
8/19/2018 c10
4hakon2feb
Hi.
Lots of useful information in this chapter, and a nice setup for future events :) I especially enjoyed the foreshadowing of Nagato :)
I am a bit disturbed by the fact that most marines (even the high ranking ones that Sengoku invited to his briefing) are afraid of merely a poster of Naruto's crew... Does he have a Voldemort vibe going on, where people fear to even say his name out loud? Not even one of those vice-admirals spoke out about having a chance of beating him one on one or as a group...
Either way, keep up the good work :)
hakon2feb.

Hi.
Lots of useful information in this chapter, and a nice setup for future events :) I especially enjoyed the foreshadowing of Nagato :)
I am a bit disturbed by the fact that most marines (even the high ranking ones that Sengoku invited to his briefing) are afraid of merely a poster of Naruto's crew... Does he have a Voldemort vibe going on, where people fear to even say his name out loud? Not even one of those vice-admirals spoke out about having a chance of beating him one on one or as a group...
Either way, keep up the good work :)
hakon2feb.
8/19/2018 c9 hakon2feb
Hi.
I liked Asuka's introduction and the result of her one year training with Naruto. That dreams can change is a very good point some authors seem to miss out on (coughRowlingcough), and i think love would certainly be reason enough for it to happen :)
Either way, things should be somewhat different with Asuka on Naruto's crew instead of a part of the Whitebeard pirates... For one, she won't be obsessed with going after Blackbeard like in canon, or at least won't be going alone, although i do wonder if a better trained Asuka would be able to defeat him once canon rolls around...
Keep up the good work :)
hakon2feb.
Hi.
I liked Asuka's introduction and the result of her one year training with Naruto. That dreams can change is a very good point some authors seem to miss out on (coughRowlingcough), and i think love would certainly be reason enough for it to happen :)
Either way, things should be somewhat different with Asuka on Naruto's crew instead of a part of the Whitebeard pirates... For one, she won't be obsessed with going after Blackbeard like in canon, or at least won't be going alone, although i do wonder if a better trained Asuka would be able to defeat him once canon rolls around...
Keep up the good work :)
hakon2feb.
8/19/2018 c12 GunBlade2024
Hi there
I hope you continue this story, very uniquely written.
Keep up the good work!
Hi there
I hope you continue this story, very uniquely written.
Keep up the good work!
8/18/2018 c7 hakon2feb
Hi.
I like the way you are portraying Itachi so far. A bit like in canon, he is older than his appearance, yet some of his cynicism is tempered by the presence of his brother. I'm a bit sad he didn't want the Vice-Captain position, but i guess that too matches his character... Although it would be funny when, down the line, Itachi and Sasuke compare their bounty's only to find that while Itachi is far stronger he has the lowest bounty :p
Keep up the good work :)
hakon2feb.
Hi.
I like the way you are portraying Itachi so far. A bit like in canon, he is older than his appearance, yet some of his cynicism is tempered by the presence of his brother. I'm a bit sad he didn't want the Vice-Captain position, but i guess that too matches his character... Although it would be funny when, down the line, Itachi and Sasuke compare their bounty's only to find that while Itachi is far stronger he has the lowest bounty :p
Keep up the good work :)
hakon2feb.
8/18/2018 c6 hakon2feb
Hi.
So i guess my assumption about the Uchiha clan was somewhat wrong, seeing as Itachi wasn't the one to murder his family :p I guess it's just nice to see him appreciated properly as one of the good guys from the start... That he decided to join Naruto's crew was surprising, but i guess Naruto's goals better match Itachi's own here than they did in canon (at least at first).
I'm looking forward to seeing how things will turn out with Itachi, so keep up the good work :)
hakon2feb.
Hi.
So i guess my assumption about the Uchiha clan was somewhat wrong, seeing as Itachi wasn't the one to murder his family :p I guess it's just nice to see him appreciated properly as one of the good guys from the start... That he decided to join Naruto's crew was surprising, but i guess Naruto's goals better match Itachi's own here than they did in canon (at least at first).
I'm looking forward to seeing how things will turn out with Itachi, so keep up the good work :)
hakon2feb.
8/18/2018 c9 LazyRedHead
Lol I can imagine naruto talking to luffy when they meet and tell him about how his devil fruit won't help him in the presence of a raging female (Nami)
Lol I can imagine naruto talking to luffy when they meet and tell him about how his devil fruit won't help him in the presence of a raging female (Nami)
8/18/2018 c5 hakon2feb
Hi.
So... It appears Naruto's second crew mate is a swordsman, and... He's Sasuke Uchiha. Who can shoot fire from his eye. It's actually a bit strange that he introduces himself as a protector, but if he is the only swordsman on an island renowned for a clan of swordsmen i can guess his backstory is similar to Naruto canon to some degree. Should be interesting, even if the similarities to Luffy's crew are there :p
Keep up the good work :)
hakon2feb.
Hi.
So... It appears Naruto's second crew mate is a swordsman, and... He's Sasuke Uchiha. Who can shoot fire from his eye. It's actually a bit strange that he introduces himself as a protector, but if he is the only swordsman on an island renowned for a clan of swordsmen i can guess his backstory is similar to Naruto canon to some degree. Should be interesting, even if the similarities to Luffy's crew are there :p
Keep up the good work :)
hakon2feb.
8/18/2018 c4 hakon2feb
Hi.
I'm glad Naruto and Konohamaru got away safely. That they hooked up with the Sun Pirates and made a tentative friendship with them is boding well for the future :)
Also, i'm excited about Naruto and Konohamaru joining Shanks until he turns 17. I'm not sure if you'll use flashbacks or just show what's happening real-time, but i'm sure adventures with the red hairs should be interesting at least :)
Lastly, i don't think the bounty is too much, especially seeing how much damage he did to Mariejois and the dragons. Remember that Nico Robin got an outrageous bounty just because she might know about one of the ancient weapons, and was hounded at a younger age than even Naruto.
Keep up the good work :)
hakon2feb.
Hi.
I'm glad Naruto and Konohamaru got away safely. That they hooked up with the Sun Pirates and made a tentative friendship with them is boding well for the future :)
Also, i'm excited about Naruto and Konohamaru joining Shanks until he turns 17. I'm not sure if you'll use flashbacks or just show what's happening real-time, but i'm sure adventures with the red hairs should be interesting at least :)
Lastly, i don't think the bounty is too much, especially seeing how much damage he did to Mariejois and the dragons. Remember that Nico Robin got an outrageous bounty just because she might know about one of the ancient weapons, and was hounded at a younger age than even Naruto.
Keep up the good work :)
hakon2feb.
8/18/2018 c3 hakon2feb
Hi.
Seems being a slave isn't working out for Naruto, so naturally he wants to escape :p I do wonder for how much longer he and Konohamaru will have to stay there, but hopefully not too much longer.
Also, the visit of Vivi seems to cause some conflicting emotions with Naruto... Since she's part of the pairing i guess it's obvious that the situation will resolve itself with time, but i guess this is a good starting point for future interactions :)
Keep up the good work :)
hakon2feb.
Hi.
Seems being a slave isn't working out for Naruto, so naturally he wants to escape :p I do wonder for how much longer he and Konohamaru will have to stay there, but hopefully not too much longer.
Also, the visit of Vivi seems to cause some conflicting emotions with Naruto... Since she's part of the pairing i guess it's obvious that the situation will resolve itself with time, but i guess this is a good starting point for future interactions :)
Keep up the good work :)
hakon2feb.
8/18/2018 c2 hakon2feb
Hi.
Seems Naruto got into some spot of trouble with the dragons here... A shame Kushina died, but if you want to think about it she lived longer than most protagonist-mothers do in stories like these :p
Being a slave certainly doesn't sound fun, especially when one of your 'owners' holds a grudge... Then again, from the hottest fires the strongest steel is forged. A remarkable similar story as Boa Hancock and her sisters, and it seems Naruto has his first crew member in Konohamaru once they get out :)
Keep up the good work :)
hakon2feb.
Hi.
Seems Naruto got into some spot of trouble with the dragons here... A shame Kushina died, but if you want to think about it she lived longer than most protagonist-mothers do in stories like these :p
Being a slave certainly doesn't sound fun, especially when one of your 'owners' holds a grudge... Then again, from the hottest fires the strongest steel is forged. A remarkable similar story as Boa Hancock and her sisters, and it seems Naruto has his first crew member in Konohamaru once they get out :)
Keep up the good work :)
hakon2feb.
8/18/2018 c1 hakon2feb
Hi.
First chapter looking good so far. Naruto related to both Shanks and Rayleigh is quite impressive, and i'm sure he'll be able to grow into his legacy in time :) Not sure what the plan is for the logia fruit, but i can see it becoming useful in the future as Naruto grows stronger.
I haven't actually read the original, so this is completely new territory for me, but i have read some of your other stories and am excited to see where you'll go with this one :)
With that said, keep up the good work, and onward to chapter 2 :p
hakon2feb.
Hi.
First chapter looking good so far. Naruto related to both Shanks and Rayleigh is quite impressive, and i'm sure he'll be able to grow into his legacy in time :) Not sure what the plan is for the logia fruit, but i can see it becoming useful in the future as Naruto grows stronger.
I haven't actually read the original, so this is completely new territory for me, but i have read some of your other stories and am excited to see where you'll go with this one :)
With that said, keep up the good work, and onward to chapter 2 :p
hakon2feb.
8/17/2018 c12 0DINS0N
Ah.. Poor Yugito being manipulated somehow. Hope the crew save her from whomever has leverage over her.
Ah.. Poor Yugito being manipulated somehow. Hope the crew save her from whomever has leverage over her.
8/17/2018 c12 AnimeA55Kicker
What do ya know, uke-chan was right.
Ever notice that Naruto’s crew has a disproportionately large amount of Devil fruit users, like dangerous disproportionate?
What do ya know, uke-chan was right.
Ever notice that Naruto’s crew has a disproportionately large amount of Devil fruit users, like dangerous disproportionate?