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4/9 c2 Guest
Same person from before just say my review said it as from chapter 14 I actually haven't read that far yet.
4/9 c14 Guest
I liked it alot
12/1/2019 c14 LurkerTheNinth
Normally, I find the topic of terminal illness, and mortality in general, to be deeply uncomfortable, but I decided to give this story a try anyway. And I'm really glad I did.

The highlight, I think, is the strong optimistic tone and message to it all, while still exploring the emotional turmoil of the topic at hand, such that, while I can really feel the melancholy during the more sombre scenes, it makes those moments of hopeful resolution that much more cathartic.

Also, I think you did a great job characterising Hirano, his motivations, his conflicting feelings, how he sees other people, especially Yuuki, and the way his past, hopeful self is conflicting with his current, depressive one, all with the lens of an artist-hopeful colouring his narrative. The frame scene in Chapter 7 being a good example.
Similarly, I liked how you got both the exuberantly charismatic, and quietly vulnerable sides to Yuuki across from that same perspective. I hope there'll be more opportunities for Hirano to affect Yuuki instead of him solely being inspired by her.

I'm really looking forward to more of this to see how things move forward, but please don't feel time-pressured and write at your own pace.
11/18/2019 c14 TheCzechLAMA
So, you didn't abandon this story, a surprise, to be sure, but a welcome one.
10/27/2019 c1 1Kancolle Haruna Chan
First thing I see is a Rage of Bahamut reference.

Cool.
4/2/2019 c13 9TheRangerBoy
Each one of these chapters breaks my heart, but we're this to end well... I'd feel cheated.
3/7/2019 c12 Guest
Cutting my feels like butter man
1/25/2019 c12 1SuperKaiokenGoku
Nice
1/23/2019 c12 9TheRangerBoy
Damn...

You're hitting with the feels this chapter...
10/5/2018 c10 1Turtle Emperor
Awsome. But will the ones in the Sao that died will die here as well...? i hope not because this is fanfic.. and why aren't he interacting with the main character in Sao i mean like kirito asuna or suguha.. ehem anyway its good! Thanks for the work!
10/5/2018 c10 9TheRangerBoy
Damn...
9/16/2018 c9 SkyWing34
Despite this being a filler chapter I really enjoyed it! I love seeing the way you write better scenes they are so detailed I feel like I’m standing in that world watching it myself :3 I also love how Yuuki is inspiring the main protagonist to try something completely different then what he’s done before. I can’t wait for the next chapter! :-D
9/15/2018 c9 1SuperKaiokenGoku
Awesome, Plz keep posting
9/14/2018 c9 Guest
It may be filler...
But it adds character development so I'm cool with it.
8/28/2018 c8 Guest
I think this story is what the SAO community needs to see for once. I just like how you stick to the ALS premise by describing in details the MC’s physical and emotional decline instead of just a typical edgy adventure romance story that we all see and get sick of. I also enjoy the bit about Yuuki’s AIDS discrimination, since the issue is actually a real thing in some places. The only complaint I have is that you repeat words quite often, and sometimes in a span of two to three sentences. It gives me the impression that you run out of words to describe the scenario. But well done overall. Hope to see more of this story. :)
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