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11/3/2018 c13 JJsMommy27
I am so hoping that she doens't decide to try and date more then one person especially Dean and Tristan that would just end bad for all 3 of them and but also don't want her to date the doctor that Tristan was talking to also.I think she should just listen to Jess and take her time and heal and just keep taking things slow with Tristan
11/3/2018 c13 lotris
por favor no Dean por 4 vez, 3 ya fueron suficientes. Mas trory!
11/3/2018 c13 3katiie13
great update, never been a dean fan though so I'm hoping she tells him she just wants to be friends can't wait for the next update
11/3/2018 c13 23Rori Potter
Amazing! Update soon.
10/27/2018 c12 Droolia
Interesting turn of events. So grateful Shira didn't notice her. Ethan seems like he might be trouble. Good thing Rory decided against him and his type
10/29/2018 c12 54nightnovice
Nice build up, looking forwards to what happens next.
10/27/2018 c12 Guest
I'm conflicted because I really like the fic as a whole, but there are sooo many inconsistencies it became very distracting. Again, I genuinely like the idea and story, so maybe take some constructive criticism to improve even more? I don't know if you just space out updates a lot and don't remember previous details or if it's just hard for you to catch that kind of thing and could use notes or a beta. Some examples that come to my mind right now are the pregnancy being 7 weeks in one chapter and 6 in the next, she begged her dad to keep it a secret from her mom but later he is surprised she didn't know, Chris asks her to work for HSH in the conference room when Rory tells him & Tristan about Logan only to ask again seemingly for the first time when Lorelai is in the hospital with them, she tells her mom & dad about logan/deedee and it's like her dad didn't know when she already told him, Dean knew her names and even called her dad Mr. Hayden then later says he didn't and assumed it was Gilmore, April and Tristan having gone on 3 dates then him saying they never did, Rory figuring out Jess was going out with Paris and saying she approves but then is surprised and has no idea when she sees them at the bar, that dr Ethan was there when her grandma had a heart attack and even got her food but later meets her seemingly for the first time... Sorry I honestly could do more but you definitely get the idea. As you can see, it wasn't just one or two discrepancies. That type of thing is easily overlooked in fanfic, but there were so many that it ruined the flow and enjoyment I was getting from the content. I hope you don't take this harshly and that it'll help in the future. I really like that Rory is realizing she deserves better, is working on herself, and that she & Tristan are going slow. They're very sweet. Hope she clears up that she only likes Dean as a friend though because she has to be getting vibes that he wants more and needs to not string him along like in the past. I also really like the friendships (the nurses/pt bonding with Rory, and Rory's with Paris, Lane, & Jess.) I know people put a lot of effort into these so thanks for writing regardless.
10/27/2018 c12 3katiie13
another great chapter
10/26/2018 c12 23Rori Potter
Amazing! Update soon.
10/26/2018 c12 Sara1287
Good, plz more soon
10/26/2018 c12 kaleik1
oh.. and plot thickens..can't wait for more
10/26/2018 c12 JJsMommy27
So can't wait for more of this story and so loving it more and more with each chapter also can't wait for more Rory and Tristan interaction
10/22/2018 c11 JJsMommy27
She so better not let Dean come in between her and Tristan
10/20/2018 c11 Rori Potter
Amazing! Update soon.
10/20/2018 c11 3katiie13
hmmmm that April seems to be lingering about too much for my liking! another great chapter looking forwards to the next update!
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