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7/2/2019 c5 C.M.H
You some grammar mistakes in your chapters.
But other than that.
This is f*cking AMAZING!
I LOVE THIS!
And now Tobirama has a crush on her too!
Madara vs. Tobirama. What a battle that'll be.
Please come back and make some more chapters : )
7/2/2019 c5 Guest
Tobirama has a crush on a girl that Madara has an even Stronger crush on...wonderful :-)
10/10/2018 c5 uiKhGsl-geq
Why did you put a timeskip? Also, you changed Madara”s and made Tobirama’s POV all in first person. Was it intentional?
10/10/2018 c5 2merendinoemiliano
Cool
9/9/2018 c4 uiKhGsl-geq
Bruh.
You weren't joking when you said I inspired your story. I am quite shocked hahaha.
Ru is a fiery one, isn't she?
As far as advice goes? I have nothing else to say that I haven't already said on the other story. What you apply there you should also apply here, in terms of grammar, syntax and punctuation.
Good job though.
9/9/2018 c1 3Konoha's Springtime Angel
This is a very interesting premise you have there. Keep up the great work!
8/26/2018 c4 2merendinoemiliano
Quite interesting chapter, you definitly love to mess with your charachters. See you soon.
7/18/2018 c2 merendinoemiliano
See you soon.
7/18/2018 c3 merendinoemiliano
Really cool
5/31/2018 c1 Hepl
Im giving you advice not hate:
Shorter title
Have a thicker plot
Make it easier to see the main idea
Revise the summary, make it diffrent from everyone else's
Check your grammar
There I'm done!
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