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8/16/2018 c2 Phoenixx Rising
This story seems interesting.
8/9/2018 c2 Guest
You know, you have a good beginning to your fanfic. The grammar is good, the writing is good and not at all hard to read. Even your OC has promise.

But please remove the Sakura bashing in your summary. You know that people and not only Sakura fans hate bashing, right?
8/10/2018 c1 1Novrier
Well, it is not a bad start for the most part. At least the OC has some personality that is actually interesting.
The pacing is a bit rushed at times, like the team meeting was basically breezed over. Not crippling, but try to expand the scenes more, add details. Not all details are crucial, but minor details help build a better picture. Without them you sort of strip the story to the bare minimum.
Aside from that, future chapters will show. But as a start, this is a relative good beginning for a story.
8/9/2018 c1 youareasaltyfag
Trash. Kill yourself, virgin.
5/1/2018 c1 October Adept
Nice chapter. One note though, Madara didn't kill Hashirama.

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