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5/18/2020 c3 2Vovan1
Hope Ghetsis' Hydreigon ended up in care of Iris. She knows, how to take care of dragons.
8/24/2018 c1 themadman
I felt ash might have been a bit out of character as ash doesn't really boast all that much of his own achievements. That aside I was cracking up by the Arceus part.
8/20/2018 c3 6Trooper028
*claps hands* Bravo! Everything wrong with Team Plasma in a nutshell.

My favorite line was Ash telling N he couldn't be part of Team Plasma because his haircut wasn't stupid enough. That had be cracking up.

You have a great grasp at humor.

Other than fleshing things out like having Ash expand more on some of his points about why Plasma is bad. ...Like those grunts who were kicking Munna.

While I'm totally all for Ash winning this discussion. Perhaps N could be given a chance to make his case even if Ash keeps interrupting and poking holes in it?
8/20/2018 c2 Trooper028
Oh! I remember this! This was when we were discussing a peggy sue fic with Ash's Pokemon going back in time instead of Ash himself right? That was a fun discussion.

As for the story. The Legendary especially Arceus all going 'Oh Crap' one after another is just a real fun mental image.

Though maybe expand on it a bit more? It feels too short. Maybe bring in Ash's Pokemon into the discussion since Arceus wants to send them back in time? And they ask a bunch of timey-whimy wibbly-wobbly stuff questions given their past time-travel experiences?
8/20/2018 c1 Trooper028
This was funny. Ash knowing every legendary Tobias has and him losing because they all don't want to fight the kid who helped them out that one time.

This is good cracky humor. It plays with how Ash is a weirdness/legendary magnet and how he meets everyone important at some point.
7/22/2018 c1 GenX567
(I don’t watch the anime, so I’m not going to be able to review this story on content.)

One that's lie he has watched the anime. Two no one really uses it as the World tag has effectively been rendered useless by mix matching and the characters in each medium never crossing over.

Script format is not banned on this site.
7/22/2018 c1 23St Elmo's Fire
I don’t watch the anime, so I’m not going to be able to review this story on content. Please tag your story as anime fic to avoid this problem. Find your story under “Manage Stories” and select it from the dropdown menu that says “World: Any” in the “Category” section.

Script format is banned on this site, and as such this story is at risk for deletion. You should switch to prose format.
7/19/2018 c1 Fire4Heaven
Seeing how you are new to the Pokemon fanfiction section (your first one though you pulled it down before. Still counts kind of) it will be targeted by a group of egomaniac jerks who preach a twisted idea of how fanfiction should be. St Elmo's Fire is very likely to be this user who will post a review and not care one bit about you're story. They literally do it to everyone and never really follow or read it.

St Elmo's Fire and his friends go around being just a bunxh of jerks to users. In short I suspect he would complain about your summaey, capitalixing the name of your Pokemon, and writing the story in a way that isn't prose or some other nonsense.

Thsts not counting what he does to other users. Demanding you use a tag that doesn't really fit, yell at you for not explaining everything in the first chapter, using speach phases other then said, making aus or just as simple as having your characters say "Oh Arceus".

The guys group (Farla, Talarc, The Reeds of Enki) is best to ignore or block as they really don't help and are bettered blocked. Now with that said welcome to Pokemon,

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