for Jasper's Love11/4/2018 c3 Green Eyed Lana Lee
It's a lovely chapter full of warmth and acceptance!
I'm so happy everyone of the Cullen's were kind and accepting of Bella!
Loved it!
Happy Writing!
It's a lovely chapter full of warmth and acceptance!
I'm so happy everyone of the Cullen's were kind and accepting of Bella!
Loved it!
Happy Writing!
11/4/2018 c2 Green Eyed Lana Lee
I really enjoyed how warm and accepting Jasper's reactions to Bella were! Emmett may be a goofy prankster but he was receptive to her as a person!
I really was a sweet chapter and I think Bella already has a crush on Jazz!
Happy Writing!
I really enjoyed how warm and accepting Jasper's reactions to Bella were! Emmett may be a goofy prankster but he was receptive to her as a person!
I really was a sweet chapter and I think Bella already has a crush on Jazz!
Happy Writing!
11/4/2018 c5 traceybuie
I'm pleased that the 2 of them felt comfortable with each other enough to have a first kiss. Really sweet chapter.
I'm pleased that the 2 of them felt comfortable with each other enough to have a first kiss. Really sweet chapter.
11/4/2018 c4 traceybuie
I'm happy Jasper doesn't sneak into Bella's room while she is sleeping. That was creepy for S.M. to have Edward do.
I'm happy Jasper doesn't sneak into Bella's room while she is sleeping. That was creepy for S.M. to have Edward do.
11/4/2018 c3 traceybuie
So Edward is still going to be Bella's singer? I;m happy he is aware of it and going to take precautions. Rose being pleasant to Bella is a wonderful change, I always wonder why everyone HAS to make Rose a bitch. ?who knows? Bella putting Lauren and Jessica in their place instead of being a doormat is great.
So Edward is still going to be Bella's singer? I;m happy he is aware of it and going to take precautions. Rose being pleasant to Bella is a wonderful change, I always wonder why everyone HAS to make Rose a bitch. ?who knows? Bella putting Lauren and Jessica in their place instead of being a doormat is great.
11/4/2018 c2 traceybuie
I'm glad she is getting along with both Jasper and Emmett so far. I hope one of them brings up the tingly/shocking feelings when Bella and Jasper touch.
I'm glad she is getting along with both Jasper and Emmett so far. I hope one of them brings up the tingly/shocking feelings when Bella and Jasper touch.
11/1/2018 c1 
4Kayozm
Hey, I think it's a nice start to a story. Read over it again though. maybe print it out and read it on paper, or read out loud. There are a lot of typos and missing words, as well as a few grammar errors. Reading out loud often makes it easier to pick up on typos that our eyes skip over when we read normally.
4KayozmHey, I think it's a nice start to a story. Read over it again though. maybe print it out and read it on paper, or read out loud. There are a lot of typos and missing words, as well as a few grammar errors. Reading out loud often makes it easier to pick up on typos that our eyes skip over when we read normally.
11/1/2018 c1 asia.joanna.7334
I loved this. It's an amazing start and I'm extremely curious as to how this story is going to progress. I'm a fan. I'll be looking forward to the next chapter.
I loved this. It's an amazing start and I'm extremely curious as to how this story is going to progress. I'm a fan. I'll be looking forward to the next chapter.
11/1/2018 c1 Green Eyed Lana Lee
I think this chapter done in Jasper's POV was interesting, sweet nd Jasper's reaction to Bella was perfect! As described by Carlisle, it appears he's found his mate seems very happy an excited to meet he and talk to her!
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It's a well cone chapter and I love the story's premise as well as Jasper's long hair!
I also liked how you dressed Bella. It sees to fit her better than jeans and tee-shirts forever!
Happy Writing and have fun with it!
I think this chapter done in Jasper's POV was interesting, sweet nd Jasper's reaction to Bella was perfect! As described by Carlisle, it appears he's found his mate seems very happy an excited to meet he and talk to her!
Question: Are you receptive to constructive criticism via Private Message (PM)? If you are, there are some grammatical points I wish to share with you and I'd appreciate if you'd PM e with your response.
It's a well cone chapter and I love the story's premise as well as Jasper's long hair!
I also liked how you dressed Bella. It sees to fit her better than jeans and tee-shirts forever!
Happy Writing and have fun with it!