for Feel11/1/2018 c1 Otaku4Life3
Oooo very nice start!
I loved how you didn't directly say he had a disability and gave simple hints!
Hope we get to find out what happens next!
Oooo very nice start!
I loved how you didn't directly say he had a disability and gave simple hints!
Hope we get to find out what happens next!
10/31/2018 c1 
8Booktoon4
Hi there! Woah this is so amazing!
I think it is so neat how you give us just enough to experience Kinjou's disability, and then go right into how he can swim just fine and that it does not hinder him at all! Also I like the hand movements and other tactile things you put in the piece, too.
Plus, I like how you mainly wrote the coach's perspective, and not just Kinjou's for the whole time. It's kind of refreshing!
I really like this idea! This was a great chapter!
8Booktoon4Hi there! Woah this is so amazing!
I think it is so neat how you give us just enough to experience Kinjou's disability, and then go right into how he can swim just fine and that it does not hinder him at all! Also I like the hand movements and other tactile things you put in the piece, too.
Plus, I like how you mainly wrote the coach's perspective, and not just Kinjou's for the whole time. It's kind of refreshing!
I really like this idea! This was a great chapter!