for Naming Thorns6/27/2018 c1 Guest
Pretty good reading here.
Pretty good reading here.
6/27/2018 c1 Guest
Anyone who names their child Hugo defiantly have trouble naming children
Anyone who names their child Hugo defiantly have trouble naming children
6/27/2018 c1 
41rosebud1000
This is such a great idea! The simple plot works well with the situation. The part where they're writing on the paper is a little confusing though; I'd suggest just using dialogue there. I also noticed some POV changes. From third person Hermione to first person Hermione, then at then end to first person Ron. At the end, the word "feel" is written instead of "fell." The grammar and spelling was good overall, and again, such a cute plot! I also really liked the title. Keep writing!
41rosebud1000This is such a great idea! The simple plot works well with the situation. The part where they're writing on the paper is a little confusing though; I'd suggest just using dialogue there. I also noticed some POV changes. From third person Hermione to first person Hermione, then at then end to first person Ron. At the end, the word "feel" is written instead of "fell." The grammar and spelling was good overall, and again, such a cute plot! I also really liked the title. Keep writing!