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9/16/2018 c6 Roberto Pelotudo
Good
9/3/2018 c5 kagewolf25
Wow this story is AWESOME I'm really loving it and the back story of your oc is wicked, will Lycan be socially stunted? And will Minato and Kushina be super angry when they realise that he hasn't had a childhood but been trained as a solider?
8/10/2018 c2 Durrty Paramour
Uzushiogakure fell during the first half, of the six year long Second Shinobi World War. Senju Nawaki, brother of Tsunade had died earlier at the beginning. Uzumaki Kushina, and Namikaze Minato were already in Konohagakure's academy around six years of age. Made their rank of Genin before age eleven. At the end of the war, Tsunade went into her self-imposed exile at age twenty-four with Katō Shizune.
Before the Third Shinobi World War, Kushina became the second Jinchūriki of the Kyūbi no Yoko, and inducted into Anbu. She exclusively began a relationship with Minato, later they married before his promotion to Tokubetsu Jōnin/Jōnin, and instructing his own Genin team.
8/10/2018 c1 Guest
The Luck attribute, should have been multiplied by a factor of ten, same as the rest. You might wanna correct this error.
6/1/2018 c3 Guest
He toiled so that other village can use him, sucks. On to the canon rialroad again
5/29/2018 c1 19Smiling Seshat
Don't review your own story. If you want to answer someone's comments, PM them. If the person is anonympus, either don't answer or answer in an author's note. But don't comment on your own story.

And do not capitalize random nouns. You do that a lot. A word should be capitalized only if it's at the start of a sentence, or if it's someone's name, or if it's the name of a day or a month.

The best way to get more readers is to get yourself a beta-reader who can correct your work and make it even better. There's a whole section on this site called 'Betas' where you can find the right person for you.
5/6/2018 c1 3Pluto's Watcher
I don't have any plans for making Mc into a game character. His power will help him gain more experience and knowledgefaster.
There will be levels and all but, Chakra Control, Chakra reserve, Jutsu, Enlightment, and Knowledges about the world will what makes Mc stronger than simply killing and gaining exp.
5/3/2018 c3 Guest
Hope he becomes a missing-nin. Too many stories always have the MC in a village because it's the easy thing to write. Powerful ninja(Danzo) would notice he has hidden powers(gamer), safer to be on the run. Should run away on the way there. He could hunt bounties for exp.
4/25/2018 c2 KkSsVv
the story is good so far but I think you might need a beta to make your writing flow better
4/25/2018 c1 hinatayvonne
what generation will he be born in?

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