for The rebirth of the yellow flash3/19/2023 c20 Guest
Been reading this the last couple of days and got to say wtf, there are so many inconsistencies with this story it’s insane, you copied the starter chunks from another author as you said but then you seem to ignore both them and your own additions changing the plot at the drop of a hat, like this chapter you mention Eizen a couple of times but only in passing but now suddenly he’s apparent Naruto’s best friend
Been reading this the last couple of days and got to say wtf, there are so many inconsistencies with this story it’s insane, you copied the starter chunks from another author as you said but then you seem to ignore both them and your own additions changing the plot at the drop of a hat, like this chapter you mention Eizen a couple of times but only in passing but now suddenly he’s apparent Naruto’s best friend
9/17/2022 c5 amavgupta0
first thing naruto can also graduate early and if he was a little smarter in naruto then he would have graduated at age 10 as he himself said he took the exam 3 times in 3 years and failed them all but the 3rd time he obviously got a 2nd chance with the forbidden school so he passed so he took the 1st test to become genie at age 10
first thing naruto can also graduate early and if he was a little smarter in naruto then he would have graduated at age 10 as he himself said he took the exam 3 times in 3 years and failed them all but the 3rd time he obviously got a 2nd chance with the forbidden school so he passed so he took the 1st test to become genie at age 10
9/17/2022 c1 amavgupta0
bro tobirama should not be alive when minato was sent to the village or according to the ages it will make hiruzen 53 when naruto graduated which was 12 yrs of age and pls specify why minato didn't try to eliminate the threat of the masked man and how he came to be if Madara continued his plan or not and if he definitely had 1 eye because of using izanagi to survive against hashirama and only recovering it when he awakened the rinnegan when he was too old to fight
bro tobirama should not be alive when minato was sent to the village or according to the ages it will make hiruzen 53 when naruto graduated which was 12 yrs of age and pls specify why minato didn't try to eliminate the threat of the masked man and how he came to be if Madara continued his plan or not and if he definitely had 1 eye because of using izanagi to survive against hashirama and only recovering it when he awakened the rinnegan when he was too old to fight
9/11/2022 c9 xXTTVFAZEBTWYTXx
Good story only feedback is work on your dialogue, sometimes you rush things a little fast other then that nice story
Good story only feedback is work on your dialogue, sometimes you rush things a little fast other then that nice story
8/20/2022 c3 Xenokiller419
I would like anko to raise naruto because she seems to like taking care of him
I would like anko to raise naruto because she seems to like taking care of him
7/31/2022 c12 xXTTVFAZEBTWYTXx
Good story so far but I think you could improve on the character’s dialogue, sometimes you take thing a little too fast I’m not really sure how to explain it like how Naruto and hiruzens grandson became friends instantly and something else that I didn’t really like was Jiraya getting removed from the toad contract, it just felt a little too unrealistic
Good story so far but I think you could improve on the character’s dialogue, sometimes you take thing a little too fast I’m not really sure how to explain it like how Naruto and hiruzens grandson became friends instantly and something else that I didn’t really like was Jiraya getting removed from the toad contract, it just felt a little too unrealistic
7/9/2022 c19 luno
why didn't anyone ask naruto about his Sharingan when he killed all those men?
why didn't anyone ask naruto about his Sharingan when he killed all those men?
7/6/2022 c34 MoinLeute
wtf, for what do you need so many hand seals?... bot to mention the titanic amount lf chakra that implies
wtf, for what do you need so many hand seals?... bot to mention the titanic amount lf chakra that implies
6/9/2022 c22 killernooch
you said earlier that the kumo team got a earth scroll from a leaf team then said all leaf teams got heaven scrolls
you said earlier that the kumo team got a earth scroll from a leaf team then said all leaf teams got heaven scrolls
6/9/2022 c22 killernooch
your spelling really needs some work and also is itachi cheating on ayame? or did you just forget you had them get together
your spelling really needs some work and also is itachi cheating on ayame? or did you just forget you had them get together
14/10/2022 c42 Guest
It's good that this fic is dead cause it's complete and utter garbage.
The author doesn't even consider Naruto as a human as evident by the fact that Naruto forgives his mother after hearing Kakashi's story. If anything, Naruto shouldn't forgive Kushina at all but that just shows you can't write poperly
It's good that this fic is dead cause it's complete and utter garbage.
The author doesn't even consider Naruto as a human as evident by the fact that Naruto forgives his mother after hearing Kakashi's story. If anything, Naruto shouldn't forgive Kushina at all but that just shows you can't write poperly