for The Truth About Yuri1/29/2022 c1 
5AutumnKL
Very nice story you have here. I will even argue this is one of your strongest piece to date.
To start things off, this story is structured very nicely and you kept the big mystery a secret until the very end, with our only clue being the title and later on Sharpener breaking up with Erasa. I began wondering if Videl hooked up with Erasa when you mentioned Sharpener's relationship but wasn't quite sure cause you kept any talk of Erasa to a minimum. Sharpener also never mentioned Erasa's new date being a femdle, which made me doubt my theory.
Having Gohan confess everything to Piccolo at the end is well done too. The story Piccolo told Gohan was very interesting and solves Gohan's dilemma surprisingly in well. I have to agree that people don't always know their sexual orientation at the beginning, so seeing Piccolo finding out his preference as well as Videl and Erasa finding each other despite having heterosexual relations at first (due to societal norms) is very accurate depiction.
You slso managed to squeeze in some great son family moments and those are always good to see.
Overall this story felt very natural and not forced at all. It flows pretty well and while sometimes you repeated Gohan's mental dialogue a bit, it's very minor. Good stuff. Very insightful snd accurate depiction of people discovering their preference as well as how breakups can make one guess one's self worth when there's nothing wrong with them.
5AutumnKLVery nice story you have here. I will even argue this is one of your strongest piece to date.
To start things off, this story is structured very nicely and you kept the big mystery a secret until the very end, with our only clue being the title and later on Sharpener breaking up with Erasa. I began wondering if Videl hooked up with Erasa when you mentioned Sharpener's relationship but wasn't quite sure cause you kept any talk of Erasa to a minimum. Sharpener also never mentioned Erasa's new date being a femdle, which made me doubt my theory.
Having Gohan confess everything to Piccolo at the end is well done too. The story Piccolo told Gohan was very interesting and solves Gohan's dilemma surprisingly in well. I have to agree that people don't always know their sexual orientation at the beginning, so seeing Piccolo finding out his preference as well as Videl and Erasa finding each other despite having heterosexual relations at first (due to societal norms) is very accurate depiction.
You slso managed to squeeze in some great son family moments and those are always good to see.
Overall this story felt very natural and not forced at all. It flows pretty well and while sometimes you repeated Gohan's mental dialogue a bit, it's very minor. Good stuff. Very insightful snd accurate depiction of people discovering their preference as well as how breakups can make one guess one's self worth when there's nothing wrong with them.
6/2/2020 c1 Guest
This is solomivan239 from reddit.
It's well-written and interesting story. Your description of relationship dynamic and its change is very good. I love your unexpected plot twist and your depiction of characters.
This is solomivan239 from reddit.
It's well-written and interesting story. Your description of relationship dynamic and its change is very good. I love your unexpected plot twist and your depiction of characters.
11/6/2018 c1 smithback
nice
nice