for The Perfect One10/27/2019 c6 Guest
Why do you keep having Will be called “kid”? Yes, he might be younger than most of the characters appearing so far, but he’s not a kid.
Everyone becomes an adult by 18 (legal adult, can vote, and can drink outside of America), and 21 is the legal drinking age in America.
Will is 23, so he’s an adult.
Plus, it’s not like the rest of cast is THAT much older than Will.
In fact, outside of Fury, Thor, and maybe Tony, most of the cast is decently close to Will’s age.
Black Widow was born in 1984, meaning at best she’s 4 years older than him, and Steve Rogers was around 26-27 when he was frozen alive and is therefore not much older physically.
Hence why having Will labeled as “kid” as kind of redundant and moot
Why do you keep having Will be called “kid”? Yes, he might be younger than most of the characters appearing so far, but he’s not a kid.
Everyone becomes an adult by 18 (legal adult, can vote, and can drink outside of America), and 21 is the legal drinking age in America.
Will is 23, so he’s an adult.
Plus, it’s not like the rest of cast is THAT much older than Will.
In fact, outside of Fury, Thor, and maybe Tony, most of the cast is decently close to Will’s age.
Black Widow was born in 1984, meaning at best she’s 4 years older than him, and Steve Rogers was around 26-27 when he was frozen alive and is therefore not much older physically.
Hence why having Will labeled as “kid” as kind of redundant and moot
10/4/2019 c1 vmage2
""RAHH!" Will shouted". Repeating things like that and using "words" like "rahh" in a story is amateurish and should be left in comics and manga where it can be seen. Also, you might want to use synonyms. Instead of repeating "shouted" use words like "roared" or "bellowed".
""RAHH!" Will shouted". Repeating things like that and using "words" like "rahh" in a story is amateurish and should be left in comics and manga where it can be seen. Also, you might want to use synonyms. Instead of repeating "shouted" use words like "roared" or "bellowed".
9/28/2019 c1 Guest
Great story, I like your writing style. But refrain from writing down shouts like "'RRRAAAAAHHHH' Will shouted" . Instead simply stating that he had shouted while throwing his hands forward would have sufficed to describe the intensity...these king of caps locked shouts and sounds like "KABOOM" are extremly amateurish and a stain on your otherwise impressive prose style.
Great story, I like your writing style. But refrain from writing down shouts like "'RRRAAAAAHHHH' Will shouted" . Instead simply stating that he had shouted while throwing his hands forward would have sufficed to describe the intensity...these king of caps locked shouts and sounds like "KABOOM" are extremly amateurish and a stain on your otherwise impressive prose style.
9/21/2019 c6 Chacca7
really great story. I hope you update soon! the integration of all the side stories are crazy well done! cant wait for the next one.
really great story. I hope you update soon! the integration of all the side stories are crazy well done! cant wait for the next one.
8/25/2019 c6 
1Omni-Creator Kami of Anime
At this point, you should add Scarlet Witch to the pairing. She’s really hot, Vision doesn’t really deserve her(and even if he did, he still dies), and she could understand him better than the other girls due to having Psionic powers.
1Omni-Creator Kami of AnimeAt this point, you should add Scarlet Witch to the pairing. She’s really hot, Vision doesn’t really deserve her(and even if he did, he still dies), and she could understand him better than the other girls due to having Psionic powers.
8/8/2019 c6 Antianti12
So what u a liberal or something of course it had to be a white supremacists gang and the killer you just had to say he was a white murderer like always huh?
So what u a liberal or something of course it had to be a white supremacists gang and the killer you just had to say he was a white murderer like always huh?
7/25/2019 c6 sudhush
Nice filler chapter, his work and daily life portrayed nicely can't wait for the next chapter. Keep up the Great Work bro until next time BYE.
Nice filler chapter, his work and daily life portrayed nicely can't wait for the next chapter. Keep up the Great Work bro until next time BYE.
7/25/2019 c5 sudhush
Nicely done chapter the integration of Will in the Avengers Canon movie plot is nicely scripted. and paring with Skye is the best part. Keep up the Great Work bro.
Nicely done chapter the integration of Will in the Avengers Canon movie plot is nicely scripted. and paring with Skye is the best part. Keep up the Great Work bro.
7/24/2019 c4 sudhush
Great chapter the integration for AVP was great Idea and the story fit perfectly with the story plot. Great Work Bro.
Great chapter the integration for AVP was great Idea and the story fit perfectly with the story plot. Great Work Bro.
7/24/2019 c3 sudhush
Great chapter and the fights and new powers are nicely synced with the story plot, Keep up the great work dude.
Great chapter and the fights and new powers are nicely synced with the story plot, Keep up the great work dude.