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9/18 c3 1AnimeGodess1235
please update
9/9 c3 A1B
please update
7/13 c3 Duchess Mbambo
Continue writing Woman NOW
11/10/2019 c3 1yuutojaden
please continue
7/16/2019 c3 rfgf
cute
5/2/2019 c1 Naruto Lover
I love when I clicked on this to read this again and saw it updated I was dancing around my room. I was just that happy.
4/15/2019 c1 3Lawrence HBain
I'm just going to point out the problems I noticed...
1...We saw no prompt for Naruto's line of thought... all we got was "I wish I knew Boruto future..." and BAM! Yeah no come on that can't even be thought of as halfassed...

2... Naruto is like 35 years old... while his personality is largely the same he is a lot more calm, controlled, and mature... he did not regress to his 12 year old state...

3... this chapter is filled with over reactions... meaning their reactions are blown out of proportions...

There are a few other problems but I'm not going to bother...

If I may make a suggestion... rewrite this when your writing storytelling skills have gotten better... no offense but I can tell just from this first chapter alone that this whole story won't be any good... which is disappointing as I had found myself rather excited...
4/15/2019 c1 1ZadArchie
This is what is considered MSTing, or writing rifts on behalf of you or the characters to comment on another work, in this case, a movie from the anime itself. MST's are not permitted on this site per the Rules & Guidelines we all agreed to when we're signed up for accounts. Also, you are technically copying work that is not your own word for word. This could be considered plagiarism, which is not permitted on any site. To avoid both these issues, simply reference or mention briefly from the work and then provide your characters actions and thoughts, thereby actually creating a story and drawing focus to your skills as a writer, not someone else's. Take all these things into consideration so that you may avoid issues with the admins in the future. Please understand, I say what I say in the spirit of what this site is about: making good stories great, if not brilliant.

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Zad
Critics United
4/10/2019 c3 ki9787
cute
4/3/2019 c3 ericsofly2
Nice g
4/3/2019 c3 RaiUchiha2332
Nice
4/3/2019 c3 5NaruHinaF
Wow the bet was predictable!
4/1/2019 c3 5Dom2040
Great chapter!
4/1/2019 c3 Shiranai Atsune
Yey! A new update!
4/1/2019 c3 8Faeyre
Awww poor Naruto
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