for All According to Plan2/17 c9 Mavsynchroid
So... What I get from this chapter.. is that Tonks is a ****ing idiot? I'm really hoping that the "Tonks" that took Snape to the cell was really Lyra and that Lyra WANTED Snape to figure it out. Otherwise, if it really was Tonks, then she's a biiiig ****ing idiot. Because why would she choose LYRA's (BELLA'S) face to approach Bellatrix!? Out of ANY face she could choose!? That's stupidity of the highest order. So much so that it doesn't even seem like something a character would do believably. No one that stupid could become an Auror. So.. I'm really hoping in the next chapter or so we'll find out that really was Lyra pretty much showing Snape the truth.
So... What I get from this chapter.. is that Tonks is a ****ing idiot? I'm really hoping that the "Tonks" that took Snape to the cell was really Lyra and that Lyra WANTED Snape to figure it out. Otherwise, if it really was Tonks, then she's a biiiig ****ing idiot. Because why would she choose LYRA's (BELLA'S) face to approach Bellatrix!? Out of ANY face she could choose!? That's stupidity of the highest order. So much so that it doesn't even seem like something a character would do believably. No one that stupid could become an Auror. So.. I'm really hoping in the next chapter or so we'll find out that really was Lyra pretty much showing Snape the truth.
11/3/2024 c34 
1cribinator
I'm on a reread here and i forgot how much fun this last chapter is, with dumbledores stubbornness and then slow realisation that not only did he fuck up, but he is also extremely fucked by his actions
1cribinatorI'm on a reread here and i forgot how much fun this last chapter is, with dumbledores stubbornness and then slow realisation that not only did he fuck up, but he is also extremely fucked by his actions
10/18/2024 c34 1Cele13hrt
I think my favorite part of this has actually been Hermione's character development. Which is saying something, because there are so many excellent parts to this, from basically all the characters in general to the explanations of magic and Powers and the critique of British Magical society. Instead, the story of Hermione's growth has me riveted, as she changes, kicking and screaming, being brought into the madness. I do look forward to seeing where our bizarre love square is going (or maybe it's a line with four dots?), and what exactly Cissy is going to do when she finds out what happened with Draco.
1Cele13hrtI think my favorite part of this has actually been Hermione's character development. Which is saying something, because there are so many excellent parts to this, from basically all the characters in general to the explanations of magic and Powers and the critique of British Magical society. Instead, the story of Hermione's growth has me riveted, as she changes, kicking and screaming, being brought into the madness. I do look forward to seeing where our bizarre love square is going (or maybe it's a line with four dots?), and what exactly Cissy is going to do when she finds out what happened with Draco.
8/13/2024 c2 Tea Earl Greatest
“we're more selfish and more controlling, less predictable and sociable“ - these are bad traits. They result in oppression, inequality, and violence, when a society adopts them.
“we're more selfish and more controlling, less predictable and sociable“ - these are bad traits. They result in oppression, inequality, and violence, when a society adopts them.
7/19/2024 c34 maiqsmail
I like the story and the characters but not a fan of extraneous wording and padding.
A line in a dialogue, then 3 pages of inner thoughts and background, then next line in dialogue...
Regarding the attack on Lyra. At first I wanted to ask for blood and biblical retribution because "black mage", but after seeing how everything unfolded and the attack neatly fell into HP murder scheme, I'm starting to think maybe she shouldn't murder all of them gruesomely. Still, if she just lets it slide and virtually thanks them for covering her up, I'll riot!
I also like how Hermione's character developed here.
I like the story and the characters but not a fan of extraneous wording and padding.
A line in a dialogue, then 3 pages of inner thoughts and background, then next line in dialogue...
Regarding the attack on Lyra. At first I wanted to ask for blood and biblical retribution because "black mage", but after seeing how everything unfolded and the attack neatly fell into HP murder scheme, I'm starting to think maybe she shouldn't murder all of them gruesomely. Still, if she just lets it slide and virtually thanks them for covering her up, I'll riot!
I also like how Hermione's character developed here.
7/19/2024 c30 maiqsmail
Going through this story sometimes feels like nibbling on a brick. I did not need whole pages of backstory on Dark powers that Lyra thought about while talking to Hermione. Does TMI mean anything to anyone here?
Going through this story sometimes feels like nibbling on a brick. I did not need whole pages of backstory on Dark powers that Lyra thought about while talking to Hermione. Does TMI mean anything to anyone here?
7/9/2024 c21 maiqsmail
Also, I really like how neatly you resolved the representation of Dumbdumb. He has *three* full time jobs, so it makes hell of a lot sense for regular school children to see him from afar only few times at Feasts and that's it (unless they get hospitalised after blowing up in an illegal magic experimentation). Some Dumbles bashing fanfics have him spending *all* meals every days in Great Hall, conduct regular staff meetings - and at the same time they want me, the reader, to believe he also attends all Wizengamots meetings *and* attends ICW meetings in foreign country? *And* have regular Order of fiery chicken meetings once the war picks up? Pah-lease. There would be some serious time turner usage to make it at least remotely feasible.
Also, I really like how neatly you resolved the representation of Dumbdumb. He has *three* full time jobs, so it makes hell of a lot sense for regular school children to see him from afar only few times at Feasts and that's it (unless they get hospitalised after blowing up in an illegal magic experimentation). Some Dumbles bashing fanfics have him spending *all* meals every days in Great Hall, conduct regular staff meetings - and at the same time they want me, the reader, to believe he also attends all Wizengamots meetings *and* attends ICW meetings in foreign country? *And* have regular Order of fiery chicken meetings once the war picks up? Pah-lease. There would be some serious time turner usage to make it at least remotely feasible.
7/9/2024 c22 maiqsmail
Nice story, but the way it develops is completely bloated. I know teenaged ramblings could be condensed, I've read stories that had them and it wasn't a slog to get through them, even angst/drama, emotionally heavy edgy fanfics could be read at decent pace. We really don't need 20 pages of Hermione POV feelings when 2 could do the same trick without having me to fast scroll through that just to advance the story. Seriously.
Nice story, but the way it develops is completely bloated. I know teenaged ramblings could be condensed, I've read stories that had them and it wasn't a slog to get through them, even angst/drama, emotionally heavy edgy fanfics could be read at decent pace. We really don't need 20 pages of Hermione POV feelings when 2 could do the same trick without having me to fast scroll through that just to advance the story. Seriously.
5/16/2024 c34 jmcninch316
Enjoyable story. a bit wordy, so if I zoned out at work, I didn't really have to go back in the story to catch up again, but that's probably not the best thing haha
if there is an update to the story, I will be checking in. Lyra is an interesting character.
Enjoyable story. a bit wordy, so if I zoned out at work, I didn't really have to go back in the story to catch up again, but that's probably not the best thing haha
if there is an update to the story, I will be checking in. Lyra is an interesting character.
4/19/2024 c12 Kirk Almeida
in canon Hermione is pretty much the only person with the normal amount of curiosity about magic and it's criminal how much it's ignored
in canon Hermione is pretty much the only person with the normal amount of curiosity about magic and it's criminal how much it's ignored
3/16/2024 c3 Molenir
Not really a fan of the gay stuff, so am going to bow out here. Thanks for sharing though. Solid writing. If the slash stuff didn't squick me out, I'd definitely be all in.
Not really a fan of the gay stuff, so am going to bow out here. Thanks for sharing though. Solid writing. If the slash stuff didn't squick me out, I'd definitely be all in.
7/5/2023 c4 Guest
Good plot and good expansion. Only your excessive and completely unseemly use of F.. word spoils the story like stones in a delicious pie. If you think it makes the story badas .. you are completely mistaken. It is plain ridiculous. A scion of ancient and noble family from 1960s with all the stiff decorum using such guttersnipe language.
Seriously is your vocabulary so poor?
Good plot and good expansion. Only your excessive and completely unseemly use of F.. word spoils the story like stones in a delicious pie. If you think it makes the story badas .. you are completely mistaken. It is plain ridiculous. A scion of ancient and noble family from 1960s with all the stiff decorum using such guttersnipe language.
Seriously is your vocabulary so poor?