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10/10/2018 c2 Creation Teller
Hi some new ideas for the story. I got two new people in mind to join with the Straw Hats. First the orange afro guy who fought Chad, he seemed cool and he tried to warn and help Chad before Nnoitra attacked them both. He would had some more unique skill set to the group and be one of the few Arrancar not to end up dead or desterted after the Aizen betrayal. The second is Charlotte from Baraggan's Fraccion. I think he would fit well enough with the Straw Hats because he does believe a person's beauty comes from the heart and personality of a person and he does show some respect to his opponents, qualities Luffy might like, also he could become this world proverbial Bon Clay. Both of these fighters could join the crew and work well in it. The afro guy could just get along with Luffy and the rest by sparring with them and maybe being sort of free themselves as I don't think the afro guy is part of a fraccion, but I could be wrong. (an entire plan) Charlotte would want to join as I think he would grow closer to the crew as he hanged out with them, they accept anyone who they see as O.K. He would feel more accepted among them and he could be saved by one of them before he dies in the cannon universe. He would still lose, so Barragan would want him destroyed, but Luffy could remember Bon Clay and how he save him in Impel Down and save Charlotte. After the confrontation and some words from outside people to calm Luffy and Baraggan down, Baraggan would reject Charlotte from his Fraccion and leave Charlotte with the Straw Hats. As Charlotte starts to get ahold of himself he asks Luffy "why did you save me?", and Luffy would respond with "Your my friend, thats all the reason I need to help you." Charlotte would then start to breakdown into tears and then he would bow on all fours and swear he loyalty to Luffy. You can change these how ever you want, but I think these are some solid ideas for two more Arrancar joining the crew. Interested to see who else joins after Aizen revealing he was using them. Another note just to add more content to the story, a plan for a make your own arc. After Aizen is defeated, several rouge Arrancar escaped to soul society and are running amok. The soul society still weak from the war makes a major decision, get Luffy and his Arrancar allies to help them out. This would allow the crew to see soul society, have on in-depth conversations with the soul reapers and maybe make some friends out of some of them. (They would also do all the stuff described in my other review if they went to soul society). They would agree to help Soul Society as they would not attack Luffy and his crew for long period of time and they would give them plenty of soul energy to survive on. The arc would have lots of OC arrancar's, some bad that are killed, and some good that could join the crew. On a final note I looked at the picture and Jinbe's tattoo is on his right eye not his left eye. Bye
10/7/2018 c2 K
I know that the arrancar are generally given Spanish names with all of there movesets being named in Spanish. It is primarily because they are made to mirror the shinigami, but it would be confusing with aizen going on and on about bridging the gap between hollow and shinigami if they both shared the same naming conventions.
10/6/2018 c2 6Crossovernaru
Congrats on another amazing chapter. I was not expecting Luffy to meet so many familiar characters so soon. Firstly, I rather enjoyed how ell you depicted Luffy’s character during his initial interaction with Stark and Lillynette.

Secondly, the manner in which you had Harribel interact with Luffy was really interesting. However one of the highlights was Chopper developing an attraction for Apacci. If I am being honest, I was actually expecting him to fall for Nel. Still though, I think this may actually be better. Their interactions so far have been very cute and I am eager to see more. Also curious to see what other parings you have in mind. If you are still taking suggestions, I can see sung-sun being paired with Brook, Mila Rose with Franky, and Zoro with Harribel.

I am also interested regarding the special abilities that the Straw Hats will possess. Considering that Luffy is immunity to fire, I can tell he will be quite the threat to Yamamoto. However, I am curious regarding the abilities of Pesquisa and Hierro. Theoretically, if Luffy were to focus hard enough, could he use his Pesquisa to read into the future the same way he did with Haki? Also if he were to concentrate hard enough by focusing his spiritual energy into his Hierro could he replicate the effects of armament Haki?

I did have a couple of questions regarding Luffy and Choppers resurreccion. Will Luffy develop the ability to use Segunda Etapa, like Ulquiorra? Also regarding Choppers form, which I am guessing will have some kind of Wendigo themed appearance, will he undergo a growth spurt like Nel when she regains her powers?

Finally, considering that Stark and Harribel won’t be joining Aizen, have you thought of replacements for them? Because I can see them being replaced by hardcore villains that would be ideal generals in Aizen’s Army of bloodthirsty arrancar. In that scenario, I can see characters like Doflamingo, Enel, or even Shiki joining up with him.

All in all great job and looking forward to reading more.
10/5/2018 c2 Guest
Now you got me fcking hooked to this story like damn the way you write, and tge fect everyone is somewhat into character i'll say you did a pretty good hella job with this hope you continue this book and update it
10/1/2018 c2 Guest
this is pretty cool, must be difficult writing so many characters though... still it is fun seeing luffy and the new Mugiwaras like this :·)
10/3/2018 c2 sharingankakashi007
Wahahaha
Yeah that haki conversion makes sense
6 now 7 Vasto Lord's
Aizen's gonna be surprised
Am guessing it's either close to the time Ichigo sees Ulquiorra at the park or maybe before aizen betrays soul society
Anyway
I like lots of stuff
But i do wonder about Sanji and girls
Maybe he'll be willing to fight a girl to defend his crew
I hope
Probably not

All the hollows there are gonna be in for a surprise
Though i wonder
Will Luffy allow Aizen to power them up even further?
Usually i'd say no
But in this case they all already lost their life bcos they weren't strong enough
So they might chose that
Interested to see how this goes
10/3/2018 c1 sharingankakashi007
Sanji never change
Always can couny on his perversion
And his cunning
Though i hope he got over that pesky no hitting women problems
Bcos he's a hollow now
And more Zoro plz
Luffy as always putting nakama before everything
Would love to read more
Wonder if they still have an equavalent of haki?
10/2/2018 c1 10OnihumoExplosionsInc
I now want to see all of their resureccion's(?). And know the names and abilities they might be granted.
10/1/2018 c2 36Kiri Kaitou Clover
Oh dear the Straw Hats in Hueco Mundo? Aizen’s in trouble~ *sing songs* also why do i get the feeling Ichigo’s gonna get dragged in somehow?
(Question is this pre-Orihime Rescue or during it since Nel is already chibified?)
9/29/2018 c2 3OnePieceChaldea
After taking some time to go over this chapter several times to make sure I didn't miss a single detail or some important information, I have to say this chapter was everything that I was hoping for when I left my last review and yet it still gives me things that I never knew that I wanted in the first place.
This will probably be divided into parts so that I can properly get my words in order and properly explain my thoughts on why I feel this is an incredible follow up to the first chapter.

I loved how Starrk and Lilynette's first meeting with Luffy went with Starrk not even hesitating to beg Luffy for his help in learning to restrain his power so that he and Lilynette could finally have friends. Their dreams to find genuine friends and protect them after a lifetime of loneliness would definitely win Luffy over in allowing them to join his crew. I loved how you had Luffy admonish Starrk (and later Halibel but I'll discuss that when I get to her part) for his complacency with his power. I mean having that kind of pure, raw talent is absolutely incredible but when faced with tricky opponents that are on a level similar to his with abilities that are less than straightforward, there's an incredibly high chance he'll be taken by surprise and killed by his opponent similar to his canon fate in his fight with Kyoraku.

I also genuinely love how you can tell that Luffy is talking from genuine experience here as there's no doubt in my mind that despite the loss of most of his memories from his lifetime, his past respective fights with Crocodile, Enel, Aokiji, Lucci, Moria, Kuma, Magellan, Kizaru and his entire participation in the War of The Best in Marineford. Like the moment he touched his scar, I knew that all of the fights I mentioned up above and the terrible losses he's endured against most of his Major opponents Pre-Timeskip still deeply affect him to his core whether its physically, emotionally, or even mentally and forced him to realize that pure, raw talent cannot always compete with experience and skills his older foes have against him. It feels genuine how much he wants to prevent Starrk from suffering the same kind of emotionally devastating losses he's suffered in his life by keeping him from being complacent.

I do genuinely love how the rest of the Straw Hats introduce themselves to the Starrk and Lilynette and after a moment of just watching the crew was enough for the duo to decide the Crew was perfect for them.

The next scene with Halibel and her daughter's ambush of the crew shows how nicely Starrk's integrating himself into the crew even though he still does get momentarily surprised with Luffy's chaotic actions such as his mercy towards their attackers.

I enjoyed the next scene from Halibel and her followers/daughters/Fraccions' point of view and I enjoyed how they're sudden realization that the crew had not only one but TWO Vasto Lordes among their ranks were enough to spook Apacci, Mila Rose, and Sun-Sung enough that none of them were willing to get into their normal arguments.

Halibel's introspection on how the Straw Hats organized themselves to properly protect the weaker members of the crew during their attack gives some nice introspection into Hollow society or lack thereof functions in Hueco Mundo and why a pseudo stable army like Aizen's is such an unprecedented thing for Hollows that live there.

I enjoyed how Halibel was just so unsure of Luffy and his crew's intentions that she just kept jumping to incorrect conclusions about his decision to journey to Las Noches. It just made her decision to join after hearing Luffy's reasoning for finding a better life for his crew feel more believable despite Halibel and her daughters' suspicions about the Crew's morality.
Chopper's crush on Apacci before her transformation into an Arrancar was an unexpected but hilarious twist on how the group dynamics might change with Halibel and her daughter's inclusion into the crew. I never thought about it but I guess I should've expected that the only females Chopper would ever show interest towards would have to be Cervidae inspired humanoid. (Cervidae being the animal family that normal Deers and Reindeer would be classified under but that's just me being extra since I love animals.) I can never really imagine Chopper looking anything but his cute furry form but MasterQwertsers drawings of the Straw Hats as Arrancar helped me picture him better now. Besides Apacci's embarrassed blushing at Chopper's cuteness made me grin so kudos for that.

Now the discussion about an Arrancar's powerset may be one of my favorite moments in this entire story due to the importance you've placed on honing skills over pure raw power. It just reminds me of some of my favorite moments across both manga and anime where you see this basically weaker character defeat their much more powerful opponent whether its in terms of evolutionary stage or just raw power, not through raw power alone but through skill and techniques honed from experiences in battle or just plain wit like Usopp vs Kuroobi or Usopp and Chopper vs the Mr. 4 team.
Their discussion also addressed what I feel like was a massive weakness of Aizen's Army and more importantly the Espada in the Canon Bleach. Despite Aizen uniting them all to fight Soul Society and transforming them all into Arrancar to make them stronger, the Arrancar and the Espada were never truly united or were made stronger under his "superb" leadership. He just lied to them about their usefulness to him and sent them off to get killed in the fake Karakura Town or let them die to the invading Ichigo and captains during the Hueco Mundo Invasion. Granted that was probably the whole point since Aizen's a megalomaniacal sociopath that needed an army of fodder to weed down any remaining opposition that could kill him before his spirit marble fused with him completely.
Just thinking about that Butterfly bastard makes me glad Halibel has accepted Luffy as her leader now. He'll at least care about her well being and the safety of her daughters.

Also I loved Nami's little talk with Halibel in the chapter about having another lady to talk to. Does that mean she sees Apacci, Mila Rose, and Sun-Sung as children like Lilynette? I mean they argue over every little thing so I can understand why she would view Halibel as the only other 'lady' in the group besides Robin. Loved that brief argument between her and Lilynette about Lily's apparent status as the child of the group since she's probably the youngest after Chopper.

Glad to see Nel and her 'brothers' show up. I'm honestly surprised Dondo lasted as long as he did but he and Pesche together did better than Uryuu and Renji against Szayzel and his minions. Makes me can't wait for the reveal of Nel's true form and her 'condition'. Nnoitra and Szayzel won't know what'll hit them... Or cut them into bits Revengeance-style...

Overall this was an incredible chapter and if I could make a suggestion for the Soul King joke? Have Brook meet Rose of the Vizards and have them play music together or have a Musical Duel. If playing music doesn't cause Brook to remember his past title of Soul King then I don't know what will.

Cannot wait for the next chapter because I bet Barragan is going to show up and mock Halibel for following Luffy only for Luffy to completely brush him aside once he spots something cooler. That'll be a good blow to the former God-King's pride. I'd say more but I've been sitting at my laptop typing this review for over an hour now but you know what? This chapter was completely worth it and I cannot wait to see what will happen next since you never cease to surprise me at this point.

Keep up the awesome work!
See Ya~ :D
9/29/2018 c2 1Pandaman300
Hombre, me encanto, no, me enamore tu historia de "Justice" y saber que haras mas capitulos me hizo bastante feliz y cuando vi esta con Bleach, sabia que no decepcionaria.
Eres un de los pocos que realmente combina de una manera tan natural dos series que son tan diferentes entre el uno con el otro pero encajan de una manera tan natural y tan convincente.
Sigue haciendo que estas buenas historas. :)

Saludos desde Tijuana, México.

PD: Can I translate your stories "Justice" and "Sea of Souls" in Spanish?, It will be on Wattpad
9/29/2018 c2 1YeTianshi
This is actually REALLY good, I loved it. It's great seeing Luffy's crew grow even now, the dynamic is certainly enjoyable to watch and seeing the crew's strength every once in a while is pretty epic as well :D
9/29/2018 c1 YeTianshi
Seems pretty interesting so far :D
9/29/2018 c2 Creation Teller
Hi back again with a few extra ideas. I think if Brook got an instrument the first song he should play for them is Binks Brew (English Dub version). He listened to that song for 50 years alone with just that and the promise to Laboon to keep him sane, I doubt he would forget something that important. Second I think you should do at least one of the anime only arcs or make one of your own, just so the Straw Hats can go to the Soul Society without getting attack constantly when they arrive, they could help the reapers in an alliance, this would give great oppertunities for the Hollows (Straw Hats included) and the Reapers (and Ichigo's friends like Chad and the others with powers) to interact with one another. I also would like a scene where the Straw Hats help the bird kid Chad helped find his mother, I always didn't like that never got resolved. It would also give the Straw Hats an opportunity to remember somethings and point out several of the Soul Societies flaws (with a more powerful impact). The being unable to find family and loved ones, the amount of crime and corruption, the poor living conditions, and the stupidly strict rules of the soul reapers, (seriously the few good soul reapers, like kenji, Isane, and squad 13, didn't try to stop Rukia's funeral till the last minute, and even then most of the good ones still went along with the leaders lies and the injustice of the whole situation!) sorry for the rant, not my favorite arc. Anyway, I would also like to change a comment on my last review, I think Mila Rose and Franky would make an O.K pairing, as it says he is an Alpha male who is very manly and tough, Mila Rose is also tough and manly(kinda). Also she's a lion and Franky built the Sunny "a lion" kinda goes with out saying. Also final bit if you could have Luffy or most likely Chopper give that creepy scientist a massive beat down that would be most appreciated, the guy's the worst parts of Frieza and Caesar Clown put together. Well thanks for listening to my rants looking forward to the story and the ships and the fights, see ya soon! :)
9/28/2018 c2 shaggyzoinks
love this so much
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