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11/22/2018 c2 Guest
I really like the story so far but my only two problems are the paragraph structure and the length of the chapters. If you are having different people speak the same paragraph it may cause confusion to the reader so I say start a different paragraph for every time different people speak.
"Oh no. Jim did it again" said the woman as she did something
"Really? I never would have guessed" said another person

Secondly people kind of like their chapters to be longer than 1k (in my opinion your best chance is 5k) per chapter. I don't mean to give you crap but these are the kinds of things people would look for

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