for The Lark and the Linnet Bird11/28/2024 c5 Evelinhaimo1
This is excellent storytelling. Enjoyable story with interesting characters, You have a talent and you're using it right. I liked the character of Jean As an artist, I can create the character art of Jean in good price. If you're interested feel free to reach me on my social accounts which is in my bio
This is excellent storytelling. Enjoyable story with interesting characters, You have a talent and you're using it right. I liked the character of Jean As an artist, I can create the character art of Jean in good price. If you're interested feel free to reach me on my social accounts which is in my bio
5/1/2022 c5 
149rebecca-in-blue
Nice to see an update on this. I like the way you write Valjean slipping back into his old prisoner lifestyle and how dehumanizing it is for him. I love that he immediately tries to ally with Benjamin/Sweeney, who must be as desperate to get back to Lucy and Johanna as Valjean is to get to Cosette and who apparently knows some French here. Since they've actually landed in Australia, I'm curious to see what their plan will be to make it all the way back to London.
149rebecca-in-blueNice to see an update on this. I like the way you write Valjean slipping back into his old prisoner lifestyle and how dehumanizing it is for him. I love that he immediately tries to ally with Benjamin/Sweeney, who must be as desperate to get back to Lucy and Johanna as Valjean is to get to Cosette and who apparently knows some French here. Since they've actually landed in Australia, I'm curious to see what their plan will be to make it all the way back to London.
4/25/2021 c4 17Vintage Victorian Rose
This is such a brilliant idea! I love the attention to detail and the research that you’ve done. I think I know where this is going and I love it. I can’t wait to see Johanna and Cosette interact because there’s so many similarities between them. Also can’t wait to see Sweeney and Valjean meet, because they’re so different. This is such a cool idea and I love the way that it’s playing out!
17Vintage Victorian RoseThis is such a brilliant idea! I love the attention to detail and the research that you’ve done. I think I know where this is going and I love it. I can’t wait to see Johanna and Cosette interact because there’s so many similarities between them. Also can’t wait to see Sweeney and Valjean meet, because they’re so different. This is such a cool idea and I love the way that it’s playing out!
3/1/2019 c4 149rebecca-in-blue
I think your research really shows in the first part of this chapter, with Valjean in prison. There's an impressive amount of detail in that scene (and in this entire story), and I like how rather than just cut ahead to Valjean brooding in a prison cell (where I assume he's going to meet Sweeney), you show each step of him being processed and cataloged into the Old Baily, the conditions there, and even what specific area of Australia they're planning to ship him to. As the scene went on, though, it got pretty hard to read; you really feel, maybe a little too much, each of the twenty lashings and Valjean getting lost in his pain and delirium.
I also really love the scene-setting of Johanna in her room. I know I've complimented you on your atmosphere before, but it's so well-done how even as she's just sitting by the window and brushing her hair, she still feels so trapped and repressed. The bit where she puts her arm on the glass and wonders what the air outside smells like really shows how she is just as caged as her birds. I also liked the mention of the "brick of a book" she's reading - haha, I wonder if it's "The Brick"?
Like Cosette, Johanna seems pretty good at thinking on her feet, and this ending leaves me so curious about what's going to happen next. I can see Judge Turpin luring Cosette into his nasty web and Valjean and Sweeney teaming up to save both of them.
149rebecca-in-blueI think your research really shows in the first part of this chapter, with Valjean in prison. There's an impressive amount of detail in that scene (and in this entire story), and I like how rather than just cut ahead to Valjean brooding in a prison cell (where I assume he's going to meet Sweeney), you show each step of him being processed and cataloged into the Old Baily, the conditions there, and even what specific area of Australia they're planning to ship him to. As the scene went on, though, it got pretty hard to read; you really feel, maybe a little too much, each of the twenty lashings and Valjean getting lost in his pain and delirium.
I also really love the scene-setting of Johanna in her room. I know I've complimented you on your atmosphere before, but it's so well-done how even as she's just sitting by the window and brushing her hair, she still feels so trapped and repressed. The bit where she puts her arm on the glass and wonders what the air outside smells like really shows how she is just as caged as her birds. I also liked the mention of the "brick of a book" she's reading - haha, I wonder if it's "The Brick"?
Like Cosette, Johanna seems pretty good at thinking on her feet, and this ending leaves me so curious about what's going to happen next. I can see Judge Turpin luring Cosette into his nasty web and Valjean and Sweeney teaming up to save both of them.
1/12/2019 c3 rebecca-in-blue
Geez, poor Cosette really can't catch a break in this chapter. You do a great job at depicting the cacophony of noise and grime of the London slums and how very lost Cosette feels amongst it all. Valjean has always done everything for her, so she doesn't have a lot of options without him. But I think, gradually, she's finding her way here; deciding to go to the workhouse rather than prison or selling her body is a good start, and I can see her getting smarter and tougher as she spends more time in these circumstances. Looking forward to more of this!
Geez, poor Cosette really can't catch a break in this chapter. You do a great job at depicting the cacophony of noise and grime of the London slums and how very lost Cosette feels amongst it all. Valjean has always done everything for her, so she doesn't have a lot of options without him. But I think, gradually, she's finding her way here; deciding to go to the workhouse rather than prison or selling her body is a good start, and I can see her getting smarter and tougher as she spends more time in these circumstances. Looking forward to more of this!
12/16/2018 c2 rebecca-in-blue
Oh, poor Valjean. I really felt for him here, hoping for mercy out of Judge Turpin of all people, and worrying over Cosette. He's always been so protective of her that he's probably going out of his mind now. I also really like the "Somewhere inside her lay the child in the woods" lines; Cosette is usually depicted as so helpless and sheltered, so that was a nice reminder that she might have a little tough edge, too. I'm left so curious to see what happens next - whether Valjean will be in prison for the rest of the story (as it seems here), whether Javert will continue to be in it, and what's going to happen to Cosette.
Oh, poor Valjean. I really felt for him here, hoping for mercy out of Judge Turpin of all people, and worrying over Cosette. He's always been so protective of her that he's probably going out of his mind now. I also really like the "Somewhere inside her lay the child in the woods" lines; Cosette is usually depicted as so helpless and sheltered, so that was a nice reminder that she might have a little tough edge, too. I'm left so curious to see what happens next - whether Valjean will be in prison for the rest of the story (as it seems here), whether Javert will continue to be in it, and what's going to happen to Cosette.
11/23/2018 c1 rebecca-in-blue
Man, what an intense first chapter. This story is so dark and so good. I especially love the atmosphere in the beginning, with Valjean and Cosette arriving in the grimy crowd of London. You have a good eye for details that highlight their miserable moods, like the flies, the stench, the Cockney slang that Valjean can't understand. It's also very effective how you end Cosette and Johanna's sections with each of them in such desperately sad situations. Johanna always did seem like a Gothic version of Cosette to me. I can't think of one critical thing to say, and I hope there will be more to this!
Man, what an intense first chapter. This story is so dark and so good. I especially love the atmosphere in the beginning, with Valjean and Cosette arriving in the grimy crowd of London. You have a good eye for details that highlight their miserable moods, like the flies, the stench, the Cockney slang that Valjean can't understand. It's also very effective how you end Cosette and Johanna's sections with each of them in such desperately sad situations. Johanna always did seem like a Gothic version of Cosette to me. I can't think of one critical thing to say, and I hope there will be more to this!