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1/9/2019 c37 Runemagus555
Okay you seem to be putting in to much Dungeons and Dragons elements and it is taking away from actual character development and actual stuff from The Spyro the Dragon and Harry Potter sides of the crossover.

This feels like Voldemort’s show as a Villain protagonist than Harry’s and Harry is supposed to be are main character here. That is bad writing.
1/9/2019 c37 King Wrym
Okay it really seems that this is more Voldemort’s story than anything as he seems to be the only one that has any real character growth.

I came here to see how Harry’s inheritance of the powers of a Purple Dragon would change his life and analyze the ripple effect of how such an impact would change his life. Not for humanizing a Magical Neon Nazi terrorist and mass murderer.

Take a look at Child of the Storm by Nimbus Llewelyn for how such a premise is done right.
1/9/2019 c37 Long Ryu Hai
I have to agree with Midgardsormr on this one. You seem to introduce characters with no real resolutions to their story lines or any real development and several plot threads for character arcs do not seem to go anywhere.

Take for example Xerxios. This is an example of a real problem as we have seen no indication of a force opposing the Dark Master aside from the various Purple Dragons.

This story has some good moments but is also outnumbered by the bad ones. You seem to be merging three different series together without taking the time to gradually make the readers understand what you are doing in terms of world building and forcibly adding Dungeons and Dragons elements that does not fit. Harry can learn the classes as it does not seem to impact the story itself or the various themes of the story.

There are also various plot threads that do not seem to go anywhere and you seem to be rushing some character’s development to quickly without any sense of a resolution or real growth aside from Harry and Voldemort which works as foils for eachover but you also seem to neglect everyone else like the other members of Harry’s social circle as they either as plot devices to move the plot forward or foils to move things.

Also Harry Potter is massively underdeveloped as he only seems to be getting new power while not growing as an actual person.

You seem to be focusing on the stuff in their universe but not the themes of their stories.
1/9/2019 c37 Midgardsormr Jr
Great so there’s a cosmic chess game between The Dark Master and this Xerxios Character that comes right out of nowhere. That is a real problem as we have seen no indication of a force opposing the Dark Master aside from the various Purple Dragons.

This story has some good moments but also some bad ones. You seem to be merging three different series together without taking the time to gradually make the readers understand what you are doing in terms of world building and forcibly adding Dungeons and Dragons elements or explain to the reader various plot threads that do not seem to go anywhere and you seem to be rushing some character’s development to quickly without any sense of a resolution or real growth.

But you really don’t listen to criticism so let’s see what we got. Voldemort’s time is running out. He has made his fate.
1/9/2019 c37 God-King Ghidora
Voldemort you bloody fool! You had a chance to get out of this mess! You dug you’re own grave.
1/9/2019 c37 Loki's Tongue
Who is Xarxiros? Why is he here? And it is time, let’s get ready to rumble!
1/8/2019 c37 3WhiteElfElder
Voldemort, the great player, is being played.
1/8/2019 c37 60D.J. Scales
Nice job so far in the Final Battles of the Legend of Spyro Games and the Spyro Reignited Trilogy Games but I have yet to see something from Skylanders.
1/2/2019 c36 Loki's Tongue
This is in my opinion the best chapter of the story, keep on trucking and examine this one going forward.
1/2/2019 c36 God-King Ghidora
So how far does Harry’s new power go for his growth after the battle for his soul?

Also Harry has accepted his responsibilities and his Dragon powers. This was an excellent chapter but my only problem is that it is two short.
1/2/2019 c36 Midgardsormr Jr
It is as Tvtropes would prove it the battle at the center of the mind.

Also I saw that Persona reference don’t lie. Harry Potter is free from the Dark Lord and is given greater power. To what extent is not entirely clear though.
1/2/2019 c36 Leviathans Heir
So when is Voldemort going to bust out his secret weapon?
1/2/2019 c36 Dragon Fan
Okay Harry Potter is now the master of his soul and may still have some of the Dark Lord’s powers but purified. So will Harry still have the power to talk to Snakes?
1/2/2019 c36 Dreamweaver543
So does Harry have a Persona?
1/2/2019 c36 Enku
Harry is free, and is the master of his soul as it should have been since the beginning. Now their are only two more Horcruxes to go. Voldemort must be shaking in his Dark Lord boots by now
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