for FEA: Playthrough of Light – Tome I: Emerina Angelus8/30/2018 c4 
1I'm a Nobody. Who Are You
I'm enjoying this story a lot.
The last time I read a story with Robin in love with Emm, she was already dead and it hurt to read.
But I haven't found another one since then.
The way you write is very impressive. I can't find a perfect way to express it but it's fantastic.
Thank you for writing. I look forward to your continued work.
1I'm a Nobody. Who Are YouI'm enjoying this story a lot.
The last time I read a story with Robin in love with Emm, she was already dead and it hurt to read.
But I haven't found another one since then.
The way you write is very impressive. I can't find a perfect way to express it but it's fantastic.
Thank you for writing. I look forward to your continued work.
8/30/2018 c4 OccasionallyCompetent
Great to see an update! And it looks like 'Marth' has arrived as well in dramatic fashion, always good to see everyone getting their time to shine.
Great to see an update! And it looks like 'Marth' has arrived as well in dramatic fashion, always good to see everyone getting their time to shine.
6/22/2018 c3 OccasionallyCompetent
Really liking your writing style and the imagery it conveys, hope to see more soon!
Really liking your writing style and the imagery it conveys, hope to see more soon!
6/22/2018 c1 OccasionallyCompetent
A Robin and Emmeryn fic? With the possibility of a future Robin and Aversa fic? Sign me up!
A Robin and Emmeryn fic? With the possibility of a future Robin and Aversa fic? Sign me up!
5/6/2018 c2 5csihawk
Abada-wha? My story helped inspire you? Woo-hoo! One o these days, I'll finish the next chapters. I'm 1800 words into the next chapter of the Cherche story! ...and zero for the next chapter of To Love a Memory... But, I do actually have 5000 words for chapters 11 and 30 or some random number, since they're much farther into the future.
Anyhoo, this is a review for your story. So:
Good author's note. One of the best I've read. Because it mentions me. /jk
I don't know if it's intentional or unintentional, but I think the descriptive writing in this chapter was better than the first chapter. I didn't have as much difficulty following what the subject of the sentence was. So, the chapter was written well overall.
As opposed to your previous chapter, I don't think you've introduced anything new in this chapter, so I don't think there's much else to comment on other than your style. I guess the part where Robin is hesitant to show his hand tattoo shows some detail into the character that was not mentioned in the game. And there is slight development with the Frederick character now walking beside Robin, which may suggest more comfort and less suspicion. But I don't know how to comment on that besides noting that it exists.
5csihawkAbada-wha? My story helped inspire you? Woo-hoo! One o these days, I'll finish the next chapters. I'm 1800 words into the next chapter of the Cherche story! ...and zero for the next chapter of To Love a Memory... But, I do actually have 5000 words for chapters 11 and 30 or some random number, since they're much farther into the future.
Anyhoo, this is a review for your story. So:
Good author's note. One of the best I've read. Because it mentions me. /jk
I don't know if it's intentional or unintentional, but I think the descriptive writing in this chapter was better than the first chapter. I didn't have as much difficulty following what the subject of the sentence was. So, the chapter was written well overall.
As opposed to your previous chapter, I don't think you've introduced anything new in this chapter, so I don't think there's much else to comment on other than your style. I guess the part where Robin is hesitant to show his hand tattoo shows some detail into the character that was not mentioned in the game. And there is slight development with the Frederick character now walking beside Robin, which may suggest more comfort and less suspicion. But I don't know how to comment on that besides noting that it exists.
4/26/2018 c1 csihawk
Very interesting. Your premise seems a little unique, at least the Emmeryn part.
There's not that much else to comment on. One thing that I personally kinda a little bit felt ish... is that maybe your descriptions were a bit too colorful? Two or three of your sentences seemed to be really, really, unnecessarily long. This might be my personal taste though, so take this with a grain of salt. A lot of people have difficulty being descriptive, and are instead really flat. So I don't want you to go in that direction... but maybe don't get too metaphorical or simile-ish. The "Soon, their combined prowess" sentence, for example, was really long. "The long, drawn out war" sentence might actually be considered an incomplete sentence.
But I will read more of your story, because I am curious what you will have happen to Robin and Emmeryn. So, keep up the writing!
Very interesting. Your premise seems a little unique, at least the Emmeryn part.
There's not that much else to comment on. One thing that I personally kinda a little bit felt ish... is that maybe your descriptions were a bit too colorful? Two or three of your sentences seemed to be really, really, unnecessarily long. This might be my personal taste though, so take this with a grain of salt. A lot of people have difficulty being descriptive, and are instead really flat. So I don't want you to go in that direction... but maybe don't get too metaphorical or simile-ish. The "Soon, their combined prowess" sentence, for example, was really long. "The long, drawn out war" sentence might actually be considered an incomplete sentence.
But I will read more of your story, because I am curious what you will have happen to Robin and Emmeryn. So, keep up the writing!
4/23/2018 c1 Guest
Your writing ist pretty good and I like the way you gave some insight in the alternate future timeline. It's also good to see more Robin/Emmeryn, they're my favourite ship. Looking forward to the next chapter :)
Your writing ist pretty good and I like the way you gave some insight in the alternate future timeline. It's also good to see more Robin/Emmeryn, they're my favourite ship. Looking forward to the next chapter :)
4/23/2018 c1 PfefferminzPrinz
Your writing is pretty good and I really like the way you gave some insight into the alternate timeline. I'm a huge fan of Robin/Emmeryn so I'm always happy when I see a new story about them. Looking forward to the next chapter :)
Your writing is pretty good and I really like the way you gave some insight into the alternate timeline. I'm a huge fan of Robin/Emmeryn so I'm always happy when I see a new story about them. Looking forward to the next chapter :)