for Novocaine8/30/2018 c5 debygoebel
good chapter
they're all set up to start
hope they do turn the property into a public library and a museum.
crating something similar to a university, for the research would also be a great use of the place, with all the greenhouses and potion labs. Neville probably could help in there
good chapter
they're all set up to start
hope they do turn the property into a public library and a museum.
crating something similar to a university, for the research would also be a great use of the place, with all the greenhouses and potion labs. Neville probably could help in there
8/30/2018 c5 FrozenWave
I really hoping this isn't your way of seeting up a roundabout way for Draco and Hermione to get together later on. While I like both characters well enough, Canon Hermione more so than Canon Draco, I despise that pairing. People saying Hermione and Ron don't fit well together because they are too different and argue too much, but then in the same breath proclaim their love for Draco and Hermione together are blinded by Fanfiction. Two people with such a history of animosity between each other could never work out romantically.
Other than that, I'm really starting to like this story and, at this point, will at the very least read it until the end. Great work so far!
I really hoping this isn't your way of seeting up a roundabout way for Draco and Hermione to get together later on. While I like both characters well enough, Canon Hermione more so than Canon Draco, I despise that pairing. People saying Hermione and Ron don't fit well together because they are too different and argue too much, but then in the same breath proclaim their love for Draco and Hermione together are blinded by Fanfiction. Two people with such a history of animosity between each other could never work out romantically.
Other than that, I'm really starting to like this story and, at this point, will at the very least read it until the end. Great work so far!
8/26/2018 c4 sunsethill
Nice job covering the properties with economy of description. I have a good feel for them, but didn't have to read paragraphs describing every color scheme, etc. I also like how you are weaving in Harry analyzing how the relationships around him are working or not working.
Nice job covering the properties with economy of description. I have a good feel for them, but didn't have to read paragraphs describing every color scheme, etc. I also like how you are weaving in Harry analyzing how the relationships around him are working or not working.
8/26/2018 c3 sunsethill
I enjoyed seeing how things went in the Wizengamot. Nice use of a canon character we might not expect to handle the financial aspects, and hiring Draco will really shake things up, and could prevent the formation of an alliance against Harry.
I enjoyed seeing how things went in the Wizengamot. Nice use of a canon character we might not expect to handle the financial aspects, and hiring Draco will really shake things up, and could prevent the formation of an alliance against Harry.
8/26/2018 c4 Lordie
I like the cast of characters you've chosen to focus on. Looking forward to reading more.
I like the cast of characters you've chosen to focus on. Looking forward to reading more.
8/25/2018 c4 
31529
A good story so far, although I do feel that the interactions with Draco are pushing reality a little bit... in canon, Draco was too much of a coward to kill people (at least in a premeditated way, although he was just inept during sixth year), and a lot of authors seem to equate that to him being 'good', but there is very little remorse ever shown by him (usually none) and yet he's treated as if there are no bad feelings and as if he has never done anything wrong.
I don't think the Draco elements make the story unreadable by any means, but it is a way that the pureblood nonsense would have been perpetuated after canon as very few of the perpetrators were (again) held to account for their willing (and sometimes eager) actions during the war.
31529A good story so far, although I do feel that the interactions with Draco are pushing reality a little bit... in canon, Draco was too much of a coward to kill people (at least in a premeditated way, although he was just inept during sixth year), and a lot of authors seem to equate that to him being 'good', but there is very little remorse ever shown by him (usually none) and yet he's treated as if there are no bad feelings and as if he has never done anything wrong.
I don't think the Draco elements make the story unreadable by any means, but it is a way that the pureblood nonsense would have been perpetuated after canon as very few of the perpetrators were (again) held to account for their willing (and sometimes eager) actions during the war.
8/25/2018 c4 Thegriz
Usually I only look for complete stories.
I don't like writers that are looking for input, as I'm afraid that readers may change the story line.
Many writers have stop their stories and rewritten their work.. Sometimes thishasimproveit.
My question is why!
I don't knowifyourhAvving a lot inputs;but the first four chapters are great! I'm ready chapter 5!
Usually I only look for complete stories.
I don't like writers that are looking for input, as I'm afraid that readers may change the story line.
Many writers have stop their stories and rewritten their work.. Sometimes thishasimproveit.
My question is why!
I don't knowifyourhAvving a lot inputs;but the first four chapters are great! I'm ready chapter 5!
8/24/2018 c4 12moomoogoat
First and foremost you've got something pretty solid here.
I'm going to nitpit a few things.
I like the premise, and I like some of what you've done but this story gets bogged down by filler. We don't care about his seats or lordships or estates. Don't spend 5k words talking about it. We don't care about that.
The whole Draco thing just shouldn't exist. Book Draco is no friend of Harry. Draco is not going to be one of Harry's first choices for help. Draco is not Tom Felton, he is not misunderstood.
So far you haven't bashed Ginny much. Good. Don't do that, bashing is the easiest way to make your story terrible.
All in all an enjoyable read. Too much exposition about things is the biggest issue, but I dropped a follow and am interested to see how the relationship between Harry/Daph progresses. Daphne has yet to really have a character voice, so I'd love to see that develop.
12moomoogoatFirst and foremost you've got something pretty solid here.
I'm going to nitpit a few things.
I like the premise, and I like some of what you've done but this story gets bogged down by filler. We don't care about his seats or lordships or estates. Don't spend 5k words talking about it. We don't care about that.
The whole Draco thing just shouldn't exist. Book Draco is no friend of Harry. Draco is not going to be one of Harry's first choices for help. Draco is not Tom Felton, he is not misunderstood.
So far you haven't bashed Ginny much. Good. Don't do that, bashing is the easiest way to make your story terrible.
All in all an enjoyable read. Too much exposition about things is the biggest issue, but I dropped a follow and am interested to see how the relationship between Harry/Daph progresses. Daphne has yet to really have a character voice, so I'd love to see that develop.
8/23/2018 c4 Guest
Excellent chapter
Excellent chapter
8/23/2018 c4 Crypt
I like this chapter.
I like this chapter.
8/23/2018 c4 Guest
Looking forward to more
Looking forward to more