for No More Mr Nice Guy9/21/2018 c1 dreamerkins
yeah, she may not have caught that, but I certainly noticed quick! hmm.. maybe get can make toast... that isn't too burnt... maybe...lol. great beginning! I'm really looking forward to reading more!
yeah, she may not have caught that, but I certainly noticed quick! hmm.. maybe get can make toast... that isn't too burnt... maybe...lol. great beginning! I'm really looking forward to reading more!
9/20/2018 c1 
8Dreamarcher1
I love the title! I waiting for that to happen in the manga! A quick gentle tip - try to keep 1st person and third person out of the same paragraph, it’s a little confusing. I’m still making lots of errors! First person is not my favorite to read (I like to be an observer not the character) but the story you are writing seems interesting and I’ll follow. Pretty good for first publish! Gambatte!
Owlmoose
8Dreamarcher1I love the title! I waiting for that to happen in the manga! A quick gentle tip - try to keep 1st person and third person out of the same paragraph, it’s a little confusing. I’m still making lots of errors! First person is not my favorite to read (I like to be an observer not the character) but the story you are writing seems interesting and I’ll follow. Pretty good for first publish! Gambatte!
Owlmoose