for The Legacy of Marco Diaz and Star Butterfly11/11/2019 c3 Guest
Please make more chapters
Please make more chapters
11/23/2018 c3 Celestialfyxen
So hope that this does not become a Janna x Marco thing. Really pleased with the psychological impact being laid out for a change. Most fics just assume this neurotic kid would adapt to the real circumstances of the challenge with ease and without long lasting impacts.
Hope you resume your story soon. Curious about what is happening to Star, she seems to be a major side note at the moment, unfortunately.
So hope that this does not become a Janna x Marco thing. Really pleased with the psychological impact being laid out for a change. Most fics just assume this neurotic kid would adapt to the real circumstances of the challenge with ease and without long lasting impacts.
Hope you resume your story soon. Curious about what is happening to Star, she seems to be a major side note at the moment, unfortunately.
7/12/2018 c3 absent
When are you returning?
When are you returning?
5/27/2018 c3 The Book of Eli
Let it not be said that normal people just don't get magic. Plus awkwardness is a given with Marco be he a badass or just a really good guy...
Let it not be said that normal people just don't get magic. Plus awkwardness is a given with Marco be he a badass or just a really good guy...
5/27/2018 c3 
5allen Vth
First chapter may have gone a bit too quick, but everything else is turning out great!
How everyone is reacting to the changes done to Marco and Star, the latter especially.
I think it was too quickly how Marco knew who Candle worked for, maybe add a bit of extra info some chapter later, explaining how he figured it out. It doesn't have to be the next one since that's about Jackie.
Will this story follow the story cannon, or will there be some extra additions? You keep mispelling Rafael's name, you keep putting "Raftel". Speaking of the parents, that bit from Angie last chapter was just amazing. One of the highlights of this story actually.
5allen VthFirst chapter may have gone a bit too quick, but everything else is turning out great!
How everyone is reacting to the changes done to Marco and Star, the latter especially.
I think it was too quickly how Marco knew who Candle worked for, maybe add a bit of extra info some chapter later, explaining how he figured it out. It doesn't have to be the next one since that's about Jackie.
Will this story follow the story cannon, or will there be some extra additions? You keep mispelling Rafael's name, you keep putting "Raftel". Speaking of the parents, that bit from Angie last chapter was just amazing. One of the highlights of this story actually.
5/25/2018 c2 Crimson SwordKeeper626
Okay, that escalated badly. Oh boy, and isn't Mr. Candle working for Tom?
Okay, that escalated badly. Oh boy, and isn't Mr. Candle working for Tom?
5/22/2018 c2 The Book of Eli
Oh boy looks like things are going to get even crazier with things between everyone in Marco's life...
Oh boy looks like things are going to get even crazier with things between everyone in Marco's life...
5/24/2018 c2 19ReaperJ
Dude... FUCKING YES!? Now I'm really hooked on how you got this going on! Kinda funny, but when Star offered to sit next to him. All I could think about was Star being Marco's emotional support animal lol.
Not in a bad way at all! Just too cute on how she knows what's going on with him and is the only person that can pick up on his issues and help him not have a break down. That or freak the fuck out when something happens that he can't control.
Angie is so down for Starco lol.
Marco calling himself a internet dimensional Magic cop... I was laughing my ass of, but he does have a good point. Star was just too cute on not letting forget how much of an honor that title is.
Janna is for sure on the top 5 girls I love on this show, I think you got her perfectly! You can just read this story and feel the gears turning in her head, and you just know she's up to no good like always lol!
I'm kinda surprised how the kids at school are worried about Star, they welcomed her with arms wide open when they found out what she was. I know that whole Mewberty thing messed them up a little bit, but that was so long ago!
You're knocking this story right out of the park! I want so much more and want to see where you take this thing.
Great job and can't wait for the next chapter!
19ReaperJDude... FUCKING YES!? Now I'm really hooked on how you got this going on! Kinda funny, but when Star offered to sit next to him. All I could think about was Star being Marco's emotional support animal lol.
Not in a bad way at all! Just too cute on how she knows what's going on with him and is the only person that can pick up on his issues and help him not have a break down. That or freak the fuck out when something happens that he can't control.
Angie is so down for Starco lol.
Marco calling himself a internet dimensional Magic cop... I was laughing my ass of, but he does have a good point. Star was just too cute on not letting forget how much of an honor that title is.
Janna is for sure on the top 5 girls I love on this show, I think you got her perfectly! You can just read this story and feel the gears turning in her head, and you just know she's up to no good like always lol!
I'm kinda surprised how the kids at school are worried about Star, they welcomed her with arms wide open when they found out what she was. I know that whole Mewberty thing messed them up a little bit, but that was so long ago!
You're knocking this story right out of the park! I want so much more and want to see where you take this thing.
Great job and can't wait for the next chapter!
5/24/2018 c1 ReaperJ
Alright... not bad at all! I like this a lot, just what was the deal with the poof and Star changing? Don't get me wrong, Mewberty Star is hella cute, maybe we'll get some more info on all that later on?
I think you had a great set up for all this, maybe a little too fast onto the the point. Could have been nice for a little flashback on how Marco earned Hekapoo's respect. Even could have shown a battle that he was in to show how much of a badass he is now.
It still all works out and there's more than enough time for you to dig into all those things and show us! Hekapoo making him into her champion was really sweet and now the flame is a great touch.
Might be a pain to always explain what's going on with that, you could give him the ability to hide it? Maybe he sets a few things on fire by mistake and Hekapoo show him how to hide it or something like that?
As cool as it it, it might be too much for when he's back on earth is all I'm saying.
Also, I think you should work on how Marco was sent back into his 14 year-old body. It just went from hug to, "Where's my hot bod?"
Have Star internal thought talk about feeling him as a massive man with the hug swallowing her up, to now a smaller squishier version him. It was great how open they were on needed to be with each other right now and wanted to spend the night together.
You you got a shit load of cool point from me with that ending! Can't wait to read the next chapter and I'm already digging the story! Nice work!
Alright... not bad at all! I like this a lot, just what was the deal with the poof and Star changing? Don't get me wrong, Mewberty Star is hella cute, maybe we'll get some more info on all that later on?
I think you had a great set up for all this, maybe a little too fast onto the the point. Could have been nice for a little flashback on how Marco earned Hekapoo's respect. Even could have shown a battle that he was in to show how much of a badass he is now.
It still all works out and there's more than enough time for you to dig into all those things and show us! Hekapoo making him into her champion was really sweet and now the flame is a great touch.
Might be a pain to always explain what's going on with that, you could give him the ability to hide it? Maybe he sets a few things on fire by mistake and Hekapoo show him how to hide it or something like that?
As cool as it it, it might be too much for when he's back on earth is all I'm saying.
Also, I think you should work on how Marco was sent back into his 14 year-old body. It just went from hug to, "Where's my hot bod?"
Have Star internal thought talk about feeling him as a massive man with the hug swallowing her up, to now a smaller squishier version him. It was great how open they were on needed to be with each other right now and wanted to spend the night together.
You you got a shit load of cool point from me with that ending! Can't wait to read the next chapter and I'm already digging the story! Nice work!