for The Fire Dragon and his Scarlet Knight10/25/2021 c4 Lol
Ok
Ok
10/25/2021 c1 Lol
NICE
NICE
3/31/2021 c4 Guest
Please update soon it's awesome
Please update soon it's awesome
8/3/2019 c3 alex
well than when are you writing again?
well than when are you writing again?
110/26/2018 c1 NatsuChad
First off don‘t take this as a insult, I am trying to help and for that I have to be the asshole.
So while you have a lot of amazing ideas you rushed it way too much. Your first chapter has content for five to ten chapters in it. Just give yourself like a week of writing time and set yourself checkpoints for what to do per chapter, that should fix the rushed part.
More passion. A lot of the parts that should have a lot of emotions in it sound more like a statement. Try describing the characters emotions and a character is never perfect, so let them struggle (especially with a new magic) and give them time to realize how they feel.
So in general you have good intentions and great ideas and should definitely continue writing, but next time when you have that goal in mind don‘t forget about the way to that goal. That is what a story is all about, write more about how they got to becoming a couple, more with how they struggled training. So my tip is: Don‘t make it easy for yourself and really think about your characters and give them goals, passions, character development, let them struggle and don‘t make them perfect.
But please, if you don‘t agree with me that is okay. You don‘t have to listen to me, I am just a random guy how wrote a comment. You can hate me and all, but the main thing is you continue writing. I‘d love to see more from you!
First off don‘t take this as a insult, I am trying to help and for that I have to be the asshole.
So while you have a lot of amazing ideas you rushed it way too much. Your first chapter has content for five to ten chapters in it. Just give yourself like a week of writing time and set yourself checkpoints for what to do per chapter, that should fix the rushed part.
More passion. A lot of the parts that should have a lot of emotions in it sound more like a statement. Try describing the characters emotions and a character is never perfect, so let them struggle (especially with a new magic) and give them time to realize how they feel.
So in general you have good intentions and great ideas and should definitely continue writing, but next time when you have that goal in mind don‘t forget about the way to that goal. That is what a story is all about, write more about how they got to becoming a couple, more with how they struggled training. So my tip is: Don‘t make it easy for yourself and really think about your characters and give them goals, passions, character development, let them struggle and don‘t make them perfect.
But please, if you don‘t agree with me that is okay. You don‘t have to listen to me, I am just a random guy how wrote a comment. You can hate me and all, but the main thing is you continue writing. I‘d love to see more from you!