for luffy the fourth Sweet Commander5/21/2018 c4 
45Black' Victor Cachat
Yeah, Garp really did fail a lot, with a nice chunk of self-pity for himself...
Can we have a list of the expanded crew, or are you planning to reveal them slowly?
45Black' Victor CachatYeah, Garp really did fail a lot, with a nice chunk of self-pity for himself...
Can we have a list of the expanded crew, or are you planning to reveal them slowly?
5/13/2018 c3 Black' Victor Cachat
Interesting work, although curious as to what you mean about the special herbs and drug tests
Interesting work, although curious as to what you mean about the special herbs and drug tests
5/13/2018 c2 Black' Victor Cachat
LOL Tamago had better be careful :-P
Interesting theory for Luffy being affected by his rubbery body, as well as how things seem to have changed with a larger crew. Although personally like the idea of him living with his crew more, as part of both his personality, and given his childhood.
Curious as to where you take the new DFP
LOL Tamago had better be careful :-P
Interesting theory for Luffy being affected by his rubbery body, as well as how things seem to have changed with a larger crew. Although personally like the idea of him living with his crew more, as part of both his personality, and given his childhood.
Curious as to where you take the new DFP
5/13/2018 c1 Black' Victor Cachat
Sorry it took so long to get to this!
Good attention to detail for Luffy's birthday.
Interesting approach for BM that despite how she treats her kids she hides how much she does care for them
Sorry it took so long to get to this!
Good attention to detail for Luffy's birthday.
Interesting approach for BM that despite how she treats her kids she hides how much she does care for them
5/7/2018 c2 VoyagersUnite
i like the addition of new characters and can't wait to see where this goes
i like the addition of new characters and can't wait to see where this goes
5/4/2018 c1 guest
Please continue to update this. There are not a lot of story where Luffy has links to that crew. Also it's great that it's not the cannon Luffy, but one with a different devil fruit and more mature. I hope you will update fast. I will love to read more about this treasure.
Please continue to update this. There are not a lot of story where Luffy has links to that crew. Also it's great that it's not the cannon Luffy, but one with a different devil fruit and more mature. I hope you will update fast. I will love to read more about this treasure.
5/3/2018 c1 Guest
The start is almost identical to funaho's but if they helped and the concept is so similar that is to be expected. As long as they are ok with it I am interested in seeing your take, just try to be creative and really make it your story.
The start is almost identical to funaho's but if they helped and the concept is so similar that is to be expected. As long as they are ok with it I am interested in seeing your take, just try to be creative and really make it your story.
5/4/2018 c1 Charlotte Pan
I like it...it needs a little refining but i will definitely looking forward for this fanfic...
I like it...it needs a little refining but i will definitely looking forward for this fanfic...
5/3/2018 c1 4El Pirato
I'm looking forward to stories with this new trope. Although I often saw Smoothie as at most, a lesbian, and bisexual at least.
4El PiratoI'm looking forward to stories with this new trope. Although I often saw Smoothie as at most, a lesbian, and bisexual at least.
5/3/2018 c1 1theonereader
truly a good chapter. I did read the story with the same basis from funahoMisaki and your. idea seems to be as good as that one. Continue like that, it's the first I see with that kind of background, a mature Luffy with bigger crew and a new devil fruit. Such a great. mix of good ideas. I like it.
1theonereadertruly a good chapter. I did read the story with the same basis from funahoMisaki and your. idea seems to be as good as that one. Continue like that, it's the first I see with that kind of background, a mature Luffy with bigger crew and a new devil fruit. Such a great. mix of good ideas. I like it.
5/3/2018 c1 Baron Bolt
If I had to chose a devil fruit for Luffy maybe shiki the lion fruit.
All in all nice for smoothie to get a shot
If I had to chose a devil fruit for Luffy maybe shiki the lion fruit.
All in all nice for smoothie to get a shot