for The rebirth of the yellow flash5/6 c36 Ok
So I will preface this by saying that this story showed promise initially but, as many others have said, there are instances that don't make sense and plots that are either dropped or just get screwed. For instance, while you later went back and stated there is still the lack of complete trust in her, Naruto forgives Kushina far to easily amd apologizes to the woman who abandoned and threatened to kill him. Then there is the details of how he saved Sayuri and Hinata and they end up becoming outright bitches to him. Hinata still wants to abolish the caged bird seal yet she uses it against Neji, she cares about naruto but calls him a peasant after finding out his lineage. Then on to Sayuri, where is the deep seated need to replace Itachi coming from? What sense does it make for her to leave the village for Orochimaru? The next thing I have an issue with is how, in his first missions with itachi, naruto would've come across Shion in demon country, koyuki while the defended kazahana, and the mission to save an Uzumaki from Kusagakure where nothing else got said about it (leading to Karin being with Sayuri in the Jonin exams). Speaking of the jonin tests, why would suigetsu be with Sayuri and Karin to attempt kidnapping Samui and Kurotsutchi? Now for the CRA, you introduce the idea of him getting to rebuild the Namikazi clan through the CRA and Samui becoming his first fiance which leads him to "courting" the Daimyio's daughter as a possible second, then coming out of nowhere with the Namikazi being strictly Monogamous as a genetic factor... man I say there is a lot of good to be said but it is hidden behind that what stands out most. Hopefully this story returns and you deign to touch up the rough bits
So I will preface this by saying that this story showed promise initially but, as many others have said, there are instances that don't make sense and plots that are either dropped or just get screwed. For instance, while you later went back and stated there is still the lack of complete trust in her, Naruto forgives Kushina far to easily amd apologizes to the woman who abandoned and threatened to kill him. Then there is the details of how he saved Sayuri and Hinata and they end up becoming outright bitches to him. Hinata still wants to abolish the caged bird seal yet she uses it against Neji, she cares about naruto but calls him a peasant after finding out his lineage. Then on to Sayuri, where is the deep seated need to replace Itachi coming from? What sense does it make for her to leave the village for Orochimaru? The next thing I have an issue with is how, in his first missions with itachi, naruto would've come across Shion in demon country, koyuki while the defended kazahana, and the mission to save an Uzumaki from Kusagakure where nothing else got said about it (leading to Karin being with Sayuri in the Jonin exams). Speaking of the jonin tests, why would suigetsu be with Sayuri and Karin to attempt kidnapping Samui and Kurotsutchi? Now for the CRA, you introduce the idea of him getting to rebuild the Namikazi clan through the CRA and Samui becoming his first fiance which leads him to "courting" the Daimyio's daughter as a possible second, then coming out of nowhere with the Namikazi being strictly Monogamous as a genetic factor... man I say there is a lot of good to be said but it is hidden behind that what stands out most. Hopefully this story returns and you deign to touch up the rough bits
10/20/2024 c17 Guest
Of course you would make Naruto instantly forgive her for not only abandoning him but trying to kill him as well. Not only that but apologizing for being angry about being abandoned? Tf kinda stupid ass logic is that? I was very into this story but this is where I leave. Good luck on future stories
Of course you would make Naruto instantly forgive her for not only abandoning him but trying to kill him as well. Not only that but apologizing for being angry about being abandoned? Tf kinda stupid ass logic is that? I was very into this story but this is where I leave. Good luck on future stories
9/11/2024 c29 Booo
I was enjoying this story and the way you were introducing the CRA and a harem for Naruto. But it was a cop out to say no after the fact "because of his genes" disappointing to see in an otherwise good story thus far
I was enjoying this story and the way you were introducing the CRA and a harem for Naruto. But it was a cop out to say no after the fact "because of his genes" disappointing to see in an otherwise good story thus far
4/19/2024 c1 Guest
Really a neglect story can't come up with something original like wtf why the fuck it one parent lives or they seal kurama in naruto and his siblings u always make t a neglect story how about u delete this story
Really a neglect story can't come up with something original like wtf why the fuck it one parent lives or they seal kurama in naruto and his siblings u always make t a neglect story how about u delete this story
3/22/2024 c42 Guest
You lied it has been abandoned how dare you
You lied it has been abandoned how dare you
3/1/2024 c17 ForMyselfInTheFuture
Naruto apologizes to Kushina...Thats really all you need to know...naruto is the one tht apologizes to kushina for his neglect...Yeah my thoughts exactly, skip this trash
Naruto apologizes to Kushina...Thats really all you need to know...naruto is the one tht apologizes to kushina for his neglect...Yeah my thoughts exactly, skip this trash
2/13/2024 c17 
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NO HE FORGAVE TO FAST I WOULD LET HER SUFFER THE WAY I SUFFERD! I am sorry for yelling but i swear every fanfic he either hates them or was quick to forgive no i’m not hating but no his mother and that pervert need to spend a year in his shoes to see there mistake
1pnoah5381NO HE FORGAVE TO FAST I WOULD LET HER SUFFER THE WAY I SUFFERD! I am sorry for yelling but i swear every fanfic he either hates them or was quick to forgive no i’m not hating but no his mother and that pervert need to spend a year in his shoes to see there mistake
3/24/2023 c42 Guest
This story does need a rewrite unfortunately you had several plot points that pop up one chapter then get chucked out the next, it has potential but a lot of rough edges that needs sorting out
This story does need a rewrite unfortunately you had several plot points that pop up one chapter then get chucked out the next, it has potential but a lot of rough edges that needs sorting out
3/19/2023 c24 Guest
Well that explained the Itachi situation atleast but seriously what’s up with your Hinata going bipolar
Well that explained the Itachi situation atleast but seriously what’s up with your Hinata going bipolar
3/19/2023 c23 Guest
And now Hinata is randomly a bitch again for no reason, the attitude change could have been explained with Orochimaru marking her too but there’s no of that
And now Hinata is randomly a bitch again for no reason, the attitude change could have been explained with Orochimaru marking her too but there’s no of that
3/19/2023 c22 Guest
Why is Itachi kissing some random Komo nin when he is meant to be dating Ayame?
Why is Itachi kissing some random Komo nin when he is meant to be dating Ayame?
3/19/2023 c20 Guest
Been reading this the last couple of days and got to say wtf, there are so many inconsistencies with this story it’s insane, you copied the starter chunks from another author as you said but then you seem to ignore both them and your own additions changing the plot at the drop of a hat, like this chapter you mention Eizen a couple of times but only in passing but now suddenly he’s apparent Naruto’s best friend
Been reading this the last couple of days and got to say wtf, there are so many inconsistencies with this story it’s insane, you copied the starter chunks from another author as you said but then you seem to ignore both them and your own additions changing the plot at the drop of a hat, like this chapter you mention Eizen a couple of times but only in passing but now suddenly he’s apparent Naruto’s best friend