
12/9/2024 c1 ZoyeZest
Hey there! I hope you're doing great!
I just finished reading your story Systema, and I absolutely loved it! I'd be thrilled to adapt it into my comic style or even animation. I'd work on it as a commission, and I think you'd really enjoy the final result something you might even want to share!
I'm a digital artist open for commissions and have a few spots available. I work on various types of artwork, my rates are reasonable, and I always deliver high-quality pieces. If you're interested, let’s discuss it further!
You can reach me here:
- Discord: baran59354
- DeviantArt: baran59354
- Twitter: ZoyeZest
- Instagram: baran59354
Looking forward to hearing from you!
Hey there! I hope you're doing great!
I just finished reading your story Systema, and I absolutely loved it! I'd be thrilled to adapt it into my comic style or even animation. I'd work on it as a commission, and I think you'd really enjoy the final result something you might even want to share!
I'm a digital artist open for commissions and have a few spots available. I work on various types of artwork, my rates are reasonable, and I always deliver high-quality pieces. If you're interested, let’s discuss it further!
You can reach me here:
- Discord: baran59354
- DeviantArt: baran59354
- Twitter: ZoyeZest
- Instagram: baran59354
Looking forward to hearing from you!
10/23/2024 c19 BlackStarMage
I'm enjoying this, but I can't help but think that this story would be a lot better if he had to actually earns these skills, by making them himself or by having a proper dramatic quest for them, would make this much more interesting compared to the random ass food fight quest giving such an useful and powerful skill. Of course, I have to acknowledge that this chapter was posted quite a long while ago, and this this comment can't change anything...
I'm enjoying this, but I can't help but think that this story would be a lot better if he had to actually earns these skills, by making them himself or by having a proper dramatic quest for them, would make this much more interesting compared to the random ass food fight quest giving such an useful and powerful skill. Of course, I have to acknowledge that this chapter was posted quite a long while ago, and this this comment can't change anything...
9/13/2024 c101
1jacobwills508
i absolutely love this story, i believe its my favorite RWBY fanfiction. love the work. keep up the good work

i absolutely love this story, i believe its my favorite RWBY fanfiction. love the work. keep up the good work
8/18/2024 c56 OreoShore
“I don’t know.” Feels like the theme for the next story arc. It’s also what I feel when I look at this and wonder when you’re gonna update ‘cause I’m running out of chapters, fast.
“I don’t know.” Feels like the theme for the next story arc. It’s also what I feel when I look at this and wonder when you’re gonna update ‘cause I’m running out of chapters, fast.
8/18/2024 c35 OreoShore
This feels really weird considering we don’t see Jaune and Ruby hanging out much.
This feels really weird considering we don’t see Jaune and Ruby hanging out much.
5/12/2024 c15
1AuthorxAuthor
i hate how everyone knows he's a gamer, i hate ozpin knowing, and i hate him sharing it

i hate how everyone knows he's a gamer, i hate ozpin knowing, and i hate him sharing it
1/3/2024 c23 ZEDNEMwashere
oh my goodness. Its amazing how you can create such a great piece of work with such a debilitating disability, you're an inspiration to everyone especially the ones who share the same affliction as you. I can't imagine being an australian :'). P.S. a JOKE
oh my goodness. Its amazing how you can create such a great piece of work with such a debilitating disability, you're an inspiration to everyone especially the ones who share the same affliction as you. I can't imagine being an australian :'). P.S. a JOKE
12/23/2023 c55 Valdiusmacto
Meh. Finally gave up on this about halfway through. You kept powering Jaune up, only to have him make essentially zero difference to the core plot. Over and over and over again. By the Fall of Beacon is was just asinine. So much butterfly effect should have made it impossible to play out mostly the same. Yet, you're so utterly unable to write anything original that it barely changed. Why even bother, if you're going to do that.
Meh. Finally gave up on this about halfway through. You kept powering Jaune up, only to have him make essentially zero difference to the core plot. Over and over and over again. By the Fall of Beacon is was just asinine. So much butterfly effect should have made it impossible to play out mostly the same. Yet, you're so utterly unable to write anything original that it barely changed. Why even bother, if you're going to do that.
12/23/2023 c4 VamPyr00
I was about to comment about him being so freaking dense...but it seems like (according to your review answers at the end) you are actually EXCITED about making him socially inept. Honestly, I don't see the charm in an idiotic MC but I guess it is popular... Hopefully it won't get too bad though. I don't know if I can read a story about a COMPLETE dumbass.
I was about to comment about him being so freaking dense...but it seems like (according to your review answers at the end) you are actually EXCITED about making him socially inept. Honestly, I don't see the charm in an idiotic MC but I guess it is popular... Hopefully it won't get too bad though. I don't know if I can read a story about a COMPLETE dumbass.