for Harry Potter and The Land of Ice and Fire5/12 c7 LorLol01
Really enjoyed the story, and what's here. The normal HP GOT fic is enchanted boats, and it is interesting to see that it did not happen here.
Hope to see you return someday, and to this story, but I can recommend it anyway.
Really enjoyed the story, and what's here. The normal HP GOT fic is enchanted boats, and it is interesting to see that it did not happen here.
Hope to see you return someday, and to this story, but I can recommend it anyway.
3/20 c7 imlovinfanfic
I really am sad that this story has been abandoned. I can see so many different directions the story could still take. I love everything you've written so far. Hopefully, you'll get the inspiration you need to give it another go. Thanks.
I really am sad that this story has been abandoned. I can see so many different directions the story could still take. I love everything you've written so far. Hopefully, you'll get the inspiration you need to give it another go. Thanks.
2/28 c7 Guest
Is this story abandoned?
Is this story abandoned?
1/29 c7 Guest
Hey I love this story it’s amazing I’ve been looking for one like this for awhile I hope you update soon
Hey I love this story it’s amazing I’ve been looking for one like this for awhile I hope you update soon
1/22 c7 Djayden
awesome story! i hope when you can and are taking a break from your main story you will update this story!
awesome story! i hope when you can and are taking a break from your main story you will update this story!
12/26/2024 c7 bdydvl
Can mc charm the ravens so they can always find their targets like the owls of HP?
Btw what happened to the 6 natives?
I'm surprised mc didn't make some compass for his own ships captain, also send 1/2 elves with each of his company's ship so they can start to cartography each sea route and find faster, better one thanks to his knowledge/library on navigation
Btw mc should make himself and Sirius a personal ship enchanted to hell
Can mc charm the ravens so they can always find their targets like the owls of HP?
Btw what happened to the 6 natives?
I'm surprised mc didn't make some compass for his own ships captain, also send 1/2 elves with each of his company's ship so they can start to cartography each sea route and find faster, better one thanks to his knowledge/library on navigation
Btw mc should make himself and Sirius a personal ship enchanted to hell
12/26/2024 c6 bdydvl
I'm surprised mc didn't make a shipbuilding area near the docks, does he plan to keep relying on others for his boats? And not upgrade his future fleet?
Since mc is probably the first to use glass as a disposable when making bottles, he should either put a recycling bin in every city he operates in, or pay something like 10 cents in their denomination for every bottle they send him back, so he doesn't contribute to pollution on the mainland where they don't have his waste management
Did this chapter lack a beta? It didn't seems to flow as well as previous one
I'm surprised mc didn't make a shipbuilding area near the docks, does he plan to keep relying on others for his boats? And not upgrade his future fleet?
Since mc is probably the first to use glass as a disposable when making bottles, he should either put a recycling bin in every city he operates in, or pay something like 10 cents in their denomination for every bottle they send him back, so he doesn't contribute to pollution on the mainland where they don't have his waste management
Did this chapter lack a beta? It didn't seems to flow as well as previous one
12/26/2024 c4 bdydvl
Why not just give Hedwig some elixir of life? Tho giving her a phoenix ability is some welcome bullshit
Is mc trying to become an animagus behind the scene or not yet? Or he just doesn't wanna ?
Damn author you annihilated a native culture just to make some Space for mc... Good job lmao
Btw do skagosi unicorn(should just look like hairy unicorn, idk if they're magical at all and have the same temperament ) really exist or are they a myth? - wtf you read my mind in the next paragraph lmaooo is this a sign that i should shut the fck up and just read
Mc should make a marauder map of his island with more function like having the name of people with harmful intent towards him and his highlighted red and other things - bahahahh the chapter are so long i need to make notes for the review and i always get a point or two that are resolved/explained in the chapter it crack me up for some reason, anyway mc should add more function to the Map later, to get a status of every person for example name/age/health/every info he has on them/magicals?/ethnicity
He could also make the stone statue of Hogwarts for when he need some people but can't do it himself if it's time consuming
Then he could tinker with the enchantment of the gargoyle guarding the headmasters office of Hogwarts and put them on every door so they only open to those who have access
Shouldn't skagos also countain obsidian/dragon glass?
The cauldron makes selling/using potions so cheap and convenient it's OP
WEEKS ? winterfell-king's landing takes a month even in a slow ass carriage, there's no way Sirius in dog form take more than a week to go from north to south of skagos and that's me being generous, two weeks at most if he's just taking a look everywhere he goes and not focused on his goal
Why minus electricity? He didn't bring a generator for his own Manor? Hell use some solar pannels, he should have Books on how to create them too
Will he really need to go into his Manor trunk to see a movie/listen to music?
Author did you draw the city plan so we could see it? It would take less time than describing every detail, especially when most won't be relevant later
Would the fertility ward on the island's wardstone make the possibility of a child born here being able to use magic(whatever it has access to thanks to their lineage since "wizards" won't exist in this World until mc has kids) more likely ?
Why not make the waste management center underground? Or at least most of it for the elves to work
Mc could use an island belonging to skagos for a magical school, use the fidelius on it so only prospect student can find it and make a better Hogwarts, tho this Idea would take at minimum a century to pan out and barely fill an average class
Why not just give Hedwig some elixir of life? Tho giving her a phoenix ability is some welcome bullshit
Is mc trying to become an animagus behind the scene or not yet? Or he just doesn't wanna ?
Damn author you annihilated a native culture just to make some Space for mc... Good job lmao
Btw do skagosi unicorn(should just look like hairy unicorn, idk if they're magical at all and have the same temperament ) really exist or are they a myth? - wtf you read my mind in the next paragraph lmaooo is this a sign that i should shut the fck up and just read
Mc should make a marauder map of his island with more function like having the name of people with harmful intent towards him and his highlighted red and other things - bahahahh the chapter are so long i need to make notes for the review and i always get a point or two that are resolved/explained in the chapter it crack me up for some reason, anyway mc should add more function to the Map later, to get a status of every person for example name/age/health/every info he has on them/magicals?/ethnicity
He could also make the stone statue of Hogwarts for when he need some people but can't do it himself if it's time consuming
Then he could tinker with the enchantment of the gargoyle guarding the headmasters office of Hogwarts and put them on every door so they only open to those who have access
Shouldn't skagos also countain obsidian/dragon glass?
The cauldron makes selling/using potions so cheap and convenient it's OP
WEEKS ? winterfell-king's landing takes a month even in a slow ass carriage, there's no way Sirius in dog form take more than a week to go from north to south of skagos and that's me being generous, two weeks at most if he's just taking a look everywhere he goes and not focused on his goal
Why minus electricity? He didn't bring a generator for his own Manor? Hell use some solar pannels, he should have Books on how to create them too
Will he really need to go into his Manor trunk to see a movie/listen to music?
Author did you draw the city plan so we could see it? It would take less time than describing every detail, especially when most won't be relevant later
Would the fertility ward on the island's wardstone make the possibility of a child born here being able to use magic(whatever it has access to thanks to their lineage since "wizards" won't exist in this World until mc has kids) more likely ?
Why not make the waste management center underground? Or at least most of it for the elves to work
Mc could use an island belonging to skagos for a magical school, use the fidelius on it so only prospect student can find it and make a better Hogwarts, tho this Idea would take at minimum a century to pan out and barely fill an average class
12/26/2024 c3 bdydvl
Why do all of this (especially the swearing fealty to some "moron", no matter how honest, they could simply befriend him later) when they could simply take over skagos without backlash except maybe a token effort? If they used magic oppenly, It wouldn't even be a bother
Then they could use either the locals or the idiots who will try to come see what they're doing to propagate plombing and other things
Right now it just looks like they're roleplaying middle age merchants which isn't bad but is a slog for what they're capable of
Why do all of this (especially the swearing fealty to some "moron", no matter how honest, they could simply befriend him later) when they could simply take over skagos without backlash except maybe a token effort? If they used magic oppenly, It wouldn't even be a bother
Then they could use either the locals or the idiots who will try to come see what they're doing to propagate plombing and other things
Right now it just looks like they're roleplaying middle age merchants which isn't bad but is a slog for what they're capable of
12/26/2024 c2 bdydvl
magic should not be abundant.. even start dying out since the dragons are dead and they're somehow linked to how magic does tho it may take decades to see it
Voldemort didn't know the windblocking charm? When he made his own flying spell?
Shouldn't mc make Sirius use the ritual that heal someone from abuse and flaws for him to recover from Azkaban at once ? Might heal his sterility
Flush for a while ? Much more than that, a royal family would be well off with 10 million... (Yes the numbers come from my ass and the 6million debt in canon that was the highest number i could find in GOT transaction)
With mc's 150million(galleon so double that)whatever he looted from death eaters whatever Sirius took with him THE STONE THAT CAN MAKE GOLD(why was it never used in the other story btw? I completely forgot about it somehow) , he could found multiple kingdoms easily
Is the inclusion of boosting the mind in the rituals responsible for making the excruciating process of information acquisition by legillimency so easy ? Or did mc just develop the power that way naturally without a relation to the other story?
If the last dragon died recently they should be after 153 AC so who tf is the recent marriage between Targaryen/dorne? The 187 AC one which made dorne join the kingdoms? Is this an AU? Mc didn't have a chance to fck up the timeline yet so i don't see how it already changed to have the engagement almost 2 decades before canon and changing the pair(from a targ princesse to a targ prince and the other one )
Shouldn't the trip to moat callin barely take 4 hours on their 150mph brooms?
Why bother buying and using the warehouse now? It's useless to them when they have their Trunks and can make their own money, they don't need a cashflow or history unless they plan to be merchant?
Alcohol is poison, with mc being immune to anything weaker than basilisk poison, it shouldn't work on him no matter the dose unless it's magical
Mc should come back to question an archmaester and clean them off of every bit of magical knowledge they have, maybe even imperius the whole upper management to make them a better organisation and then replace them
Why waste time learning the Sword from one person? When mc can just take the skill from him and multiples other swordsmen easily, it would just take time so they don't have brain damage since they're not ennemies
Tho having a sparring partner could still be good
magic should not be abundant.. even start dying out since the dragons are dead and they're somehow linked to how magic does tho it may take decades to see it
Voldemort didn't know the windblocking charm? When he made his own flying spell?
Shouldn't mc make Sirius use the ritual that heal someone from abuse and flaws for him to recover from Azkaban at once ? Might heal his sterility
Flush for a while ? Much more than that, a royal family would be well off with 10 million... (Yes the numbers come from my ass and the 6million debt in canon that was the highest number i could find in GOT transaction)
With mc's 150million(galleon so double that)whatever he looted from death eaters whatever Sirius took with him THE STONE THAT CAN MAKE GOLD(why was it never used in the other story btw? I completely forgot about it somehow) , he could found multiple kingdoms easily
Is the inclusion of boosting the mind in the rituals responsible for making the excruciating process of information acquisition by legillimency so easy ? Or did mc just develop the power that way naturally without a relation to the other story?
If the last dragon died recently they should be after 153 AC so who tf is the recent marriage between Targaryen/dorne? The 187 AC one which made dorne join the kingdoms? Is this an AU? Mc didn't have a chance to fck up the timeline yet so i don't see how it already changed to have the engagement almost 2 decades before canon and changing the pair(from a targ princesse to a targ prince and the other one )
Shouldn't the trip to moat callin barely take 4 hours on their 150mph brooms?
Why bother buying and using the warehouse now? It's useless to them when they have their Trunks and can make their own money, they don't need a cashflow or history unless they plan to be merchant?
Alcohol is poison, with mc being immune to anything weaker than basilisk poison, it shouldn't work on him no matter the dose unless it's magical
Mc should come back to question an archmaester and clean them off of every bit of magical knowledge they have, maybe even imperius the whole upper management to make them a better organisation and then replace them
Why waste time learning the Sword from one person? When mc can just take the skill from him and multiples other swordsmen easily, it would just take time so they don't have brain damage since they're not ennemies
Tho having a sparring partner could still be good
12/26/2024 c1 bdydvl
I didn't mention it in the other story because i knew mc would make himself a lightsaber and never use it, but the Sword of gryffindor would be OP in GOT, even too strong since a nick would kill anyone except maybe a dragon needing a little more because of their size - mind read once again :(
Wtf is the advanced summoning spell that teleport the target to the user? Sounds OP
If hermione really comes or send some things through, it would be fun to have a flashback of the consequence of mc's action before he left earth
You forgot mc taking the Sword and looting the ministry(included in the more preparation bit i think), then having a block on his magic unsealed which boosted him more but we don't know by how much, and finally the second letter to 30 y.o hermione in the difference with the other version
His mind being included in the ritual is also meh since it didn't seems to affect anything
I didn't mention it in the other story because i knew mc would make himself a lightsaber and never use it, but the Sword of gryffindor would be OP in GOT, even too strong since a nick would kill anyone except maybe a dragon needing a little more because of their size - mind read once again :(
Wtf is the advanced summoning spell that teleport the target to the user? Sounds OP
If hermione really comes or send some things through, it would be fun to have a flashback of the consequence of mc's action before he left earth
You forgot mc taking the Sword and looting the ministry(included in the more preparation bit i think), then having a block on his magic unsealed which boosted him more but we don't know by how much, and finally the second letter to 30 y.o hermione in the difference with the other version
His mind being included in the ritual is also meh since it didn't seems to affect anything
111/6/2024 c7 nm.brown.24.nb
I really enjoy this story! I hope you continue it as I would love to see what Harry does next. I was thinking of the Black Farmlands and I think the bulk of their army should be stationed there. Food is extremely valuable resource in the north so it would make sense that those lands would need protection. Avalon is also an island so they don't really need a huge standing army to protect it but the Black Farmlands are actually on the mainland with open borders. It would also increase their ability to deploy quickly over land and having a private dock for distribution of troops and goods would further increase mobility and do much to reduce opportunities for infiltration, spying, and sabotage. Seriously. Making the Black Farmlands a massive military and agricultural installation would be very cool. Having a couple centuries stationed on Avalon on rotation would be perfect. I would also like to see what some of the other islands have to offer. Setting up smaller settlements could be very fun/relaxing for Harry as he already has a pretty solid understanding of what is needed. He found coal on the big island so it is entirely possible that he could find a large diamond deposit on one of the smaller islands. Doing something with that would fall in line with his luxury exports very well and he could use the opportunity to pursue jewelry making for fun and profit. He could also set up a successful fishing industry. Lobster, crabs, and huge fish! Yum!
It is coming up on 15 years since he left the wizarding world so hopefully Hermione shows up soon. I can just imagine her shouting "Harry James Potter!" then hugging him in the middle of the street while crying and berating him for leaving her behind. The thought of him panic apologizing and hugging her back while saying something about trying to keep her safe and wanting her to be happy is amusing. I imagine something like that would catch the attention of everyone in Avalon. Especially when she promptly moves into his manor and starts acting like the lady of the land. It would be hilarious if everyone started calling her Lady Potter and the two of them just decided to roll with it because sexism in the medieval world is wild. I'd love to see what kinds of improvements she would make because, let's face it, Harry is smart but Hermione will always be smarter. She would definitely kick off the women's rights movement and campaign against slavery. I could also see her laying the groundwork for environmentally friendly technology and business practices. I think she might also like to build the first university.
I really enjoy this story! I hope you continue it as I would love to see what Harry does next. I was thinking of the Black Farmlands and I think the bulk of their army should be stationed there. Food is extremely valuable resource in the north so it would make sense that those lands would need protection. Avalon is also an island so they don't really need a huge standing army to protect it but the Black Farmlands are actually on the mainland with open borders. It would also increase their ability to deploy quickly over land and having a private dock for distribution of troops and goods would further increase mobility and do much to reduce opportunities for infiltration, spying, and sabotage. Seriously. Making the Black Farmlands a massive military and agricultural installation would be very cool. Having a couple centuries stationed on Avalon on rotation would be perfect. I would also like to see what some of the other islands have to offer. Setting up smaller settlements could be very fun/relaxing for Harry as he already has a pretty solid understanding of what is needed. He found coal on the big island so it is entirely possible that he could find a large diamond deposit on one of the smaller islands. Doing something with that would fall in line with his luxury exports very well and he could use the opportunity to pursue jewelry making for fun and profit. He could also set up a successful fishing industry. Lobster, crabs, and huge fish! Yum!
It is coming up on 15 years since he left the wizarding world so hopefully Hermione shows up soon. I can just imagine her shouting "Harry James Potter!" then hugging him in the middle of the street while crying and berating him for leaving her behind. The thought of him panic apologizing and hugging her back while saying something about trying to keep her safe and wanting her to be happy is amusing. I imagine something like that would catch the attention of everyone in Avalon. Especially when she promptly moves into his manor and starts acting like the lady of the land. It would be hilarious if everyone started calling her Lady Potter and the two of them just decided to roll with it because sexism in the medieval world is wild. I'd love to see what kinds of improvements she would make because, let's face it, Harry is smart but Hermione will always be smarter. She would definitely kick off the women's rights movement and campaign against slavery. I could also see her laying the groundwork for environmentally friendly technology and business practices. I think she might also like to build the first university.