in canon. This is how it SHOULD have been (especially in the movies!).
Thanks for writing. This would work as the final chapter. Is it? Or do you have one or two more before this fic is over?
7/26/2021 c65 siriusfan1990
This chapter is Gold. Especially the conversation between Dumbledore and Sirius, and then Sirius, Dumbledore and Fudge, Cedric's entry. Awesome.
This chapter is Gold. Especially the conversation between Dumbledore and Sirius, and then Sirius, Dumbledore and Fudge, Cedric's entry. Awesome.
7/26/2021 c65 25Kioko Yasu
Go Cedric, GO!
I really love the Harry/Ginny build up. At least it feels like you're setting them up to still be together. It feels like what canon wanted to be but failed at.
25Kioko YasuGo Cedric, GO!
I really love the Harry/Ginny build up. At least it feels like you're setting them up to still be together. It feels like what canon wanted to be but failed at.
7/26/2021 c65 Stolen Shoelaces
Would love to see just a bit more of Harry and his relationship to his Dar Mark. Since this whole with marking Potter as his own has been such a big theme in this book it would feel a bit rushed if there was no arc at all for this one. Or if you decide on using it later on and don't want to come to a conclusion for this issue right no, I'd advise you to signal that the Dark Mark is going to play a larger role later on, just anything that let's us know that you will come to a conclusion, be it this year still or next year or whenever.
Next thing, prose. Your prose isn't bad by any means, especially considering that this is fanfiction, but it is bland and quite dry. You usually state what happens in a very neutral manner and I think that's lost potential. I think it would profit if you expressed the POV character's emotions and thoughts in there more prominently by presenting things in a certain light, focussing on different things etc. I think in general you could express each character's emotions more prominently because as it is, the story feels a bit like a report on the happenings and not like something that the characters would have experienced as well.
Apart from that, your characterizations and themes are really good and I hope you'll be able to bring this series to a closure one day.
Would love to see just a bit more of Harry and his relationship to his Dar Mark. Since this whole with marking Potter as his own has been such a big theme in this book it would feel a bit rushed if there was no arc at all for this one. Or if you decide on using it later on and don't want to come to a conclusion for this issue right no, I'd advise you to signal that the Dark Mark is going to play a larger role later on, just anything that let's us know that you will come to a conclusion, be it this year still or next year or whenever.
Next thing, prose. Your prose isn't bad by any means, especially considering that this is fanfiction, but it is bland and quite dry. You usually state what happens in a very neutral manner and I think that's lost potential. I think it would profit if you expressed the POV character's emotions and thoughts in there more prominently by presenting things in a certain light, focussing on different things etc. I think in general you could express each character's emotions more prominently because as it is, the story feels a bit like a report on the happenings and not like something that the characters would have experienced as well.
Apart from that, your characterizations and themes are really good and I hope you'll be able to bring this series to a closure one day.
7/26/2021 c65 OWLOFDASEA
The Draco snark we love and I love supportive friends and the minister FINALLY HAVING A BAVK BOBE
The Draco snark we love and I love supportive friends and the minister FINALLY HAVING A BAVK BOBE
7/26/2021 c65 AmbitiousCompany
I am so emotional everytime I read a new chapter. The feels on this one are strong. It sucks that Harry will lose his hand but the portrayal of the loss is so real - the resentment, the shame, the grief...
Harry still seems to be struggling with what happened at the graveyard and will continue to unless he speaks to Sirius, Dumbledore or his friends. I hope that happens soon. I can understand why you went the route of Harry losing his hand as something had to give.
Proper canon divergence too now with Ministry acknowledging Voldemort's return. It makes everything so much more interesting with many moving pieces and both sides of the war properly competent.
Is there a more hated character than Umbridge?
I am so emotional everytime I read a new chapter. The feels on this one are strong. It sucks that Harry will lose his hand but the portrayal of the loss is so real - the resentment, the shame, the grief...
Harry still seems to be struggling with what happened at the graveyard and will continue to unless he speaks to Sirius, Dumbledore or his friends. I hope that happens soon. I can understand why you went the route of Harry losing his hand as something had to give.
Proper canon divergence too now with Ministry acknowledging Voldemort's return. It makes everything so much more interesting with many moving pieces and both sides of the war properly competent.
Is there a more hated character than Umbridge?
7/26/2021 c65 4Iwik
You've made my insides hurt with this chapter, in a good, confusing way.
I'm so happy Cedric is acting the way a Champion would, and that Fudge is on their side. I'm not sure how much that would change, since he's pretty incompetent, but it's better than hostility. I do wonder when Umbridge will get her due.
Ginny's ending remark is so on point. They're really on the same wavelength, which will help with his dealings with everything that happened. I think Ginny can understand the need for the Avada Kedavra, and also his frustration/shame when it failed.
Thank you for updating again!
4IwikYou've made my insides hurt with this chapter, in a good, confusing way.
I'm so happy Cedric is acting the way a Champion would, and that Fudge is on their side. I'm not sure how much that would change, since he's pretty incompetent, but it's better than hostility. I do wonder when Umbridge will get her due.
Ginny's ending remark is so on point. They're really on the same wavelength, which will help with his dealings with everything that happened. I think Ginny can understand the need for the Avada Kedavra, and also his frustration/shame when it failed.
Thank you for updating again!
7/26/2021 c65 Olito y Kai
Poor Harry! I was really hoping he could have his hand back
His reaction to everything is so real. He is so brave, but is also a child...
Poor Harry! I was really hoping he could have his hand back
His reaction to everything is so real. He is so brave, but is also a child...
7/26/2021 c65 janawael1000100
I really really don't want Harry to lose his hand can't they find it somewhere and attach it please
I really really don't want Harry to lose his hand can't they find it somewhere and attach it please
7/22/2021 c57 Sage of Wind Dragons
why not just disqualify himself? gha. red sparks give up!
course do that might have a death eater waiting for him.
why not just disqualify himself? gha. red sparks give up!
course do that might have a death eater waiting for him.