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7/16/2018 c1 Stephen Bradley
Im feelin' yummy head to toe, you see me
Aint got no patience so lets go, you see me
Look, Im diet drama, wanna spend the night? Dont bring pajamas
Man theres so much heat beneath these clothes,
yeah, you see me...

Walk in the place, they know my face
Encore, sophomore, only one solo, I swore
Big mouth, applause, oh please one more
Wanna hear a bit before I say naw, let me check my itinerary

Umm alright, presto, skin tight, escaped and I risked my life
For what? So I can watch them bite?
Only one Gwen you can find like this
I mean blow your mind like this, your key wont shine like this
If it's yours then you know it wont wind like this, wind it up

Im feelin' yummy head to toe, you see me
Aint got no patience so lets go, you see me
Look, Im diet drama, wanna spend the night? Dont bring pajamas
Man theres so much heat beneath these clothes, you see me

I know youve been waiting but Ive been off making babies
And like a chef making donuts and pastries, its time to make you sweat
Sex and sugar is the flavor, ovens and beaters and graters
Beats made of bongos and shakers, its time to make you sweat

Come on, walk in the place, they know my face
Billionaire Boys, Ice Cream drippin' 'cross the floor
Big house, garage Bentleys, Ferrar
Wanna go before I say naw, let met check my itinerary

Umm alright, G4, G flight, bed in the back so I have a G night
Goodnight, hood right, aint no ***** you can find like this
I mean blow your mind like this, ***** watch dont shine like this
If its ticking then it dont tell time like this

Im feelin' yummy head to toe, you see me
Aint got no patience so lets go, you see me
Look, Im diet drama, wanna spend the night? Dont bring pajamas
Man theres so much heat beneath these clothes, you see me

I know youve been waiting but Ive been off making babies
And like a chef making donuts and pastries, its time to make you sweat
Sex and sugar is the flavor, ovens and beaters and graters
Beats made of bongos and shakers, its time to make you sweat, listen

Now sweat, baby get stupid, jump up, go crazy
L.A.M.B. in 3D, worldwide across your TV
P you crazy, howd you get this? This sounds like disco Tetris
Do I have time to connect this? Let me check my itinerary, umm

I came back for my spotlight
(For her spotlight)
I disappeared like Houdini
(Where Houdini?)
If yours didn't come out right
(If it's not right)
Go to Kinkos and Xerox me

Im feelin' yummy head to toe, you see me
Aint got no patience so lets go, you see me
Look, Im diet drama, wanna spend the night? Dont bring pajamas
Man theres so much heat beneath these clothes, you see me

Im feelin' yummy head to toe, you see me
Aint got no patience so lets go, you see me
Look, Im diet drama, wanna spend the night? Dont bring pajamas
Man theres so much heat beneath these clothes, you see me

I know youve been waiting but Ive been off making babies
And like a chef making donuts and pastries, its time to make you sweat
Sex and sugar is the flavor, ovens and beaters and graters
Beats made of bongos and shakers, its time to make you sweat

YUMMY
7/20/2017 c3 Anonymous
What baffles me is that you've updated this story after god knows how many years and there's been ZERO improvement from the chapters posted fourteen years ago. You've had almost a decade and half to work on it, what the fuck have you been doing for fourteen years?! Sitting around playing on your damn XBox? Seriously!
8/24/2004 c2 1DinoGoesRawr
i luv the topic .. but make the storie longer and show how they feel, that usually makes someone cry
8/30/2003 c2 alyssa
good job! keep it up!
4/8/2003 c1 Freddie
Look, I can see where you're going and it's good. But, you need to start using writing tools such as quotation marks around dialogue and paragraphs. It's just way too confusing otherwise.
4/7/2003 c2 sanchez the sk8tergurl
It is a very short story. Make it a bit longer but too long. but it's still a great plot.
4/6/2003 c2 luckev 4-ever
good, but uses " around dialouge! its hard to read without it.

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